All Comments on 'Goin' Fishin''

I agree with most of the comments before me. Wonderful story, a rushed ending, and there could be so much more to this wonderful story.

It is in my favorites read it numerous times and enjoy as much each time. I do think that it ended all of a sudden it could have been longer. I urge you to write a follow up story about them including everyone in the first story. Maybe Heather might meet a nice man and settle down. What do you say?

Ron

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Enjoyable story, though it ends very abruptly, and it feels pretty rushed to propose so quickly after not having seen someone for 13 years.

Read this a long time ago, in fact a number of your stories-Show Moms was also great-think I liked it more 2nd time around, tho my 5 stars from last time had disappeared...got a bit misty eyed at the end...

I agree with most of the readers an epilog is needed or a sequel to finish off a GREAT story. Please may i have some more? Love you all! Bye. Greg....10 stars

Wonderful story. How did Jenny adjust to being married and living with Bill? Did Heather grow up and become a good person--after all her mother is a great lady, and so Heather must know how to treat people, especially now that she has to face facts.

Enjoyed reading this cutie pie of a story. Too abrupt an ending, but otherwise delighted in the characters and story line. All good things come to those who wait, so am waiting for more good things from this talented writer.

the ending is WAY TOO SOON kinda dorky asking her to marry you after a couple of days. DAMN give it a bit of time as in an epilog PLEASE!

I don't believe I have ever enjoyed a story on this site more than I've enjoyed this one. As I've been a lover of this site since discovering it during its first year of existence, you can guess I've read quite a few. Thank you. ~~S

I read this story once earlier in the same portal.. And when I came across this story once again I could not but read it once again completely from beginning to the end and enjoyed as much as I had earlier.

.... this awesome story. I wish it didn't cut off so fast at the end, but the story was so wonderful. It was quirky, fun, energetic, and had real charisma. Thank you!

great love story. Five stars. Second time through.

If you can't match a card you say (Go Fish meaning pull a card from the top of the deck). Good Story/ Fun Story about old friends(Marcia) and long lost love(Jenny and Willie/Bill).

Ron. Texas

cowboyridecc@yahoo

Goin Fishin presumably comes from the card they played as teenagers. Jacks wherein you say Go Fish.

Matt

How does "goin Fishin" as a title

have anything to do with the story content?

even if way too abbreviated.

Mother knows best.

But, 8th grade was a long time ago. Does anyone think it might be helpful to get reacquainted before marrying?

Great story

Do not need a lot of sex to be interesting.

Besides if the hero drives a English car I like him too

Thank you. Very well writte

Samuel

then realized I had read it before and liked it so much I had to read it again !

One my all time favorites. Clean simple true love. Loved Jennys mom and maybe her sister can calm her act down and find a nice man and have a couple kids. Everyone in the story were great from Annie,Beth,Carlo,Dave,Marcia and Heather AKA(blond hair,gold jewelery,red nails and boobs out to here). I thought it could have been longer so I am asking for a sequil about them all and there happy famlies($1800 for a dress) I had to put that in now do you have any Jacks if not you need to write a story ok you can have Jacks but you still need to write a seqil.

Ron Texas

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com-----------in my favorites read many times.

And ignore Dark storm. He's just pissed his 2 pathetic stories got lower ratings then this wonderful tale. Both clever and entertaining. Well played.

Story was more than just beautiful! But, where is part two? Your story is not complete until you do!

Really enjoyed the story, though it was way short! ...and it really, really needs some good sex in it!

5 stars.......cause most stories should only be rated 1-3 stars but are rated 5 *s

verrry good tale,,just to hurried.

Yeah, this was a nice enough story, if you ignore the fact that it's filled with cliché characters, who otherwise lack any real development.

Take the description of Jenny, "She didn't have her cheerleader sister's figure, and her shoulder-length brunette tresses weren't as brassy as her sister's, but God, what a beautiful woman", talk about damning with feint praise. "She's not as good looking as her sister, but 'WOW!' what a beauty!" And that's about all the physical description we get of Willie's main love interest and co-star in this story.

And then there are the sex scenes...I mean sex scene (singular), talk about tepid. After a mediocre, one paragraph blowjob, the rest of their first time sexual encounter is described in two sentences: 1) on cunnilingus - "I scooped her up and threw her on the bed, where I spent the next twenty minutes making her as happy with my mouth, I hoped, as she'd made me with hers.", 2) on making love to his 13-year love interest for the very first time ever - "I didn't say another word until we were done." What heat!...What passion!...I mean, What heat?...What passion? Talk about a real snooze fest! We didn't even get some passionate snogging. This site is LitEROTICA, so where's the "erotica"?

I don't understand the high ratings for this story. It didn't touch my heart. It didn't make me hard. Yeah, it was a little bit clever, but that's about its only saving grace. It's filled with cookie cutter characters (vain, blonde, big boobed, man-stealing cheerleader...check!, less attractive, tomboy, #2 daughter...check!, nerdish dweeb, who becomes rich non-dweeb...check!...oh-so-wise mother, check!).

In MarshAlien's treatise on writing romance stories, "How to Write Romance", he says, "The secret, though, lies not in reading a lot of formulaic romance novels, which would be very time-consuming, but simply in obtaining a copy of the formula itself. Once you join the club...you can start cranking these babies out like nobody's business." He admits to the cookie cutter approach, and it shows. What he failed to grasp by never having bothered to actually read any romance novels/stories for himself, is that they are always based around smoldering, passionate sex scenes, of which this story has none. You can't leave a main ingredient out of the formula. If you want to bake a cake, don't forget the leavening, or the whole thing falls flat.

It's a 3-star effort at best.

Looks like we need a sequil to this story. You need to tell us more about Bill and Jenny and maybe just maybe settle Heather down and find a really nice man for her to marry and be happy with and do away with the gold digger and become a wife and mommy.

Ron. Texas

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

this ended to soon. should do a follow up of their marriage with maybe a kid or two and maybe heather finally finding the right guy.

I really enjoyed reading it again and again. I would like to see a follow up story on Jenny,Bill ,Marcia and all there friends maybe a little Willie might be in the works.

Ron Texas

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

And to TimLauder, you're a little dense... This is a little love affair that's been going on for over 13 years, now, I don't know where you're from, but, 13 years is a VERY LONG LOVE AFFAIR, so, go somewhere and hide your shame...

I just wish that MarshAlien was still writing, we NEED more writers like him...

Too early to ask for that. That was the only very unrealistic kink in this very good story. It was a bit over the top and hurt the story some. Add another page with some time and then declare true love and marriage. 5 stars anyway!

especially how the gold digger made a fool of herself

Still one of my all time favorites.

A great pick-me-up tale.

Love the story in my favorites and waiting on the follow up story about Bill and Jenny.

Great one liner(Blond,red finger nails gold jewlery and boobs out to here)

Ron Texas cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

I've read this a number of times and have enjoyed it each time. I love your sense of humor and self-deprecation, which shows in the way your characters inter-relate.

Another commenter ( I didn't read them all) wanted the story to be longer, but I must disagree. While I could have read much more and I would have been most content and happy to do so, I love an author who knows when to stop, who leaves us with just enough to fuel our imaginations and allows us to come to our own conclusions beyond that which is presented in the story. Very well done! I would be happy to give you five stars, but I have already done so, and it would just get kicked out at the next sweep. I will also post as Anony Mouse because I have commented before and it will not allow me to do so again under my name. Thanks for a good read.

Nice. Without any negatives even about Heather, this is a story you'd like yourself participating in. I'll read this again several times I guess.

Love the story but it suddenly ended? Where is part two to this perfect story? I would truly love to read more to this story!

I like how the guy a couple comments before complained about half a story tet gace ya 5 stars

This is my third time reading this story and it is just as charming and witty as the first perusal. I add my kudos to those given by others and my thanks for a warm story well told!

Please write more!!! Short but sweet!! Loved it!!!

Please write more

It's only half a story. You should have written more. Therefore only 5*

Brilliant

I'm not the only one who is begging for an epilogue. Very well done. Good story. A nice fairy tale deserves to let us know about how they 'lived happily ever after.' Please do not disappoint !!??

Please.

Really liked the story but hated the ending, needs a sequel.

I to was taken aback at its ending.Such a warm a exciting story,surely there is more...please ?

WTF It can't end there...I could not stop reading this story...it has got to have more...lots more. Dam it was good and very well written. But, PLEASE, PLEASE, don't make an old 65 year old man beg...Very, Very well done.

Jim WV.

Great story. We need a sequel there has to be about two more chapters to this story. Please write a sequel. It is such a fun story.

Ro . Texa . cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Why do the real good stories always seem too short? You have some real good characters here and you have real True Love, too boot. Thank You for a very enjoyable story.

what? where's the three part; where does this begin? where does it end? where is the conflict, and where's the resolution?

......I´ve read over 5000 average stories, many good stories, and some are extraordinary...this one surely belongs to my top 4. Thank you for writing it.

Six Stars!

Very written, snappy dialogue and wonderful characters. I liked Marcia the best! Thanks for a great read!

This is a wonderful love story. The is the second time is six months that I've read it and must say it wears very well. The authors voice is so crisp and alive I can only as one thing of him by way of improvement. You need to write this book. The one that leads up to this ending. Thanks for you wonderful, wonderful works....

I love this story and have probably read it 7-8 times. Keep writing stories like this.

I met my wife at a dance party 50 years ago and again the next week where it was love at second sight if not the first sight. Because we were young and she had one more year of high school, we dated and married 5 years later. My youngest son met his wife 2 years ago and it was the same. When many of my friends talk of meeting the love of their life, it was similar. Maybe a few grew up togehter in High School or College, but for many of us it was a chance meeting and the chemistry was right.

I like that. I actually know a couple that has been married for 23 years now after only knowing each other for one day. It's possible! Sometimes, you just know. I wanted to know what happens with them all next though...

Great story MA - Throwing the ring was a nice touch! ;)

Please don't read nice stories like this when you're drunk ; You'll retain more of the story if you're sober !

I'm not sure if that comment about knowing her only 3 days was sincere or just sarcasm but I'm pretty sure he said he'd been in love with her for 13 years.

Not 3 days. He has been in love with her for years!!

but,

it all happened so fast. 3 days from hello my name is Bill to will you marry me.

another chapter, another page, or even another paragraph would have been nice.

even if its not your own Mother, TK U MLJ LV NV

Please, One more chapter! Please?

One of those tales you read over and over to make you feel good about life.

maybe just one more chapter though? And to the question about why the title - because of the card game - got any jacks? Go fish. Makes sense to me :)

Every so often I come back and read this again...it is just that good. Wish it was two paragraphs longer though.

I've probably read it a dozen times or more over the last few years. Any time I need a quick pick-me-up, this always does the job.

Now if I could just remember my damned password so I don't have to keep commenting as A. Nony...

VisualPerv

...and this is definately one of my liking. The only problem I have: I find it a bit hard to believe that someone can change within 10 years in a way that even neighbours and friends do not recognize him.

Nevertheless: 5* for an enjoyable story.

Brilliantly told. Loved it.

Why you named it go fishing?

When you've read something by Marsh Alien, you've read the best, and this is one of his best.

This is a fun story. Thanks for sharing.

...like this story. I've read this over a dozen time and still get a kick out of it.

5 Stars

Whenever I want an emotional pickup, I come back to this tale.

My all time favorite to date.

Nicely done.

Thx!

I really liked this story, but I feel that it ended too abruptly. Just felt like it should have had more of an ending...Overall, I enjoyed the characters and story. Keep up the good work.

The way it is written it shouldn't be a 5*. At 4 or 5 pages it would certainly be. Still 5*

wanted to rate 4*s, but with the over inflated ratings given for 90% of the stories not as good as this,,,, had to rate 5*****s

OK... but awful shallow read.

better than the ttt, radk ,hdk, jpb and rest with there hooker and slut stories

a story worthy of reading.

too many jpb radk hdk and other bad to ok stories on here.

This was well written and well told thanks for sharing

What a great tale. Life should be this good.

The story line was pretty obvious, but it was a great "feel good" tale. Thanks.

I can't stop smiling, as already pointed out, should be a movie ... DKP

Very very good. Please expand and add more to the end. I really liked this one.

Even without sex this would be a great story... I can really picture watching this story as a movie... and not meaning a porn...

Loved it...

I absolutely LOVE this story. I've read and re-read it many times. I's possibly my favorite story that I've read on this site. Sore some reason, it touches me on a gut level. That being said, it does end precipitously. It just stops with none of the story tension points resolved. What was the interaction after the proposal? How did Heather react? Ms. Colley? Friends? The rest of the crowd? I would LOVE IT if you could tie it up. It NEEDS it. It's still a great story though but slightly unfinished. PLEASE FINISH IT even if it's only half a page or so!!!!!!

and I gave it a 5 but the story ends too quickly. It really needs a complete ending.

more! this was great but a sequel or a series would be awesome. Your writing is so fluid. great job

Diligence pays plus a little luck probably. Plus it really looks like he gets his true love right on top of it all. A very good writing effort to read and the slutty, bitch sister loses.

I loved this.... great to see a bit of humor mixed in with a gold digging vixen's comeuppance. I hope you'll add a few more chapters.

This story warms my heart. I have visited this story so many times - just to get over things.

It helps me- thank you for writing this.

Ever honored and obliged - thank you !

I"ve read this about four times and I enjoy it more each time I read it.

What a lovely heartwarming story

A heart warming tale with a few little twists. Well done.

I've now read this story three or four times, and think that it's one of the best short stories I've ever read anywhere. I, too, would love to know what happened to MarshAlien - whatever the answer, his literary legacy will live on (although it would be a shame if it were only on Literotica).

Just reread the story. Since the last time MarshAlien submitted to this group was in 2008, I wonder if something happened to him. Out of all the authors I have read he is my favorite. In fact to get his "living dolls" story back, I paid for the kindle version.

If anyone knows what happened to him I would appreciate knowing also.

One of the all-time great feel-good stories on Literotica. Not too long, not too rushed, and covers all the essential elements of a romance. What more could you ask for? It's just a shame that you can't vote each time you read it! :-)

Read it again ;-)

Great tale!!

Thx!!

This seems to be only the first act of a three act play, the second in which Heather tries to break them up, and the third in which Bill and Jenny reconcile and marry...

What did you need? And they all lived happily ever after except Heather? Good story. Well written