All Comments on 'Grains of Sand'

i think he was correct in his first assesment sooner ore later it wouldnt have been a story she told and if she has to lie to her husband about it you can figure out that what you are doing is bad right ?sp him going back to her is to me crawling back with his tail between his legs a wimp

Send the pictures anyway. She deserves that and more.

he should have send the pictures to everyone

he was going to pay any way why not have some fun with the revenge

Send the pictures to everyone anyway. Her work, parents, friends, and social media sites. No sense in her having all the fun.

cheating stories with revenge or a lot of drama were kind of my "drug" for at least 10 months last year through this year

and after stopping that drug(i read at least 500+ cheating stories and got kind of a kick from them *they pulled me in deeply and in some moments i was shocked as much as a person who was right there in reality at that moment*)

well and now after hearing a song that i heard through reading those stories

i kind of course thought about that then

and wanted to see if there were some new ones and

this one was the first and i again got that weird feeling through reading it

i expected something else but that ending hohooo

damn

Why the fuck does she FANTASIZE about her husband having a small dick?

Thanks for the offering.

The abrupt ending is somewhat unconnected to the rest of the story. No flow from where you took us. First, it's only several fantasies that she's relating then bang, she's really cheating.

lame rushed ending.

If he plans it properly, it could be attributed to one of her online hookup fucks gone bad. Before he offs her, he could take her prisoner where she'd have a chance to see the look on his face. In her mind, she'd hear the trumpets of doom and know that final justice was upon her.

doesn't taste good but makes a hell of a filler, TK U MLJ LV NV

Why didn't either of them ask her why she was so eager to hurry over to Rob and Fran's house and how she happens to know that the description of Rob's cock in her online 'fantasy' isn't accurate? If that wasn't a confession of having intimate knowledge, what the hell IS? Fran should hit her again... but this time with the fucking refrigerator.

Abrupt ending. So she was a size queen. He should have destroyed her after she sign the divorce papers. Should have sent pictures to everyone he and she knew to show the whole world to the truth.

She deserves to be punished. A year maybe, after the divorce, her lover should

just disappear. A year or so later she should be "mugged" and beaten within

half inch of her life. Of course the ex would have an ironclad alibi for both attacks.

Or maybe I'm just a cold blooded SOB. No, now that I think about it, I AM a cold

blooded SOB. But I just wouldn't be able to look at myself in the mirror if I let them

get away with fucking me over

I hate when obvious factual errors are made in a story, as it pulls me out of the story. Must be my OCD. You managed it in your first sentence. A grain of sand weighs some tens of milligrams, not grams.

He needs to show a rich women married him and his wife works the streets.

I really liked it -- 5*

This author has GOT to stop using quotes for internal dialog. It really is amazing how confusing it is and that a writer of this talent level doesn't realize it.

Also the commas, commas, and more commas. Jesus!! Slirp, you're a fucking basket case with this shit!!

Anyway, nice story :))

He sends photos to her boss...she loses job...cannot take care of

kids...he gets custody...plays with marks wife

It was a good story, but seemed to meander all over before suddenly throwing in a scene showing the wife really was cheating. Which means she really meant all those "little dick" insults she was tossing around. Also, she never really showed any emotion, saying she thought he would stop the divorce, but if not - "oh well, your loss". Wow. She doesn't sound like she cares at all - no love lost there. Good riddance.

Why are most of the men in your stories complete wimps?

It needs an ending, ie.. she put him through hell to get the divorce, putting up road block after road block, after road block, making hard to see his kids........and on and on"

Can't see a logical ending for a wife that sounded like she loved her husband but - what was real in her computer affair until the ending? I think that the husband should have extracted a bit of revenge for her infidelity but, did she believe him that he was fucking others? Complete messed up lack of communications and a slut wife.

What a couple of shitty people,totally unworthy of bring parents!

Hope the slut contracted HIV!!!

This author is very unique as they write great stories but cannot finish with a good ending. All the stories have the worst endings ever. Hence why they only rate a 1* for me. Shame really as it goes from great to just plain rubbish.

Cassia Maybet

bitching about the ending. I'm okay with it but would like to find out if the wife ever gave a shit about him or losing her husband.

Good story though - 4 stars.

You left us hanging. What did she think What went to through her mind when she saw the car. Did she really hate him that much

he was portrayed as a bit gullible and soft, seemed to be on the back foot the whole time until she finally destroyed him.

Called you a retard for saying a grain of sand weighs a gram or two. You must've never bought drugs in your life. Not knowing the metric system isn't an excuse for that level of wrongness. It's like saying a toaster weighs one or two tons. Nevermind, you were only off by about 9,000%

Now I'll go read the actual story.

Was a pretty good story up till the end with her cheating.IMHO it did not fit with rest of the story. Kinda abrupt ending no reason or answers to why etc. ruined what was a good story.

Reread.

The way she was writing I felt there was something physical going on. Her devolving right into hurtful supported that. The question was what.

Great story even if the ending transition was a bit abrupt. The scene with Dad was left hanging. And yes, I too would have sent the photos once the divorce was final.

The "invasion of privacy" is bullshit! She's a bitch and a lier!

So-so story but the ending said “I’ve run out of ideas, so I’ll use cliche #1.

After all the shit he got from her,he should have got them both fired.

I share everything with my wife. She knows my passwords and I know her.

She can check my phone and my computer and I use hers.

All the last part of the story was completely disgusting. You make him go down to the slut's level and even chopped his balls when you made him apologize and come back with the slut. I bet he got slooppy seconds the night that fucked her.

The first part of the story was good, what happened to you in the second part I have no idea, but ruined it completely.

Shave, Shit, Shower and never forget Shine, TK U MLJ LV NV

He asked her about the "work" she is doing on laptop. She lied it was a diary and he found out it was a chat. Therefore he was justified to check out that lie the way he did.

You lie, you lose your privacy right. Also adult chatroom conversations lead in 40% of the cases to infidelity, this is a fact from statistical research. So it is not as innocent as some would like to believe.

Chur bro awesome story

Her boss is getting pictures, a big lawsuit, and the asshole is getting served for breaking up his marriage. Right after she signs all the papers. She's fucked him over. It's her turn.

Privacy issues are sure sign of cheating.

When you are married there is no privacy from your spouse kids maybe husband or wife nope my wife knows all my passwords for phone and computers as well only one she don’t is my work e-mail for confidentiality reasons which is business only if she wants to see what I am up to she can as well as I have hers too

Because you burned your male character way way way way more than your character ever burned his "faithful" wife. Bad plot bad bad bad !

If he got pissed enough to leave her and file papers for a divorce, he should never have gone back to her. There’s no way in hell that marriage was ever going to work again.

If you're going to burn her, burn her to the ground. Send the pictures to her smug dad as well.

...but for God's sake get your work edited! Your tenses are wrong, your spellings aren't correct and your punctuation is dreadful. Other than that, your stories are usually 5 stars, particularly for the plots.

Sorry everyone she know would have the pic. including her folks and the kids would know what mommy's up to. I guess I'm just a dick but I have no tolerance for cheaters. I also don't believe our courts should be giving a cheating wife the kids just because she has a slit between her legs. It shows she lies, cheats , puts her self first not the family. shes the one that walk out of the family circle not the husband. Don't get me wrong I believe women should be put on a pedestal. But I do believe if they want to be treated as an equal, ( which they should be, not above or below any one else male or female just equal ). That said who ever goes out of the family circle should be the that gets the shaft. Not the one that stays in the family circle.

I really did think that her attitude toward her husband was too mean spirited to be loving, but the real affair took my by surprise. Good story. Bad wife.

Had us going. Thought they were going to make it; but then again, she was so cutting about his manhood, we should have seen it. 5 stars - thanks.

I didn't expect that ending. Another good story until then.

Nothing in this story supported

that Lisa loved her husband.

You don't trash your husband

in sex chats, if you love him.

Fantasy talk or not!

So her cheating shouldn't have surprised readers.

It sure didn't surprise me.

The story was entertaining,

but totally unbelievable.

In making the plot interesting,

the writer fell in the pit,

of making the characters so weird

they were almost unhuman.

A normal husband would've checked

if his wife's stories were true.

A normal wife would've valued her marriage

higher than her privacy.

No, this story was closer to Stephen King

than to reality.

But for entertainment value

I give it 3 out of 5.

I hate this fucking story, even though I know it's good. Just a little too depressing, and too much like the way I lost my marriage. Fuck.

Old

24 years of marriage never imagined anyone else when in bed with wife

Most of my friends same

Did know some did

Fantasies I asked but she only wanted to try a few and didn't like them

When she put you down like that it should have been all over right then

Hard on reading her story

I would be like guys in some of the stories

Throwing up all my insides

Not my type of story

Adultery even if won't make much difference in divorce

Most states even with no fault allow adultery filings

She was a loser from the gitgo. Hell, the trash she was putting online was enough to justify dumping her. The idiot should have armed himself before taking on Carlos. A beer bottle upside the head is way better than a beer in the face.

....1/5 story. Unbelievable characters, dismal storyline. Certainly one of this writer's worst efforts.

You must be a woman writer with that weak ending making the woman look like the glorious Victor

2* Why does this author write wimpy cucky characters who ALWAYS get their asses kicked in a fight? Is because the author is also a wimpy cuck too?

Just waited and got serious proof she was a slut but why wait and waste the money since we already knew. Signed: BTW

He should have hired a PI when he first suspected... I would have taken back her laptop too.

That’s the weight of a grain of sand. You really need to brush up on your weights & measures brother!

It was a bad story because the the story did not end up in the direction of the build-up and that would have been fine but the end was so short, it was anti-climatic.

A hurried finish spoilt it a little, but in truth I enjoyed it. Shows how your mind can play tricks and ruin your life, if your not careful. I am a sucker for an happy ending so 5*

How old were they? 15? They are both acting like teenagers.

Btw, she should have shared her sex fantasies with her husband, not a bunch of strangers. Another story that didn't work for me at all.

This muts be your "cuck period"because I read some stories when you gave some backbone to your make charcters.

Entertaining but, wrong in too many ways.

He was right!!! Freaking slut!! BTB...

Too much of a roller coaster with no payback. Story sucked.

It wasn't, 'just fantasies'.

Even if she only cheated physically at that very single time (I doubt it)

The humiliation of her husband and talk about 'big dicks' and 'making him eat creampies' is honestly enough of a reason to divorce her. it's cruel....evil even.

She deserves to be alone. He should have never left the house though. That was a bitch move. She cheated, she can pack her shit and go. I know our courts are stupid and backwards, but mothers are only important for the first decade of a child's life. Nurturing is VERY important, but stops being important pretty quickly.

The mother raises children, the father raises young adults. You don't want a coo-coo coddling adult when a child is becoming a grown man/woman. You need a father. Stern. Stoic. Supportive, but not enabling. You need a good kick outta the nest. Maybe that means a summer job. Maybe that means more chores. But men, STATISTICALLY speaking only, have more stern mojo. A father, STATISTICALLY, is gonna be shit at raising a small fragile being. That's why family homes work best with both parents. But if we're being honest here....women are bad at raising teenagers. I wish courts stopped believing that the same nurturing that's vital for babies and children is identical towards teens. Absolutely silly.

Ending seemed rushed to me. I think another paragraph or 2 wouldve made it alot better.

stupid. stupid grammar. stupid hero who deserves to be cucked.

Good story,for my tastes it ended too soon. Maybe after two months he sends her boss the pictures anyway.

Again a sori that got chopped at the end. This could have benefited from more, and he should have burnt her world down

No, the ending felt forced and was just empty plot to shock the reader. It was perfect as a misunderstanding between two hard headed lovers. Then you turned it around, went dark, and crashed the story.

Poor ending. The wife in this story is a moron the end seemed like he wanted to shock you but come on crap ending.

Whore

Story was very interesting. Reminded me of the times I spent in chat rooms as the adult connection system on the internet was growing up. The fantasies vs reality play was nicely done. The idea of her covering her tracks via the chat room smoke screen was a nice touch. I agree with a couple of other commenters your ending seemed a little light and rushed; though I think it was overall a good story.

The chapter 2 would be a great read I am thinking. Thanks for sharing your creation. John

She abandoned her husband for months in this fantasy game.

It was cruel and thoughtless.

And she wasn't living out an alternative reality in admitting her husband go without.

I don't have anybody to cut this woman in a slack.

Personally I wouldn't put the divorce go through and then done with her.

Devastating ending on only a couple short paragraphs! Tantamount to Jaw's Roy Scheider going through the whole movie, blowing up the shark, rescuing Richard Dreyfuss (spoiler alert), then both dying in a fiery car crash on their way home.

She can’t claim innocence while being online verbally chatting with other people.

Contrary to the assertion that begins this story, a grain of sand weighs far less than 2 grams. In a sample set of 100,000 grains, the heaviest outlier would still be considerably less than a tenth of a gram.

Oh man, I was hoping she wasn't cheating and then when he was on his way to her work, I knew she was. Good story and realistic. The ending was abrupt, but that is how it goes sometimes when a marriage fails. I could almost feel the heartache and sorrow with "She didn't call me back and two days later she signed them"

This author is obviously a man hating woman because so many of her male protagonists are wimpy fucking clicks with tiny dicks!

So missing the where she begs forgiveness. Her story would be good to read 📚

A grain of sand weighs 0.0044 of a gram

The usual LW blame spreading: "I was the one who had pissed off Lisa by invading her privacy. They were fantasies God damn it, and I'd over reacted. Lisa had tried to tell me that and I didn't believe her and only then did it get out of hand. I really was a schmuck. I knew what I had to do if I wanted my old life back. Or if that was even possible any more."

He did nothing wrong. A spouse is ENTITLED to know if there is a real marriage. The "Yes, I was fucking around, but you are at equally at fault because you caught me" bullshit doesn't work. In this case, she really was a slut. Interesting twist at the end.

BTW, a few grams would be a piece of gravel.

Enjoyed the twists in the story. To bad Lisa did not learn. Thanks for your writing.

Sad it ended the way it did. Just suddenly out of nowhere she is (physically) cheating. Was more fun when they traded barbs and lies. But I guess the author wanted to talk about how one type of infidelity (online) easily translates to the other. Would have been nice to know if she started her affair before or after he returned home. And what were the circumstances. Oh well.

A good story with lots of twists. Unfortunately he's tied to her for life due to the kids. I wonder what her parents will say and do once they find out the truth. Lastly, I wonder when she'll wake up and realize that she threw away a good marriage for some side sex that meant nothing, and now she has no help with the kids, and no one to spend time with her, talk to her, or cuddle with her. Of course she can get fucked by almost any guy, but they aren't interested in anything except sex with her.

It's pretty crazy that Lisa got her pussy waxed at the saloon. Most women I know would go to a salon but, I guess she's a big time exhibitionist.

It was pretty cool too when he told a dozy of a story.

Might have been an interesting story but, so many uses of incorrect words really destroyed the flow of the story.

Ending needed to be fleshed out a bit more. Otherwise pretty good

She got so nasty with her husband in their back and forth that you know she was or would soon be a cheating slut she been having fantasies probably her whole life.

Stupid peoples who thinks as themselves gods, who knows everything and their actions followed by consequences.

Nothing more nothing less.

If people just stop for a moment and think about the consequences there won't these many mistakes.

Stupid emotionally fool Humans.

Could have been good if the ending wasn't such shit.

It's hard to believe a selfish cunt of a wife like Lisa would take that long to figure out.

I’d have waited until the divorce went through then sent the photo to their boss.

A sole is the bottom of a shoe or a fish, s person is a trusting soul.

Did she really go to a saloon to get waxed, or did she go to a salon?

You sad perverted cuck.

Loved it!!

Too much back and forth. Make up your mind!

Boring. Expected better from you than a cookie-cutter JPB clone story.

Meh. Lame ending. It seemed legit then all of sudden deteriorated like the author got bored. No information. No details. Just she signs papers and he was right for maybe the wrong reasons. Disappointing.

Ending sucked and made no sense. Why go to all this trouble if she really is screwing around on him. Disappointing and nonsensical with a stupid rug pull that ended up being a misfire.

Wait up there just a minute, they make up -and- a paragraph or so later - she's up to some shit? Looks like the bridge was burned beyond repair the first time, I can get that but why in nell did she reconcile if she is just prolonging the agony?

What’s with the ending? If you were throwing in a curve ball to the plot, at least expand on it. Feels like your mood changed while writing the ending and decided to throw in that twist on a whim. Disappointed.

His tip off was her rabid fascination with cbig clocks. She is a narcissistic, borderline sexual sociopath. Her deceit with the online chat and ,literally, next night fuck date, the same night she expected him home, sealed the deal. He shouldn't feel hurt but dambed lucky he got she'd of this bitch so that he could recoup his life.

Her, I think she is one sick, malevolent, bitch.