All Comments on 'Damascus'

Spineless cunt took the lying, cheating whore back. Stev must lay in bed every night, jerking off to the idea of his wife fucking other men. I'm sure she does, anyway. And...that's assuming she's let him out of chastity. Pathetic cunts.

has been lying to him from day one

One, if he was sent to the Middle East as much as he said he would have know that she would be required to dress the same as the rest of the Syrian women.

Two. If she cared about him as much as she proclaimed she would never have gotten in a situation like that.

Three. If she was the big assassin as she claimed she could have taken him out before having sex three times with him.

I can understand the turning on and off the killer instinct but cause that's what all cops and military have to do to stay sane. You made it sound like she had been in a spot like that before and if she was as proficient with all types of weapons she could have taken out Hassan when he started on her breasts. I think maybe you watched to much Bond or Kill Bill before writing this.

Creepy in an interesting and a good way. It sure broke the mold.

This five is for you.

Jedd Clampett

But I must agree with your first paragraph - it's obvious that you got tired of this story and ended it quickly. I know it's been over a year since this was published, but I still think there's a place for another chapter. Maybe someday you can re-visit this. 4*

...it was ALL a set up.

Only problem with this story is that the resolution came up too quickly.

I get Anna asking for forgiveness asap... but I don't believe for a second that Mark could give it to her this fast.

Deserved a longer ending... where him and Anna actually put in some work to rebuilt their relationship... and with Mark telling his boss he either find someone else to deal with their Middle-East business or to just write him a letter or recommandation, 'cause he's done with that shit!

Don't know about a sequel, though... let's just keep dead terrorist die.

She is the one that really pushed to go there.

She is the one that insisted on the chess set (neither of them play it)

She is the one that had them in that bank at that time.

Coincidences?

Seems more like a secret agent mission than an accident, more like having sex with the bad guy was all part of the plan from before they had even left home.

Your wife has to suck and fuck a man she detests to save your sorry ass and you can't get over it? You don't deserve her! I'd be down on my knees kissing her ass or any part of her anatomy she desired. I had figured out she was going to save them but didn't figure she would be a commando. Still enjoyed the story it was well written. It gets a four from me.

Need a sequel where she finds the guy she fucked knocked her up and that she can’t bring herself to get an abortion as she says, “the baby is an innocent”.

Can hubby bring himself to raise it?

stars. Five for a sequel that has him get rid of her.

No secrets? Little late for that. How about if I prefer a woman who needs ME to protect HER? How about if I need a woman whose past won't cause our child to be abducted? How about if I need a woman who didn't lie and defraud me to get me to marry her? In any case, you better get checked for STD's. I hear HIV takes months to show. Thanks for saving me I guess. Have a good life and be honest with your next guy.

Eight? Is that counting today? Anything else I should know?

Still watching you huh? Glad we never had any babies. Your possible disappearance would be difficult to explain unless they killed us too. Probably a random home invasion perhaps? Something easy to explain.

You wanted to protect me? How about just saying no don't go? You're rich right? Truth is you wanted to dabble in the game again.

Very conflicted by this one. If her husband isn't strong, as he freely admits constantly, he won't have he strength to get over this.

And I am so DONE with ultra hot 110 pound superkiller women. Just...done.

It makes a sort of sense. We have no idea what Omar wanted to do.

And frankly, when she flipped the switch in her head, how could she not see her husband as weak victim? She couldn't even wink at hubby to save him some devastation? No?

Workable but clumsy. If I don't like it, it is mostly related to my tastes than the quality of the writing, which you cannot help. Mostly.

Whatever you ate to give you that bad dream --- don't ever eat it again!

A couple from Yachats ,Oregon was kidnapped by a couple of escaped convicts, with their infant daughter. The wife fucked both of the kidnappers willingly to keep her family alive. She was a hero, I don't know if they stayed married, but I hope they are well and happy together still. Look up the Movie "TAKEN" it's a true story. Some of the officers were involved in the investigation shared part of the details with me. I was a member of a drug task force in a prior life and knew several of those officers.

This story is a fantasy but within the realm of possibility given the size of this world and the shit that goes down. However the federal government killer is pretty far fetched.

I can only hope her raghead gave her syphilis.

It almost hurts to see these damaged little boys. They give women all power and are helpless. It's no wonder their women cheated on them. All they are able to do is make snarky comments on stories they can't understand. The don't have the talent or imagination to write, and don't understand that their comments don't change a story. A story says the wife changed and was faithful and devoted, they think the story changes because they write a comment saying "not true!" How silly! The characters do what the author says not what their twisted tiny minds believe. Poor Anonymous, you almost have to feel sorry for them, almost. They don't believe humans can change and so deny what sets us apart from animals. Because they are so limited no one can stand to be around them long term which means women prove their prejudices every time and they never understand why. Frankly, this site and the world would be a far better place if they ended their miserable existence. No one would know they were gone… except perhaps by becoming aware that the world is suddenly a happier place.

Jonnyrebel82

As a trained killer, why wouldn't the wife had simply killed Hassan the first time he took her out of sight of his henchmen? Then the killer who's proficient with all kinds of weapons could simply have called to the henchman and killed him when he stepped away from the husband. no, this slut wanted to get fucked by Hassan. She enjoyed humiliating her husband. There is no other explanation. She explained that she enjoyed being fucked by better cocksmen than her husband and with her vast experience fucking all those other men she probably knew what he'd be like and saw her chance.

I liked it very much

Since its a Jane Bond fantasy its pointless to argue details, or even plot. The idea is, if your wife fucked a group of bikers to persuade them not to kill you, how would you treat her thereafter? A man might use his fists to save his wife. A woman might use her pussy to save her husband.

A conflicting and emotional plot. Your rendition was worth reading. Thank You.

And pardon the anonymous comment, but thanks for allowing it. Most of us deserve it.

That's all I have to say about it

A bit superficial in the character development. After she got on Hassan's lap I was convinced that I had wandered into a humiliation story by mistake but then I remembered that good old Stev would never do that and stuck it out to the end wondering how he would ever going to forgive. Even if she turned into Beatrix Rose and save me I would not be able to forget.

I completely agree with Harry VA, these were my thoughts too. And afterwards nothing she would say or do would make it better: she is a whore. The hidden past is also something what makes their marriage a laugh. What else she has she forgot to mention?

I was entertained. Is that not enough? Five stars. And the lack of ten-inch dicks helped keep the fiction alive.

I almost never read a story on this site that I rate a five. But this was a fun story. It is clear you spent a fair amount of time on it. I think it was pretty well executed ( so to speak) if not implausible. Never the less it was entertaining, nice job.

Usually I like your stories but not this one. First of all it's just too implausible that the bank robber would start flirting with a woman. I mean, come on, he's got better things to do! Get in, get out. He wouldn't spend a half-hour playing hanky panky with some blonde.

Second, the husband was way too quick about forgiving her. Yes she saved him, but was the way she did it really necessary? Even if it was, the husband wouldn't get over the image quickly. While you sometimes don't go into enough detail in your other stories, it at least takes some time for the wife to be fully forgiven. In this story it happen within an hour or two after the left the bank.

Here's hoping your next story is better.

Did they buy the chess set?

It's absurd and not even well done. It's like a high school student in 11th grade trying to write a James Bond erotic short story. It's ridiculous it's unreadable and it's doesn't even make sense within the framework.

Let's assume for one second the wife is his amazing super secret James Bond type of agent. Why did she have to fuck the terrorist?

A good story and a good read....And if we look at the other stories (except one) that showed today, this should be considered a masterpiece...4*

3* you could have done better, also diseases were not addressed

Some commenters pointed out that this was a new plot among so many other stories on LW that follow often repeated schemes. But sorry:the story of a wife with a secret super-spy past was already done at least once ("Do I Know The Woman I Married?" by The Wanderer). And the story of a wife that offers herself to a terrorist leader to avoid the death of others (and than later does the same thing as government's agent) was done by Britease in "Terrorist". So: nothing really new, just your very own version of already used sceneries. But you did it fine, the story was gripping. I just missed a description of his feelings in the end - as another commenter expressed it: she emasculated him in course of her rescue mission. IMO, he will probably never be able to overcome this, the relationship is doomed. And anyway she is so far off (killed 8 people, convincingly played a lover for the terrorist and minutes later shot him in cold blood), that no sane man could ever trust her.

4*

Should have been in Satire.

If you know anything about electrical motors , or electricity 101 , then you understand about the three phases of electricity.

Well , this story was wired up backwards of the usual stereotype that's often used in this category.

I like that the author attempted to try something different . But , I don't know how I would feel being married to literally , " The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo ".

She saved his life , but in doing so , she basically emasculated him in the process.

So going back to wiring up an electric motor out of phase , sometimes this will cause the motor to run backwards , which usually makes a wreck of the system that its a part of.

Okay

With good writing, until it went over the top a little then went to crazy hell.

Why didnt she just say she studied karate in college and had learned about shooting during weekend camping and hunting trips with her uncle who taught her how to suck and fuck?

This is a story written about unusual circumstances, and the challenge is to make those circumstances into a plausible reason for cheating.

I've seen several of these, and this is as good as any. It fails, ultimately, as these stories all do, but it's a good try. It's not the usual slut and wimp, evil slut married to godlike hero or giant dong story, so I'll give you four stars. I don't like the superspy/highly trained killer aspect. That's the cliche part, even if it's the woman, this time. It's well written, but I don't like your scene shift markings.

Thanks for something different.

too formulistic to really be enjoyable.

We always ask for something different, then we get it and bitch about it!

As for SystemShock's idea of using her POV, then we lose the twist at the end.

Keep 'em comig!

Not the best story I've read on this site. Not the worst. Closer to the worst than the best. Interesting idea, but a bit deus ex machina. Maybe if this were a bit longer it wouldn't seem so contrived.

it is about as bad a story as I have seen on this site, keep trying.

Did you actually subvert your own cliche? Instead of your usual literally retarded women who completely lack moral compasses and any form of common sense or decency, you make a woman who acts like one on the surface, but is actually a former Super Cop and legal assassin. She figured out the best way to handle the situation given what was at her disposal, and it WASN'T just a happy accident or one of those two seconds a day when the broken clock was right.

This almost has the feel of being a jab at those stories where the husband suddenly becomes Jason Bourne when faced with a crisis situation.

That said, the highest I can go with this is a 3. Until the very end it reads like all of your other stories. Characters are lame and uninteresting throughout the majority of the story, and even at the end only the wife merits so much as a raised eyebrow. I would much rather have read a story about her life before she met what's-his-face and adopted the persona of the braindead pond scum you typically write about. I'll be honest; the only reason I stuck around was because I immediately got the feeling the wife was up to something when she started making nice with Mr. ISIS, whatever his name was. From there it was more morbid curiosity than anything. For a moment I thought you were going to have the wife use her body to save herself and sell hubby up the river, then have the Marines or whatever swoop in too save the day and have hubby take the bitch back even after she was ready and willing to let him die. That's your bread and butter, having the wives do ridiculous things and still manage to worm their way back into the marriage with no effort, sacrifice or personal growth on their part. I wanted to see if you'd take it to the ultimate extreme: have hubby take her back after she more or less tried to murder him.

But I actually got a pleasant surprise for once! Still that surprise doesn't make everything before it any better; all that is still trademark stev2244 all the way. Would've been much better if told from the wife's POV. Less of the cowering cuck, more of the calculating tactician.

So yeah, I give it a 3. Better than I've rated anything else I've read from you, so that's something, right?

Fuck but you can come up with some stupid ass reasons for a wife to cheat, next you'll have the husband sucking cock while wife laughs at the dumb shit.