All Comments on 'A Summer By The Lake'

Thank you, thank you, thank you!

I have been re-reading because there's so much crap lately, and I like to look at comments to see what I've said before and saw your comment about this being published, and went on Amazon to get it.

Now I can read a quality at least semi-new story!

Have become a fan!

Great story. Not too long and not too short. Nice plot

I was kidnaped with this story. Is one of my preferred stories in Literotica.

I can`t find a words to express how munch I was surprised with all the tale.

Please, write more stories like this!

Great Job!

well written, loved it, read four times over, shared it it 5 more times, would be amazing if you wrote more stories similar to this.

I really enjoyed reading this again.

qhml1, thank you for all these tales.

Excellent story. Very well written. A very touching and very well developed love story.

So much of the new stuff is such crap!

"There's just not enough of us to have two churches." - I don't like what I THINK is the point of this statement. Is he saying that if there were enough people that there would be separate black and white churches?!

"A friend came over and asked her for a dance. She looked at me." - While it's good that she looked to him for his okay, gentlemen ask a lady's escort for his permission BEFORE asking the lady to dance.

"Your honor! Income is not enough reason to keep a man from his child." - No one is "keeping" him from his child. He's made NO attempt to see her since they moved to the lake.

Answering my own question, maybe B.B. promised to send a wedding invitation?

Another nit pick - he promised the judge an "advanced copy". It's "advance copy".

Still another nit pick - A furred strip isn't exactly "going native"!

The book "A summer by the lake" is for sale on Amazon.com ;)

If you ever write a full book I'm buying it the first day. I have read this story twice in the last month. It's such a good read with a great flow. I would love to read more!

Good job. Characters well defined and plenty of events to keep our attention.

Constructive ideas: during the last part of your book I could tell you writing & thinking of your characters conversation as you wrote. You forgot about your readers & often I would have to reread a sentence or paragraph again to determine who was saying what. The usual misspelled or incorrect words broke up sentences but I just overlooked them. Thanks, enjoyed your story.

Know what you're talking about? Shit, you wouldn't know your ass from a hole in the ground. You're reminding me of a Billy Goat, you've a hard head and stinking ass.

Way to go Q. Some people are just too ignorant to follow along with a good story. Ignore the anonys, don't have the balls to identify themselves, they don't deserve to read your works.

There were times when I thought that the moral of the story was, "He who has the gold, makes the rules!" Nevertheless, it was a fun read, and I assume that was your intention all along.

Awesome story man love how things went

Liked the story very much. I did not see the protagonist as overbearing; rather, self-assured and uncompromising, perhaps a little coarse. I thought it was a necessary trait because of the way his relationship with Sarah progressed. I also thought his interaction with B.B. allowed us to see another side of the character that I found interesting.

If any character does not have some layers and flaws (even dubious flaws to be judged by the readers), then he or she becomes two-dimensional. And if a character does not have room for growth, change or evolution then that character becomes boring.

If someone gave up on this story after a page or two, so much good story-telling was ignored. That is a shame, merits review and, perhaps, a second chance.

Thanks,

PygmyCoho

Why don't you write your own story if you think this is such a bad one? That way you see how it feels to have to deal with the other idiots on this site who, just like you, seem to think they know everything and so openly display their own dumbass stupidity...jerkoff!

You seem to be a very reputable author on this site. But this is your third consecutive story that I've had to abandon midway.

My issue in this one was with your over-domineering protagonist and the way others just seem to fall in line with his rudeness. I assume it's you projecting on your character and that just doesn't seem to work when you write it from a first-person's perspective.

This is a brilliant story... Where can I find more? 😀

I hardly dare to comment on your observation,after all you surely are a very experimented reader in the categories you mentioned

However most,if not all,of your comment seem very hautain and condescending,"A summer on the lake" maybe a little optimistic but what's wrong with that ?

A platinum card can resolve allmost every problem,hell you can buy some governements with it

Tell me my very literated friend what battle he should or could have lost ? the divorce ? was allready taken care of,there was no way sarah could have lost the guardianship of her daughter

If you had read the story you would have able to see there was a transition from bitchy sarah to the loving sarah but since you only read untill chapter six how could you have known ?

qhml1 is one of the best writers on literotica and you wanting to give him advise feels a "little" misplaced,did i mention that this ,more elaborated,story is published and for sale on AMAZON.COM ?

I liked the beginning of the story with bitchy Sarah but then the story went down hill from there. I felt like Sarah's character wasn't developed. She went from bitchy to love struck with nothing in between. The hero just threw money at every problem and some knightly lawyers saved the day. Another commenter said that he made Jesus look bad.... which is pretty much true. He had no flaws and a platinum credit card. A guy like that would go bankrupt in the real world. People will see that I'm just an anonymous commenter and disregard what im saying. I've been reading on this site for 6 years and have finished all the top 200 stories in the romance scify and nonhuman categories. I know what i'm talking about and this story should have been placed in the scyfi section cause it felt like I was reading an episode of the twilight zone. Thank you for writing this story and giving it your best effort but I couldn't get past page 6. I'm not writing this to dump on u but to give you some advice. make sure you develop all your characters and give them flaws so we human's can relate to them. Not everything in life works out the way we want it to, platinum credit cards can't win every battle. The hero didn't lose a single fight. This story started off realistic then branched off into fantasy.

thanks ... Scotty

Practice safe internet perversion

This was the best story I have ever read. It has great characters, humor, depth, you tell a story so well. I could not stop reading it.I really hope I see more of your work. Keep up the great writing!!!

Your literary style has bloomed! This story is very well told with all major characters well defined without over doing them. Very heartwarming. More like it would be excellent! Thanks

I can't believe you consider this a slow burn. Great character development and a very touching story. Any chance for another chapter?

I read it again and was just as fascinated as I was the first time. Thank you, thank you, thank you.

That's when I finished reading this delightful love story. (Don't tell my spouse I enjoyed a love story, please. She'll think I'm ready to turn in my misogynist badge.) It was well worth the loss of sleep. (I wouldn't have been able to sleep anyway, I was too wrapped up in it to even try to sleep.)

I haven't managed to read all of qhml1's work, but I'm working on it. I've read quite a few and haven't been disappointed yet, which is rare for me 'cause I'm picky as all get out in what I read.

I don't know what story the negative Anonny's read, but I hope they get a life and learn to appreciate good work.

An excellent romantic tale.

Excellent work! I could totally see this being a movie. So descriptive.

Superb writing. Better than many made for tv films.

I would run it by lifetime and others.

Just outstanding work.

One of my favorites have read it numerous times and in my favorites list. The ex on both sides were crazy and Sara was all messed up at first but H. H. Fell in love and so did she now B B was the highlight of the story.

Ron

cowboyridecc@yahoo, com

Again you have shown your talent. This is a superlative romance novel. I hope that a 4 syllable word does stump some of critics that strain at camel and swallow a fly.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

What a very enjoyable story. Keep up the good work

I loved your yarn. Keep up the good work.

I recently read your updated bio where you said you published a novel based on this short story. Found it on amazon and purchased it. It was interesting the way you filled out the story with more detail. You changed a few minor details I think mostly to let it flow better. Anyway. I enjoyed it. It was worth the $3 I spent. Keep it up

Thank you for your time, effort, energy, talent and imagination in posting your work.

It is most enjoyable and worth my time to read it.

I, too, would like to know what B.B. promised to send the judge.

The realtor stuff could have been left out for as much as it added to the story.

Why are commenters put down because they haven't written anything? Siskel and Ebert were two HIGHLY thought of movie critics, who as far as I know, never made a movie. MOST critics never created anything. Not having creative talent doesn't deny you the right to criticize others.

What a read this was! Thoroughly enjoyed it from start to finish. Looking forward to seeing more!

I read a number of snooty remarks and you are entitled to them.

Now before you start doing the pigeon puffing why don't you all put up some of your work so we can if you have a leg to stand on when you start throwing out your less than subtle remarks

Not too derivative or cliched either. My one wish is for better attention to the subjects in your sentences. Don't know the grammatical terminology, but often it's hard to know who is being referenced, or who's talking.

I enjoyed it a lot. A little on the "Lifetime Movie" side of things but overall it was a fun read. Thanks.

But you have quite a few stories where the hero is a saint to that extent that it makes it unrealistic. Still, your writing skills are some of the best on Lit and I enjoy reading your stories.

It's good for me Anon. Very Good. Thanks for Sharing.....

sorry, but the story doesn't work for me. to call the characters woodcut would be an understatement, everything is overexplained, and the hero makes jesus look like a selfish whimp. I could have lived with the subdued sex scenes, if there had been any meat, but I actually can't find a single reason to read on. It's too predictable anyway - the evil estate woman will probably attempt an assault or something, which will end well because of the hero's heroicness. at least the author knows how to spell.

I cannot tell you how many times that I have read this story but I like it more each time I read it. I don't have to tell you that it is in my favorites do I.

Ron Texas

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So far as I have read your stories I feel they are worth 5* except for chapter 6 where you go into explicit sex description. in some of the chapters you have them disappear into the bed room, We all know what happens but it is left there. I lowered the score to 4* over all. So far Woodmanone and you are the best. I agree with one comment that lists you with Moogplayer and I agree with his over all idea but I would rate him lower due to the sex descriptions. But his stories are superb other then that.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

I think wet behind the ears kid shouldn't be givif a 2writer on here any comments, constructive or not. Shut up, jerk your little cock off, read the damn stories, boy!

Good storyline but you lack some writing skill.

You have to let the reader figure things out by himself and elaborate some suspens. You need to take your time.

Not easy tough, keep it going.

As a consistent reader I have read and reread this story many times, just gives me a lift when I need it. Please keep them coming. Such a talented writer deserves many accolades.

I like your ability to write different types of stories that you have given to us, your readers.

JACSR

I enjoyed this little tale and it is one anyone no matter what age can read ! It's amazing to see it in Literotica but I'm not bitchin .. thanks, I liked this one too Scotty

between Moog Player & QHML1 they have put the best stories out there. I once got the 2 of them confused as to which one wrote a summer by the lake. my bad L O L . like to go back an reread them & pick up something I missed. I use to ask my late wife when she was reading a book I had read ask her what page she was on & tell what came next, for some reason I retain what I read for a long time. since there are only 5 stars to give I see at least 6 if not more stars

only one word fit to describe "fantastic"

Yes it had s I dont know how many times that I have read it. Just a very good story.

its ups and downs but all people in real life have that. B B made the story in my thinking. Not a lot more to say except the people just seem to come to life on the pages. In my favorite

Ron Texas

This makes the 4th or 5th time I've read this story, but it still has the same effect on me that it did when I read it the first time. Great Tale!

MoogPlayer

I was completely enraptured by this story. I hadn't intend to but I got so engrossed in it that I ended up reading start to finish in one sitting. I particularly loved the character of BB. You captured very well the precociousness of a young child in the 21st century. It never ceases to amaze me how the younger generation is so much more worldly than I was at their age. I also really like that the story was about the development of love without much of a sexual component. Enduring love has to be deep down and sex can only be one of the components. Your story showed this very well. I only have one niggle: it's eminent domain not imminent domain. Look forward to much more of your writing.

second time I have read it. find things I missed 1 st time. my late wife before we married had times like that cat & dog fights at 1 time or another & in the end we were married 27 + years before I lost her . always up & down but I wouldn't known what wonderful life that I had with her. took me 6 times to find her.

this is the second time I read your story, It is a great read, I look forward to more of your stories. Just love BB & HH.

As much as i like the story,i must have read it about 5 times and it is in my favorites but let's be realistic,nothing could have happend without his money,consider this story without the money and it would have been a real short one

In my favorites read it many times. B.B. really shines in the story. keep writing 5 stars plus

Ron Texas

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I wouldn't be me if I didn't have a few nitpicks, though!

“I had flat out refused her, and she hinted around about imminent domain, and I circumvented him by having part of my property and a bit of my neighbors' placed on the historic register.”

Did the developer have a sex change? First, you refused HER, then circumvented HIM?! And it’s “eminent” domain.

The game is “badminton”, NOT “batmitton”!

And while not an “error”, per se, the slang term for briefs is “tighty whities”, NOT “tidy whities”.

one of the best iv read in a long time

Best of the best.

I've enjoyed all of your stories that I have taken the time to read, but this one was special. I wasn't kidding about my "Moog Player" comment. As far as I'm concerned, nobody one this site tells a better romance tale. If he endorses your tales, you have really arrived. I gave it Five Stars...Cheers!

Cinco Estrellas, Amigo!

This story is in my favorites. Two / three people hurt in different ways find true love. Such a heart warming story.

Ron

Texas

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Most stories here follow the same plot lines. Yours is very refreshing. Please continue writing. Your fans (and future fans) appreciate your efforts.

Thank you.

Ok I loved the story , but I have a bone to pick. EVERY STORY I have read mentioned boxers as underwear for the boy or men. I bought a pair once and used it for ONE DAY. NEVER AGAIN IT WAS THE ABSOLUTE STUPIDEST MISTAKE IN UNDERWARE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Every time I just pulled up my britches it bunched up very uncomfortable. HELLO!!!! Boxers are not sexy they are stupid! tidy whiteys are sexy and show the curve of the dick. boxers can ONLY show a hard on. tidy whities show everything except skin. OK boxer wearers why do you like cloth bunched up one side or up you ass? timlauder@yahoo.com YOIU HAVE GOT TO BE KIDDDING!!! BOXERS ARE HELLL TO WEAR!!! I prefer bare or tidy whities PERIOD

Great story. Thanks for sharing.

Tony NZ

I've been reading stories on Literotica for over a year now and while most of them are good and some of them are dogs "A Summer By The Lake" is the best I've read. It has a great plot,real people,a bad guy,a greedy corporation,good family values,and of course a real good guy(hero),and just enough sex to let everyone know that it takes place in the real world.

Keep on writing,hope to see more like this one.

There aren't enough words to describe this storyline.. Just let me say, well written!

I think you should consider writing that novel you talk about here and on your biography page. Your books would fly off the shelf just like in this storyline. Than you. :-)

Dont know how many times I have read it seems it just gets better. B.B. is a real card she makes the story better than it is. I liked that line(Iwe will be her for another 15 months I should have you trained by than) The reverand was like described a hell and brimstone preacher and all around good guy. 5 stars for sure.

Ron Texas

The story would just be good, B.B. makes it great.

A read and a reread or two.

I have read this story many times and it is in my favorites. B.B. really makes the story what a smart young lady. Will there be a follow up story possibly about B.B.

Ron in Texas

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Well, this is the third time reading this. I still can't get over B B. She cracks me up.

This is the third book I've read, and they just keep getting better. I've never seen so many new writers with new books, it's just fantastic!!!

5 stars, very well written with excellent dialogue, background and location description to be able to visualize the house the lake and the area. I know a couple who went through very similar circumstances before they married. The kids from both sides were pushing the parents all they way to the altar and threatened to plan the wedding without them. Some things are just meant to be.

This story was placed in my favorite's list immediately after I read it. I just now discovered your stories and I'm quite certain that I will enjoy them as much as I did this one.. I gave you 5 stars because I think you did an excellent job with this tale, and I look forward to reading the rest of them.

MoogPlayer

I love a story that tears you up and turns out well! I read this straight through and thoroughly enjoyed it. Thank you, Mike

This is a great story of love and devotion of two people that got off on a rocky start. Keep up these stories. Reader from the Bayou State

I think most of the readers of this story have said about all that can be said about. It was well written, had just enough sex in it to make it wonderfully good, had much love, and respect. It showed that there are still people in this world that care more for others than they do about themselves, even though they have lots of money. Very very good, and thank for sharing it with all of your fans.

Jim

ONE OF MY FAVORITES. IN MY FAVORITES LIST I CANNOT TELL YOU HOW MANY TIMES THAT I HAVE READ IT. EVERY ONE OF THE CARACTERS IN THE STORY JUST SEEM TO COME TO LIFE ON EACH PAGE. B.B. IS OUTSTANDING IN THE STORY SHE PUTS IT OVER THE TOP.NOW HER FATHER(THE TOTLAL PRICK) REALLY PLAYED VERY LITTLE ROLE IN THE STORY BUT I CAN SEE WHY HE HAD TO BE INCLUDED. KEEP WRITING OUTSTANDING STORY.

RON TEXAS cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

It is a newspaper's duty to print the news and raise hell.

Wilbur F. Storey, American editor, 1818-1884

I believe this is the quote you were thinking about on page 1.

Very good story by the way. I loved how you used Ed to introduce the older Harry and find happiness for Jane.

Beautifully written masterpiece of romance. I have lost the title and searched for it again for months. Definitely worth the search.

great job qhml1

I loved your story.

Especially that first meetin and its mention at the end.

You developed the characters rather well. Everyone of us love that peachy kid, B.B.

The only bad patch in the story is where the ex returns. Not a problem with wording and stuff. Its just that, I don't think the reader is really invested in that character. I just think no one was really interested in him. You could have ended his part with him losin his job and no one's heard of him since, or somethin like that. That's all.

Once again, loved the story. Without doubt, up there among the best.

Bro, you rock!!! This was by far one of the best stories I've read so far and I do believe that if you'd made a novel on this with you're own ideas, dialogues and prose, it would be a best seller and probably made into a movie.

Then when I couldn't find it again or remember the title I looked for over a year and when I saw the author's name I knew. Excellent Novella, I'll probably read it for the third time before too long. A few misspellings here and there but overall, just peachy. I think I'll read some more of your work now that I've found you again. In fact, I know I will. Now is a great time to start.

douglas569d@aol.com

I have read it many times and it just gets better. You have a good man that his wife paid to have him killed and a good woman that was abused mentally and physically by her scum of a husband so was his daughter. Than goodness that H.H. Sarah and B B got together to become a loving family. Ron. Texas. cowboycc@yahoo.com

What can I say that hasn't already been said! First class, thankyou.

Excellent story line with minimal sex to sell the story (not that I'm opposed to sex!) but I believe it is the sign of an truly great erotic writer to produce such a story without sex being the primary focus! One of the top stories I have ever read on here (definitely on the top 5 and I have been reading on this site for 20+ years or whenever it started!)! Keep writing...you stories bring out so many great emotions!

GREAT STORY VIOLANCE,MONEY,CONSPICARY, AND LOVE. THE CHARACTER OF B.B. REALLY MADE THE STORY AND SARAH HAD TO LEARN TO LOVE AGAIN NOW HARRY SMOOTH FELL IN LOVE AND DID WHAT EVER IT TOOK TO KEEP B.B. ANS SARAH NEAR HIM. READ THIS STORY NUMEROUS TIMES AND WILL CONTINUE TO READ. 5 STARS PLUS.

IS THERE A FOLLOW UP STORY???

RON TEXAS

I really get tired of the readers that are constantly complaining about how the writers need proofreaders,editors,ect..Finding little nothings to say are distracting. Come on people these are not English professors or professional writers.All the bull shit things that you are griping are just that,get over it and get on with it. They are only distracting if you let them be.And let's face it most of the time it's stuff that you have to be looking for in order for it to be a problem.The writers are going to write like the areas that they are from,speak in a way that they would normally speak.If you don't like that then look for your Yankee cityfied writers and read them.

More than once before I finished the story, this old crusty and hairy logger found himself with something in his eye causing it to weep.

LOVED B.B. Just loved her.

Best LW story ever.

one of the best characters on the site. Ranks right up there with Lindsey in "Love among the elk".

Opening scene, top notch.

Harry is a well defined character too. Sarah not so much. As many times as I've read this story, I never got why he'd be attracted to her beyond BB of course. What about her character was outstanding? Granted she had been hurt, but what interaction with Harry did we see that really told us why there would be an attraction?

Eminent domain...not imminent.

Never did find out what BB told the judge. I figured the judge would get an invite to the wedding.

And for all that, I've read the story several times so you are doing something really right. Thank you for a great story.

I HAVE READ THIS STORY NUMEROUS TIMES AND WILL CONTINUE TO READ IT. A GREAT ROMANCE STORY A WOMAN AND YOUNG GIRL WITH A LOT OF PROBLEMS BUT THEY HAD A ANGEL LOOKING OVER THERE SHOULDER AND BB HAD IT FIGURED OUT A LONG TIME AGO. SARAH TREATED BADLY BY HER HUSBAND MOSTLY MENTAL FOUND A LOVING GIVING MAN IN HARRY THAT ONLY WANTED HER AND BB TO BE HIS. 5 STARS

RON

the star of the story was BB, all others were bit players.

I wish you had a better proof reader though. It was difficult to know who was actually speaking at times, and the word errors were distracting.

This was a wonderful story, and the lack of erotica in it made it better. A good writer does not need it to write a good story.

Ed

What a sweet, heartfelt, tongue-in-cheek cute love story :). Made me smile and sometimes even chuckle out loud :). It is always a pleasure to read about a decent man and a developing love :). Your writing style is quite brilliant. Well done!

I read this "cover-to-cover". Yeah! At nine pages, it's a short story. But good. Well written. A true romance. TWO THUMBS UP!!!!!!!!!!!