All Comments on 'Acquisition'

Grammatical errors I told granny she suped up vows and constants

JimBob44

Thankyou for an entertaining story. You provided a great plotline and terrific characters. All that a reader could ask for!

I tend to appreciate everything you write, even when it seems you have found the lowest, most self-absorbed people to put in your stories. Somehow it rings true. Those are the ones who are looking for a naive good person to leach off of.

Norman Sands

I am going to read this great story over and over

The grammar, and spelling were not so bad at all. Length? Was fine, and told the story.

Realism was fine, and what was needed to have suspension of disbelief taken care of was there and no problems that I saw.

All in all a good read, and enjoyed it plenty. :)

Yes you are long and confusing. And you are also a great story teller. I just wasted a whole day reading your stuff. Keep writing. I love what you do.

That was great! Cheating bitch wife, incest, nasty mother in law, and dirty cops and still a happy ending. I loved it.

Enjoyed it - Would have liked a sequel to see where their relationship went... 5*

Love the character Donald Pellichet.

Yes, too many character and jumped about at times, but still a great story. 5/5 Thanks, Bill

Particularly loved Tizzy. Well done.

Been to N'Awlins but nowhere else in LA. I am a southern boy, however. Your stories, with their perfect dialogues, make me feel right at home - I know those people, and I can picture them so vividly, even if I've never been to DeGarde. Beautiful writing, great story line, terrific character development. Same is true for every one of your stories. Love them all! Please keep writing.

Jump aroud too much might wanna sort that out. But still, great story.

The righteous won, the baddies got screwed and all done with a sense of humour. 5*s all the way

This is a great story. Could there be another chapter with Kizzy and Tommy????????

Would love to see more with Kizzy and Tommy, felt like it was cut too short at the end. I want to see them get married, have kids, and be successful in their chosen careers. Also would like to see if Kaitlyn can clean herself up and become a success as a lawyer.

Ending too soon

Bask in your pleasure of writing, another good story!

I enjoyed the heck out of this one. Wish I could keep reading, but my Mother in Law is coming for a visit and I need to get off my ass and help the Mrs clean house. Don't know why we do it every damn time she comes, she still finds all kinds of fault with the place. Heck, the drill sergeants in Basic weren't as bad as she is.

Loved it, keep having fun and I'm happy reading

Would a beautiful Kaitlin let herself go that much even if she was a self centered bitch? I think not. Otherwise a good story.

Mike the Irishman 🍀

I enjoyed this one. It goes to prove that not every LW story has to end up being a BTB story.

Love the story. I think it great. AAAAAA++++++

Get Real!

NONE of the things you say about yourself here are true!

I need an editor. Nope! Fewer errors than most edited works. Go figure??

it's too long. Nope, Right length but not broken up into 25 chapters on the site. Better this way.

It jumps around too much. No, a perfect read.

There's too many people to keep track of. OK, delete two, maybe. LOL

It's in the wrong category. Well, Kaitlin IS in love with Kaitlin, right??

This is stupid shit. Seemed pretty normal Except most folks don't get the big $$ settlement. Good for Tom

I suck. Well, not sure if that's a social commentary, or a statement of your sexual proclivity... LOL

KEEP WRITING> I'll keep reading. Loved this one.

I really enjoyed this story.

I noticed in your other stories as well, that you have a tendency of creating way too many characters without giving them any depth or a proper introduction, yet you're jumping between their povs like crazy, making the stories feel like all over the place.

Loved this story. But I was struck at that scene where Tommy watches Kizzy dancing to Haydn and thought ohhh I want to hear that. Couldn't find Haydn's Cello Concerto Number 9 in C minor anywhere though. So I substituted his Cello Concerto in C Major. I pictured her dancing to it just as well.

Loved it, just saying

How can anyone that has read this story , not absolutely love it? A wonderful tale that I totally enjoyed. LP

JimBob44 has some real talent and a LOT of twisted dark humor. I laughed my ass off all the way through this long train wreck of a story and wanted more.

I think it is a great story, even the second time I've read it.

good, interesting. always a self centered Bitch taking advantage of a good guy.

There are several - actually, just a few - writers here who have a genuine sense of voice. Always a pleasure to read, and to reread, your stories.

Laughed my ass off. Damn, you are a really good storyteller. I could almost picture the characters in my mind.

Fabulous storytelling. Yes, you could benefit from an editor, but it doesn't detract from the story.

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i love the authors note after the end... for some reason it gives me a idiotic smile

Great story!

11/10 John Wayne Bobbits!!!!!

I enjoy jimbob44's stories so much. I read them often. Great character development.

A delightful story. Would have liked a longer ending, courtship, maybe some sex, new love and all that, but hey its your story. Just glad you wrote it and i was able to read it. Thanks

I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again. Really like your style.

Good job, thanks for sharing your work!

Nothing wrong with this story. It’s fine as it is. Only thing I’d like is a sequel about Tommy and Kizzy

The ups and downs of life, the story finished with new hopes and dreams, well done.

There is nothing wrong with this story. Keep writing your stories for "you" and I'll keep reading. Thanks

Story and characters were excellent. What I want to comment on is the structure. The start was good and captured this reader. The humor was excellent. In the middle of the story it went a little fast for me. The outstanding part was the end. The story slowed down, it seemed all open items were sufficiently addressed, and you didn't put an overly obvious conclusion at the end. The feeling I got from the end was a good one. I was left wanting to read more from this author but not looking for a sequel. Excellent writing - carry on.

Your to hard on yourself. It was a great story. Iam waiting on the next chapters. Want to see how everyone comes out.

Great story keep on writing hope there is more to this story

I disagree with your list at the end.

Yes

Yes

maybe

maybe

maybe

maybe

No

HELL TO THE FUCKIN' NO!!

Again, good story, good characters, not enough well-described sex....

Very nice. Thank you for sharing.

Fun to read...

Nice..........

I would have liked more from the ending! More about his relationship with Kizzy! More about his po boys business! It just seemed you lost interest in the story and brought it to an abrupt end. I do love your stories and the way you bring your characters alive! 5*

Dobbin55

I agree entirely with all the 'disclaimers'. I was going to give up on the errors often, but persevered and realised the author captured the dumb ass participants beautifully. In the end it was a good enjoyable laugh.

really great story. Do you have any female M/C's that aren't sluts?

I disagree with your own comments, it did jump around a bit, but it added to the story, characters were well developed, I agree with Dobbins, build on this, be great to read about his and Kizzy's lives, all the great people at the drive through too.

Be nice to read about Kaitlin struggling to make her own way, and her horrible mother.

5* all the way.

Love the sense of humor in your characters. Great story, would love to see the relationship develop between Kizzy & Tommy. They seem like a match set.

One of my favorites. Always love me a JB44 story.

It's so nice to read a story and realize you wish the people in it were your neighbors. OK, some of the people in the story... I put on the Haydn Concerto and pictured a dancer lost in it and have to agree: My god that's so beautiful.

Yes

i still enjoy reading it every year. JD

No it’s not too long. Great story. Would love to stop in and eat at tommy’s

Don't know what to make of all the characters in this story. I had read it before but didn't remember it. Crazy what us crazy people will put up with for so long, guess that's what makes us 'human', fun story and sad to but an entertaining read. 5 stars

Liked the story andthe way it turned out

Damn it! You should have put the disclaimer at the front of the story.

I read the whole thing and liked it.

I disagree with your disclaimer, it was fine the way it is. What you do need is to write Tommy and Kizzy into another story where we find out how life went for them. They don’t need to be the MC’s. Just a paragraph or two talking about them, revealing their fate won’t be fine.

Very nice story, JoeBob, I enjoyed it. One thing, and this is just my opinion, any parent who would name their daughter “Henrietta Sundrine” should be locked up for cruelty to a child. And child endangerment. And whatever else they could lock them up for. Going through childhood with a name like that is traumatic for a child. Trust me, been there, done that.

Otherwise, a great story.

5⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Selfish, manipulative lard ass bitch got exactly what she deserved. Would love some additional threads to see how things end for them.

5 stars !! BUT, it needs a little more of an ending with tommy and kizzy .

sorry to see the author put himself down at the end . in a way i actually felt a little pity for kaitlyn,BUT she brought it all on herself .

Thanks for a splendiferous read! well done, no not too long though I di have some trouble with tracking just who was who a couple times. Overall, good job!

Delightful. Takes me back, old times there are not forgotten. So very well written. Thank you, sir, for a straightforward tale about real people.

I absolutely love the character of Donald Pellichet.

Are you kidding me with the ending comments? This is one of your best work even my second time reading it.

Disregard the negative comments JB you are doing a great job entertaining your readers…..

Revisit after a long while, think I enjoyed this even more, this time.

Frankly I am pissed. There was no warning up front that the story included brother-sister incest. I ran to the last page and saw the tags.

WHAT THE HELL ARE TAGS DOING ON THE LAST PAGE OF A STORY? Do people actually routinely go to the last page to check for tags?

Tags should be on the first page, not the last.

For this story? One star.

JPB

JPB can F off.

All of the above is correct but I still enjoyed your work. My wife is from Bator Rouge and I love driving around the countryside. Keep up the good work. MtM.

to those whining about some of the derails , grow a pair and stop complaining . it's FICTION !!

Your stories are awesome!