All Comments on 'Deep Look'

The plots been used before, no surprise to the ending.. Could have been so much more, unrequited love, etc.

I guess I don't get it - the town slut, who went to work planning on getting laid by anyone, suddenly putting out for an old acquaintance because he hypnotized her? Hell, she'd already said she'd put out for some nobody walking in the door if he'd so much as made a pass. What is so special about this story?

Just kind of left me wanting.

Ah, I see what you did there, BenLong. You have a story in the same contest, so you are trashing other stories in the contest. Tacky, Ben, very tacky. Don't worry, Ben, I won't be reading your entry or any other stories you post.

I see some possibilities with this. Is there going to be more?

You see if she had tried to find him, hadn't been the cheerleader slut of her high school, then maybe I could say that this could turn into love. Even. Though she liked him then, she didn't do anything about it.