A Note from a Reader

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Bhob
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OK, I'm not a professional writer. I'm not an editor or anyone else with a recognized expertise. I'm a reader. I fell in love with the written word when I was eight years old and I've been in love with it ever since. I've read thousands of books, from just about every type you could name. Fiction and non-fiction, horror, science fiction, science fantasy and science fact, romance, history, religion, mystery, newspapers, magazines, the ingredients on the back of a soda can, the user's manual that came with my computer; if it's written I'll probably read it. But some things really turn me off and, if they're enough of a disruption to the flow, I'll stop reading your story and move on to something else.

My biggest pet peeve is that some people do not use words correctly. I'm not referring to slang here, I'm well aware of slang and use it myself. There are a lot of words in the English language that sound the same when spoken, but destroy a written sentence. Words like "there, their, and they're" are a prime example. Each is a valid word in its own right and, when heard or spoken, most people will recognize the context. In print though, they cause the reader (me) to sometimes have to stop and try to figure out just what is being said. I don't like to have to decipher what I'm reading; I want to enjoy the time I'm giving to your work. There are a lot more of these things than you would guess. A few are: your and you're; since, sense, and cents; it's and its; two, to, and too; grown and groan; throne and thrown. Some writers get so sloppy with this that I make a mental note to bypass everything else they submit. It's a shame, too, because some of these people have good imaginations and set up some very interesting situations. I just can't get past this one problem and I move on.

Most other people who are offering helpful advice will tell you to let someone else read it before you submit your work. This is sound advice. If that person gets confused while trying to read it then probably most other people will, too. Keep in mind that the person you choose should be someone who will give unbiased criticism, not comments based on personal preferences. I submitted a story that went over very well here, but my friend didn't like it. She said she didn't enjoy it all. After talking it through, I found that she doesn't like incest stories and that colored her assessment of everything about the story I had given her to read for me.

You might find it helpful to just let it sit for a day or two, then read it again yourself before you turn it over to someone else. You'll likely find that your first draft has missing words, misspellings due to misplaced keystrokes, extra words where you've typed the same thing twice, and any number of other problems that you didn't notice the first time through. Believe me when I say that we'll notice them when we try to read your story. Use the spell checker, but don't stop there because it can only tell you that the words you've typed are spelled correctly. It can't tell you that those words are really the ones you want to use. If I say, "My dog ran threw the neighborhood," my spell checker won't have a problem with it, but I should have said, "My dog ran through the neighborhood." My word processor also has a grammar checker, but some of the suggestions I get from it would change the meaning of what I've written, or alter the mood that I'm trying to set. Use your tools, but don't be a slave to them.

When in doubt, use a dictionary; I do. Find out if the words you use really mean what you think they mean. I've found that I sometimes completely miss the meaning of a word based on what it sounds like to me. Case in point: I once bought a video that had, on the box, the statement, "not intended to appeal to the prurient." I thought, prurient, pru, prudish, and decided that this must be something very erotic. It turns out that prurient is 'tending to incite lust' and that the statement was trying to warn me that the video doesn't do that. My own misconception cost me twenty bucks, yours might cost you an audience.

Sometimes I even use the thesaurus. I like the word 'gorgeous' and tend to use it a lot. If I'm reading over a story and see that I've used the same word to excess, I'll look it up to see if there are other ways to say the same thing. With gorgeous I find 'superb, sumptuous, and impressive', and I'm directed to also see 'beautiful and grand'. There are lots of terms that say exactly what I want to say without being stuck in a rut. I don't have to say that Tanya is gorgeous and that she has gorgeous hair and a gorgeous face and gorgeous breasts and gorgeous legs and on and on and on with the gorgeous. Spend a few bucks on a good one and it will have words that fit the type of writing that you find on Literotica. It will list alternatives for fuck, cunt, ass, and cock, and others that you'll want to use. Same thing applies to the dictionary. These are real words that real people use and they have real meanings. A good dictionary will list them, tell you what they mean, and give other forms where appropriate; plural, possessive, and so on.

If you're writing for your own pleasure, that's fine. I guess you know exactly what you mean when you write it. But if you're going to write for other people's pleasure as well, take the extra time to insure that they, too, know exactly what you mean when they read it. Let their judgment of your work be based on content and situation, instead of how difficult it is to figure out what's being said. I'll get off my soap box now and go look for a couple of good stories. I hope yours is one of them.

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anton415anton4159 months ago

Thank you for the advice!

MorraRoseMorraRose12 months ago

Using the same word to excess: I wrote a novel in which one character winks at another about five times, spread over 80,000 words. It still started to read as if the character had a tic. I changed his wink to something else in a few cases. (Besides, winking is kind of schmarmy.)

Another good reference: Urban dictionary, for the here and now.

And thank you for this article. I'm in a similar boat. If the writing is poor, I'm gone. There's too much to read out there and too little time.

dmallorddmallordalmost 3 years ago
Thanks for the Input!

You must have been the one to critique my story, pointing out malapropos and misused homophones! Just kidding. Actually, that comment lead me to look more intently at how and what I said. Which led me to search Literotica where I found your article. I found my errant word processor was doing a number on my fast-typing fingers by literally changing my intended words to the misused homophones and the spell checker went right along with it! So, as in your advice in the article, I have taken your word and the anonymous commenters word to more carefully edit my work looking specifically for those pesky words that so irk you and other readers.

Time4astoryTime4astoryabout 6 years ago
Site and sight.

I'd add another which I've seen in a number of stories here the word site.

Site refers to a location, e.g. A building site, a campsite, the literotica site.

Whereas sight refers to something that you see. e.g. She'd set her sights on him, the sight of her heaving breasts made his breath catch, he was a sight for sore eyes.

PalessaDPalessaDover 7 years ago
Totally great points

I also have a serious thing about tenses. Some people think that "drunk" is just a state of inebriation when it's also the past participle of drink. I try not to fall into that trap myself so I'm particularly mindful of it.

erosgodscribeerosgodscribealmost 8 years ago
All fantastic points!

I've been reading from this site, off and on, for a long while now. I agree that too many grammatical errors detracts from the enjoyment of the story...and let's be honest, we read this stuff for the sexual aspects, so being distracted while you're being turned on is always shitty ;-)

I'll be submitting my first story soon, please look for it and I hope to benefit from your feedback!

Holly_ShiftHolly_Shiftabout 8 years ago
Some great points here!

I have always loved both reading and writing; and this may odd to hear from a stranger, but I think you would make a fantastic proofreader. Look up Chapterhouse Publishing. Their courses may be something you're interested in. I hope to be submitting more stories over the coming months, the one I have submitted so far isn't perfect, but seeing positive feedback from it has really encouraged me to keep going, and posts like these are great to read as an aspiring writer!

jenellesljenelleslalmost 9 years ago
Some tips to consider

I liked reading your pet peeves as a reader. Without readers, authors only have one reader. I think you hit it pretty well.

Some things I've noted:

There are some pretty good online dictionaries and thesaurus. It can be useful to see the etymology of a word. That could also be used to flavor a story.

Give it a rest, another great idea, unless you have a deadline for English class.

Read it backward. Start at the end and read forward. You end up paying more attention to the words.

Another tip the works well for me is to have the computer read it to you via text to speech. I've found sentences that were perfect both spelling and grammar. They sound like hell. When they do, it's time to rewrite the sentence with the same meaning and different words or even same words in a different sequence.

Last but not least, when you have it perfect, have someone else read it. Enlisting an editor from Literotica is very useful. These people are editors because of our love of reading. I never change anything. I make suggestions and the story is the author's.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago

I am so glad that I am not the only person with this pet peeve!

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