by MarshAlien
I have read this story before I while back and re read it cause it was just that good
If Willie and Marcia could recognise each other after ten years now come Jenny and Heather did not?
GOOD STORY BUT ITS ENDING IS TOO ABRUPT... LIKE SOMETHING IS MISSING.
That was a delightful story and well worth the 5 stars. I just wish I could give it more.
I loved this story; 5 stars. My only complaint is that it felt a bit rushed.
Good story, I would hope if we sat down you would tell me a story just as well.
I could careless about any dresses but, you a correct about the character development it was very good.
You tale was a fun and refreshing change of pace. Thank you.
A great plot and excellent character development. IMHO I would have given 6 stars but had to knock it down to 5 because you should not complement the dress - you should complement the woman and how it makes her look. For a brief moment the dress was made more important than Jenny.
It was a very easy read because the author took the time to have excellent editing. The story flows very well without any dead spots. Overall, a very well written story. Thanks for taking the time to share this with your readers.
I'm always a sucker for a big reveal - and there are two here. But the humor and light repartee that permeates the story is just the best.
Funny as! It's a pity the Author stopped publication of stories? Anyway I enjoyed this Story immensely Thanks★★★★★ WOOF!
Good luck on your wait pal! Marshalien has sadly stopped publishing here long ago
Would have liked it to be about longer with tales of Heather's word and how the loving couple and her mother got on
Almost half a million views indicates how well written and engaging this story is.
Admittedly, two dozen of those views are mine as every month or so I am compelled to read this delightful work again!
It is always so very refreshing to stumble upon a well written story! I am very glad to say that this is one that I really enjoyed. I see that it has been a while since the author has submitted a story but I surely hope that he is still around and is able to appreciate the recent comments.
You had me from the beginning couldn't stop reading. Loved the surprised ending about the engagement ring.
Heather just blew it again. Maybe one of these days she will meet a nice guy like WILLIE aka. BILL and settle down and realise that it is not being wealthy money wise but being wealthy in a good loving relationship like Jenny and Bill have although it doesn't hurt that Bill has done very well for himself and gives back to his community. This story is in my favorites and it just bring a smile to my face every time that I read it. The tomboy teacher and the business consultant aka mover.
Ron. cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
Great story and in my favorites. Courious if there will be a follow-up story ?
Ron
Great reading this story a second time and remembering just how great this author writes.
I've been trying to find the story so I could reread it. Glad I did, great again. Thank you
Great story.
Yes, MightyHorny is right that the proposal was a bit quick, however:
1) Bill trusted Marcia, who had known Jenny in the intervening years and still considered her to be "the one" for Bill. And Marcia had told Bill that when he found the right person for him he'd know it, and not to blow it.
2) Bill had known Jenny for 5 or six years, and had fallen in love with Jenny before the 13 year gap, and Jenny with him, and they'd had the opportunity to see that they were each still essentially the same person, albeit a bit more mature, and still in love.
3) This was only a proposal, not a wedding, so if it didn't work out it would be a bit awkward, but not a disaster. They'd already had sex, and slept together, so a) knew the chemistry/compatibility was there at that level, and b) it wasn't like the proposal would change much in practice, other than sending out a clear message to gold-digger Heather not to interfere.
4) As MightyHorny said, it's Fiction 🙂.
Oh, yeah, and I overanalyze things.
As I said, I loved the story.
I will certainly check out your other stories.
boatbumm seems to be right about you being inactive here - do you have new stories available elsewhere, or commercially?
In about 72 hours, this guy not only ended up bedding a girl he hasn't seen in more than a decade, but he actually thought immediately asking her for marriage is a great idea?
C'mon now.
But, heck, it's fiction. And, expect for the egregious usage of time, it's well written. 'Would have bought the thing if it wasn't so rush, though.
Loved it. First story of yours I've read. Going to look for more now.
And this story clearly show why! An author who's handle shows up at the top of HDK's favorites list (not here, over on SOL) is someone I'm going to read for sure.
In addition to making me feel warm and fuzzy and loving, you also made me laugh so hard that I almost choked!
If I could give this 500 stars, I would. Thanks! Sorry that you're not still active any more.
Great story, well told.
Um...to my fellow readers...about the title...Goin' Fishin'...you remember, Jenny shows up with a deck of cards and a simple "Got any jacks?"...it's a card game....called FISH...you need to match cards in your hand to get rid of the cards in your hand so you ask the person(s) your playing with, "Got any _____?"...if they do, they gotta give it to you...if they don't, they tell you "Go fish!" and now you pick a card from the deck which means you have even more cards in your hand, so you need even more matches to get rid of them...play continues until ...oh forget it.
Not sure where the heading came from, but it was a great story with a fantastic ending.
Extremely well written, well sequenced and the story's nuance was held together by your skillful writing. Exceptional!!!!!!
But public proposals gall me. Almost every time I wish the girl would say NO! Proposals are personal and meant to be loving not a public thing. There are times when a known proposal is definitely coming and the outcome is very known that a public is OK such as a flash dance set up as a proposal. Those are way too cool, but unexpected proposals should NEVER made public EVER!
One of the best that I have had pleasure to read. Please write some more like this!
LA Cajun guy!A
But I have always been troubled by the ending. Unless you absolutely know the answer a public proposal should NEVER be made. It forces a yes answer and the intended might still be a bit unsure. If I were a woman I would say I'll think about it even if the answer was easily a yes. It's EXTREMELY rude to force a yes answer when the proposal should be a private very tender moment. I have seen some very nice public proposals that were well planned and fun such as a flash dance for the intended, but the answer was basically already discussed just the asking left to do...That made the proposal special. There have been public proposals that got a NO answer just as the ASSHOLE deserved.
Everything there the only change is the mother is good. The sister is a evil gold digger. His lady friends were like fairy godmothers the dress and hair. The were her friends from her past.
A new Cinderella-:Cindergirl next door. I got it "Never gonna give you up. by Envogue". How was that for a break down.
And now for the breakdown. Never gonna give you up, Never gonna give, Never gonna give up Jenny!
A new spin on Cinderella, I liked this story.
5 stars!
Unfortunately I'm talking about myself. This is a sweet story of love rediscovered. In fact it's almost saccharine sweet, everybody but the bitch sister is a wonderful, thoughtful, caring individual with great integrity.
Alright, lets get back to burning bitches!!!
I've read this story about a dozen times over the last decade; it always lifts my spirits.
This is an extremely sweet and romantic story with all the traits of like a good hallmark movie except it was even better and had more thought put into it (I thought).
You see the characters go through some transformations, the setting is still fantastically romantic in it's depiction, like any good story like this is, but you can still see the real brutal world peaking though but not disturbing the story. Very well done, I've seen better but I'm definitely not criticizing.
I don't know why but I adored the love scene. (Even though I half expected it) it was so sweet that when she realized who he was she dropped all prevaricating and stalling and immediately went to seducing him in her sweet, timid yet direct manner. Very cute!
Like many stories, especially short stories and doubly so for stories on here, the ending was good, very good in fact but in punctuating the ending I felt the reader was left hangin' a bit. I believe the true solution and compromise for these situations, rather than a requested sequel or a lengthened edit, is often an epilogue. You know, show us it's a happily every after like we all want and believe it will be.
Thanks again, and great story. Keep Writing! Where ever you may be.
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I first read this some time ago - long enough that when I found it again I didn't remember it until I was half-way through it (again). I was going to "five-star" it - couldn't - I'd done it the first time! :) OK - I'm a fool for a good sappy romance and happy endings. In this story I got all of those, and told well, too. Thank-you for a delightful read - again. :)
When you start writing your own stories and submit them to the mercy of over critical dickheads who are just like you, then, and only then do you have the right to criticize anyone else's work. Until that time comes, "Shut the Fuck Up, You Asshole!"
Having had just read through your, shall was say... Less favorable piece on writers and their editors, this was both refreshing and delightful. A short, but maybe just tad bit too short, story with excellent plot and a well developed cast of characters, each with their own pasts and past selves. And what a title! Deceptive, but very fitting. I love it.
Your slow-ish reveal of the girls' plan was perfectly timed, but your ending was a bit confusing. I was eventually able to piece it together, but it was... How to put it... Less carefully laid out then the rest of the submission. It felt like you wanted to be done writing it and so hurried to the punch line. I loved the idea behind your finisher, but the delivery needs a bit of work, I think.
Anyhow, you did a wonderful job and certainly made up in my mind for the story listed right above this. I know I should say what the name of it is, but I don't want to get it wrong and I'm doing all of this on a mobile that hates copying text and loves refreshing web pages. So I'm not gonna risk it.
See you in the comments of your next story, Marsh!
- The Four-Eyed Vampire
Magnificent, simply magnificent. Too bad the story rating only goes to 5 stars. This is *easily* worth 10+ stars!
Been meaning to read this one forever...sure glad I did...wish I had done it before now!
It's sweet and made me smile, though it ends pretty abruptly, feels more like it was cut off mid-paragraph rather than finished.
I read this story about twice a year and it is still a great read! Keep them coming!
Cajun in Baton Rouge!D519
My ONLY negative is the public proposal. It killed an intimate moment....made it seem a bit cheap to me...forced her hand even if she didn't end up feeling that way...I have public proposals that did work, but this one did not.
Every time I read it I like and makes me smile better.
Sorry for not being able to give 5*
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.
I reread this story every time I need cheering up. Fortunately that's not often, but it does the trick every time. Thanks so much for this story and all of your others as well. Please keep writing and posting here at Lit.
Sweet and beautifully written; a splendid and wonderful romantic story! :-)
I never knew my life was a soap opera... never even saw the cameras when i kneeled 19 years ago to propose to my now wife
I already wrote a long, effusive comment (it's on page four of the comments if you're curious), but as I re-read this for maybe the fifth time, I found myself wanting to write another long comment about how much I enjoyed this.
I won't.
Suffice it to say that it hasn't faded in multiple re-readings, and is indeed just as much fun as the original reading. Thanks again.
Kneeling to propose in public is only done in soap operas. Except for that proposal everything of this story was magically written. Loved it.
I like the story, but is not ended, needs a sequel, and the readers are several years waiting for that.
5* for you, but we are still waiting for more of this tale.
This story is not finished yet! Please where is the author long time no see the stories?Also public proposal She-it he's game! I hope MarshAlien is in good standing health wise? Fantastic story! Love you all! GREG OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.
the best ones to land are usually in the deepest holes; TK U MLJ LV NV
Does anyone know if he is using a different username or is posting on another site?
The only thing I DID NOT like was the public proposal for marriage. That's almost never called for and doesn't give her a chance to kindly refuse as she deserves. Public makes her feel forced to accept. Why would you want a forced acceptance, even it wasn't??? I think a proposal of marriage should be alone with the one you dearly love, then shared. Sometimes the answer is so blatantly obvious that public is ok, but NOT in this story, so NO I did not like that part AT ALL...sometimes it's best why the yes isn't quite there yet before total commitment is made.
The Best. All the quibbles are just that - quibbles. When I want my romantic stories to mirror real life I'll want them to end in divorce. The ring, the desert, the line he says - they're just great as is the rest of this delightful story.
I first read your story in 2007 and thought it was great. Still one one of the best.
Loved the story, hated the ending, you don't put the engagement ring inside desert, they are at a country club so you don't throw desert, other than that I liked the story.
any better stories here.
Well thought out and developed.
Thank you a pleasant respite!
BUT I did NOT like the ending. NEVER NEVER NEVER make a PUBLIC proposal unless there is a long relationship with the obvious yes answer. A public proposal is a FORCED YES! YOU do NOT know what is in her heart in a heated lust/love romance. Give her a chance to think and maybe say no. She may say yes easily with a tinge of regret over a lost love who Might come back to haunt in the future with cheating. It's actually common and destroys lives...This story wants to say there was a romance for 13 years unrealized, so WHY didn't they try and find each other??? Sorry can't buy it ZERO reason to FORCE a girl to accept a public proposal.
I love reading when the story is "fresh"! Well written, your grammar and spelling are perfect and characters are developed without the usual drivel! Bravo!
This story rises high into the pantheon of classic tales here on Lit., becoming one of my few I will read again and again. Kudos to the author!
Well written, beautiful story, one of the best I've read on this site. I would welcome a sequel, following their married life.
all my years of reading i have never come across such a wonderful story...looking forward to reading more stories like this
I've read many comments where people complain the story is too long. I wish this one was longer! Fantastic story!
This story is simply one of the absolute best I have read on this site.
Thank you and keep writing.
5/5 (would be more if I could)
I seem to be thinking that a lot lately. Much of the work on Literotica could use a little more editing, and even more of it could use a complete make-over with both a dialogue coach and a plot doctor.
"Goin' Fishin'" is not one of them and reflects a much higher standard of writing than I had become used to. The balance of plot twists and well created characters kept me riveted to my screen. True, everything was pretty well telegraphed after Heather made a fool of herself followed by Marcia's appearance to set the tone for the rest of the story.
This is in my "Top Five" list of stories I love on Literotica, along with "Charity Begins Next Door". This one was humorous in a romantic sort of way, and "Charity..." is romantic in a heart-breaking sort of way. Not the same, even very different, but of such good quality that I have read and re-read them both. That's something I just don't bother to do because there are just too many stories in here to waste time repeating them. Until now.
Thank you "MarshAlien", whoever you are. Your work is well worth reading. Again!
I have read this at least 5x and voted 5* this is only the 2nd time I have commented. it is still as good a story as can be found. That is probably why she is no longer here.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
It still holds it's charm every time I read it. Even though the author hasn't posted on this site for almost eight years I'm still enjoying his work. Thank you "Acts of Grace" by this author is another cute story.
This was wonderful. The end felt very rushed and could use a second chapter. I loved it!
this is read #2 And it is still a 10 * read. I will see how your other stories go.