All Comments on 'Hero'

I enjoyed the plot, but some aspects felt rushed and out of character. The hero risked his life to save the couple but he would destroy the couple with a request like that? I think it would have been more interesting for Barry to have requested a date and for things to spiral from there.

If it wasnt for her letting that guy grop her in front of his friends while dancing I might belive her but I feel shes a cheater who hasnt been caught yet ! She was pissed her hubby said somthing at the dance when he defened her honnor thats a selfcentered slut who cared only for herself. All through this story she went behind her husbands back and wishes ( going to dinner without her husband no way to prove she didnt cheat then she could have spent the whole day with him and sit up the home meeting to save her marrage then telling him to send the invition anyway she has no Respect for her husband ) been married 40years No way would this float in real life

Lots of potential. This incarnation left me feeling like I was being drug all over the mat with no definite path, just an end point. Some parts I had to reread as they left me with a "huh?".

Did like the plot though.

Look it up.

BS , no matter what he did only scum would ask the wife to be a sex slave.

game over when he asked that. LW tale this is not .

a 5

Well written but not believable in the least. I could mention all of the reasons why but to anyone who reads it, it is obvious.