All Comments on 'Interest'

Even though I thought Troy deserved better, I wasnt disappointed with them reconciling. Also would of enjoyed it more if there was some sort of revenge against his ex friend David, the asshole.

The story left me with conflicting thoughts. I suggest people go to the prior comment by Anonymous, dated 06/26/19, "how it should have ended," which provides an alternative entirely opposite, but equally acceptable, ending. That is the interesting aspect of this story, which makes it worthwhile reading. Staci remains ambiguous. She strikes me as too strong a woman who would be forced into a relationship by her father, and I can't believe that any sensible woman would have allowed her husband to beat her to the point of being sent to the hospital and not have him arrested, or at least not immediately divorcing him. In fact, it is unclear why she stayed with David at all, as they were never in love. It is this ambiguity about Staci that renders different endings. My own view is that Staci comes across as lacking any integrity or self-esteem, but it just seems to difficult to accept.

Very good story. Your command of spelling, grammar, and prose is wonderful. I love how you turned the tables on the bad guys.I'm not sure of Staci's complicity in destroying Troys family?

I agree with comments also that want her kicked out.

This story is so well written I could go either way.

But as much as I am against RAAC when she had so many things against her I actually like RAAC best

Damn that's hard to say

How can you buy shares in a privately owned bank.?Why didn't he destroy Fred Carter and have the chief of police removed.?

In my books the author is a fabulous writer, but I am guessing from a mysterious disease or just insanity, the author seems to think that plot holes are a necessary part of a story. There are just way more plot holes then actual plots, although the plots are superb, great job, just get confused from tripping all over the plot holes.

Almost stopped reading several times throughout the story. Almost wished I had! Not a big fan of bth or reconciliation. Should have left her to her own devices!🤮

in the beginning of the story when troy is narating he says that he basicly kept away from staci till she and david broke up and she came to him to ask for a date and that was the point he started sucking up to her father

but when staci and troy get to talking she is saying that he was after he long before that trying to win her over asking her out on dates and him asking her to homecoming dance

wich one is it this made me give you 4 stars instead of 5

b

all right maybe maybe not

Janet and David needed to pay more!!

I hate you for having Troy accept Staci after that humiliation (my own prejudice) but the story was really moving. But getting Charles was pure genius, some fuckers need to be shafted properly and this did not disappoint. Bravo to you on a story well written...

A really good story

Not the highest rating story by the author but IMHO one of the best. I loved the way he fought back against his enemies and the ending with Staci was epic. Loved it.

Excellent

Oh Yeah......I DO love a Happy Ending .....🤗 🤗 🤗 🤗 🤗 ....

Brilliant! Loved the story, well constructed and well written/told. A very enjoyable reading experience. Thanks @oshaw 👍🏾

But dude, she got her heart broken by him for a whole year? Oof, that's cold, that's real cold. Yeah, I get that he was humiliated, he lost his parents, etc, but at that time, he was at the top of the world, wealthy, bank doing well, everything in his life going extremely well except not having the love of his life. He humiliated her for a year? He had ample time to get over it, and especially as she showed true regret since the moment she set foot in his office in the beginning. Plus, he understood what she felt like the first time, she got rejected as well, so realistically they were even after the 1st time she proposed. This whole plot point could have been better contrived. But otherwise, good story. Actually, excellent story.

and especially as she showed true regret since the moment she set foot in his office in the beginning

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I know right? So much regret she refused to leave her abusive husband or tell her father to back off

So much regret she refused to so much as talk to him for the several years her father still lived after he was ruined

so much regret she came crawling back once she no longer had any money to live on her own

Good thing he made her pay a lil', but I'd have let Fred put her proposals on social media, the bitch more than deserved it and he'd more than earned the gratification. Or better yet a woman who wasn't David's sloppy seconds.

And David got away far too easily. Should've gotten something to destroy him nicely along with Janet.

Deep Ending.

But well written. So... I wonder if he ever gets a son or if his little girl inherits the company. Still... This is enough for a very very good ending. Though now, I might say "Peace" whenever I see a peach.

BUT HAVING TROY DENY STACI FOR A WHOLE YEAR! WELL, THAT'S JUST CRUEL. TWO WEEKS WOULD HAVE BEEN ENOUGH AND MORE BELIEVABLE.

That was a great story, I love it when the bad guys underestimate the good guys. What a turnaround! They treated each other badly. But in our 20s how many of us are mature enough to make lifelong decisions? Like marriage or having kids at young age? My feelings are no man should even consider marriage until there maybe 30-35. There is one man I kind of admire, my cousin, he was going steady with his future bride in junior high school. They married before college she supported him through college. He got a good job she quit work to become house wife and they never looked back. This was back in the early 60s, pretty amazing huh? They are still together today. I think its called commitment with a little love thrown in. Keep writing

This was a master piece of writing . Thanks for all you wrote

I know it’s been years since this story was submitted and therefore my comments lack the usefulness the author would reap from more timely feedback , but after stumbling across this author and story , I couldn’t resist paying both my accolades and esteem ! And ,honestly , I cannot find any fault to critique anyway ! What a wonderfully crafted story , by a master storyteller , this gem of a find turned out to be ! Outstanding !!!

Great story. I loved it but would have loved it even more if there had been some retribution for David and Janet.

second time around and just as good even knowing the ending. Making her wait a year with her asking him to marry her, cruel? No he was just be careful. He loved her to much to risk getting hurt again. Understandable. Hope you write some more.

One such benefit is you can track down your enemies and deal with them.

I paid good money to track down David. He was still with Rachel but he was not doing too well.

Without daddy-in-laws influence to cover for him David proved to be an incompetent ass. He could not hold down a job at the level he felt was worthy of him. He was dismissed from the first few he got and had then gone for lower level jobs which he also failed at.

He then got a job at a fast food joint and, you guessed it, failed.

If it wasn't for Rachel's job they would have been on skid row. Rachel, however was getting fed up with supporting his habits. Drugs, booze and women.

Soon after I had tracked them down she threw him out with nothing but the clothes on his back and a small suitcase.

David swore revenge against me, Rachel, Staci and everyone including Jesus. With his threats I could now act. I paid to have him educated in good manners. This was a physical education and it took several attempts before he learnt his lesson. I hope he enjoys his life living under the bridge with his broken body.

One of the few reconcilers I can stomach. She was a weak willed and even backstabbing woman before but that was quite the proof of remorse and true love.

One of the greatest stories on Literotica

Excellent!

Brilliant!

Bill

Still good

Upon the recommendation of a commenter on another story I reread this one and find that the comment was indeed correct and this story does give real satisfaction to the reader. Troy achieves peace after much difficulty and gains happiness that appears to be very well deserved. People do make mistakes and perhaps Staci is deserving of forgiveness as Troy is deserving of happiness. Peace, indeed! 5* (I thought of looking at my comment of years ago to see if I changed my view, but with 355 comments I wasn't about to go hunting through the pile to find out.)

A well written and interesting story with a hero and heroine I could actually like. I would have giving it 5 stars if it weren't for him refusing her nightly proposals for the whole year before finally accepting (strained suspension of disbelief a tad too far for me) so it's a well earned 4.

LA

Well done

7 stars it is. The Bear can't count, nor would he for this story. Came out of left field; I couldn't figure out how he would be true to Janet, and continue to love Staci. Large bear are notoriously dense. The Bear approves. Like your style, oshaw. Keep writing. Just making it a little shorter next time. I'm not much on stock markets and currency trading; I prefer a .45 round to the balls, or a good beating. Six of one, half a dozen of the other.

The BEAR

5* ... A wonderful reading experience. Thank you

Good read! 5*

5 from me as well. Yes, accepting her wedding proposal on the third try would have made this story perfect.

Beautiful! Loved it

The proposal, the rejection, the chess game,

Turning Tables & the end.

More 5han 5*

Keep it up

Kudos !

The greatest short story ever!!!! :0

Of course 5 stars even the second time around, revenge is sweet the way he did it and his life long love finally convinced him her love was real. Excellent.

A good, optimistic ending with a woman who, for all her alleged suffering, only divorced her husband and jumped ship at the last possible (and most convenient) moment. Let's hope the MC doesn't lose his money or we're going to be reading a sequel...

Five

Loved it. The setup to take control, the rejection of the proposal and finally the acceptance. Well done!

The revenge part is great but in the end it just feels like another RAAC.

I agree with anon's "how it should have ended". She haven't done anything to prove her love to him. It gives the impression that she is doing that because he's the successful one now.

That year long humiliating proposal is just a weak effort compare to his lost. He lost his family and fortune because of her rejection. She lost her family because of their own doing. That is not equal at all.

Her son???

My 7th time around on this story and it's still in the top 5 of my favorites...

@kencoro... How did he lose his parents and fortune because of her? Did you not read the story? He lost some fortune, because of his own family and their lawsuits... His parent's death while tragic was indirectly the fault of her father...

A year's worth of embarrassment is sufficient compared to his embarrassment...She lost her father because of her father taking his own life, She wasn't at fault for that...Doesn't say much about her mother after the divorce, but again that's his fault for having a mistress on the side...

@mole114... They have a Daughter Karen...

coming back to this story after a year since I first discovered it and I still really like the Story.

interesting take from anonymous with the alternate ending "how it should've got at the Country Club"

one detail confused me.

If he knew that Janet Temple was double playing him/spying on him for 2 years.

Why did it keep coming up that he thought of her as "future fiancée" etc.? Meanwhile the revenge plan was going on? That doesn't add up.

Well written and well crafted storyline. However, I do think having Staci propose to him for a year was a bit to long maybe a few months would have been more realistic. There was an obvious story error that other commentators have picked up that is why was he thinking of Janet as a fiancée when he knew she was working for his enemy? Still, a very good story.

Interesting, entertaining, and one of many GREAT stories I have read here in LITEROTICA.COM.

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where he is giving Janet his background. And explaining the bank's dire situation. Methinks Janet is a double agent working for the opposition, and she will steal those books and documents.

An excellent read. Thank you.

The concept of love conquering all is still prevalent it seems. The problem I have with this concept in this story is that the hurt and damage done by her and her family (ousting his family and leading to the death of both parents in addition to financially ruin the family business) seem to large to allow for a reconciliation.

The second issue I have is the fact that Staci wants him to believe that her choosing him was prevented by her fathers interference and "forced marriage". Now a women with so little backbone that she would let her father completely run her life for her is, in my humble oppinion, unlikely to be able to continue to continuously face the rejection of her proposals for 1 year and not a stable or long term relationship partner.

What part of her wiping out his family did this idiot not understand?

The only one's who understand this is those who have Lived through such a happening or those who can see the Logic in it I have not gone through this in any way But it is the Logic that gives Me the understanding of this story I have Problems in My own Marriage which has lasted for now over 40 years but I still have Hope of a ending such as this Well written OHSA to you I would give you 10 Star ! You give Hope to those like Me .

great story

One of your best. 4 reading.

Dosn't really work for me. A guy who was humiliated so bad and lost everything he loved only to be humiliated some more and finally find the will and strength to fight and eventually win over / destroy his opponents ruthlessly is in my opinion not well suited for a relationship with the person who is the bane of his existence. Author you should have put more thought / effort into the process of reconciliation so it wouldn't come out as forced humiliation and simple reversal of positions. That in itself is a poor way to find reconciliation and more likely a good ending to a breakup / btb story.

the cheating parties were directly and immediately responsible for the death and misery of his family

either he is "super christ - forgiveness is paramount" or the author has failed, at least for me, to explain in even a remotely believable way why he should even look at her?!?!

btw the highly criminal shit his employee "the spy" pulled should have consequences for her?

I guess the readers on this page got confused after so many words and forgot the beginning of the story, otherwise I can't understand some praise comments (I myself only have problems with one part of the plot, the forgive and become a couple again part ! the writing style, the main characters, the dialogues etc. are very good)

Having read this story several times (many times?), there is one pick that I have, now that I have enough grandchildren to know: a 3-year old will not be ‘waddling’, they will be running at full speed ahead, like a little wild thing! LOL

Enjoyed it yet again…. Shah mat, indeed!

One of the absolute best stories I've read on Literotica!!

@des67

you read this story 7 times? READ AGAIN. Make it to 100.

Staci's family made those happen. It was their revenge for Troy humiliating Staci. Was it implied that she attempted to stop what her family were doing??

She humiliates herself for a year after it was convenient for her to do so.

Troy AND his family were living through humiliation for 6 years!

So read this story again.

One of your finest

I came back to re-read 'Interest' again because Lujon2019 wrote an Alt Ending to 'Interest'. I don't think I will read his alternative because the original is just so damned good. If it's not broken why try to fix it. Some endings need to go in a different direction but this is not one of them. I will say thank you to Lujon2019 for forcing me to come back to 'Interest' again and enjoying it as much the second time as the first.

I totally concur with "JustOneMansOpinion" I read this story a second time without realising I had read it before. It didn't take more than a few lines before I remembered it but instead of moving on I kept reading and it now resides in the annals of those stories I could read again Thank You 5*****

A sweet story and some great revenge. A fine reconciliation after Staci showed she really regretted what she did. 5 stars and faved.

OK, I have to confess, I did read Lujon2019's Alt Ending after saying I wouldn't. It was short. I should have stuck to my original feeling. It was awful. Only got one star from me because I hated it. I don't think he ever understood the original. Forget the Alt. and stick to the original. The alternative ending is garbage.

Thank you, "JustOneMansOpinion" I intend to heed your advice. I think it's perfect just the way it is. I noticed that when you read an alternative ending by another author no matter how bad or good it is it tends to take away from the original. Thank you, oshaw for a very entertaining story.

Another gem!

Thank you. We all miss you and your wonderful stories.

Great story. Really, really great.

It's a great story with a really great ending ... what everyone wants in the world - PEACE

Should have made her watch as he marries another better matched lady.

Would have liked to see the main character happy without being hung up on one girl for all his life as it doesn`t mesh well with the other characteristics attributed to him.

After reading this story, I wanted to wash up...

Oh fucking NOOOOOOOOOOOOO! This was well written and I was very impressed with this writers talent, I mean the page revealing that he had not been beaten, no, he was the victor was wonderful.. I mean it would have taken Stephen King 62 pages to explain to the reader what this person did in 3/4 of a page (I am not comparing oshaw to Stephen King.... just saying if you read King you know it takes him 12 pages or so to describe a tree in the center of town)

but the writer lost me with the country club thing.... I mean he/she never explained what made him so cold and superior to Staci... The way he professed his love for her and wanted her to be happy, truly happy... then he sounds like a DOUCHEBAG in "his" country club ... okay she turned down his marriage proposal, but never showed any cruelty or any kind of rubbing it in his face.... get over it, or at least don't be mean to the person because they gave you an answer you did not want

Great story but I lost a lot of respect for BOTH of them with the whole night after night of repeated proposals farce on her part. He was acting like a dickhead and she should of said f*ck you and left town after the 1st time he refused.

I always have tears in my eyes when I, again finish this wonderful tale.

He, speaking to himself, began to look for an escape. Come on he knew that he had Buchanan by the balls. That was a bull shit deception for the reader. Good story, but…

God, I hate that he ends up with Staci. She doesn't deserve him just like he didn't deserve the disrespect that she showed him years before. She can't be trusted, no matter how many times she humiliates herself in public by proposing.

Fabulous story and unexpected ending for multiple things. I absolutely loved it 5 stars

So stupid.Send staci to hell

Would have been way more interesting if Janet got knocked up by him

Great storyline. Very creative! Write more…..

Original and enjoyable story. Great writing!

Still love this one, Oshaw!

I'd like to give it ten stars!

What a ridiculous story. Can't anyone write an interesting realistic story instead of this crap. 2 stars.

Wrong outcome.If she she really loved him as she professed,she would have ignored her father and married him.How can he go out on dates if he eats supper every night at the club?.Also,why didn't he ruin Fred Carter and have David Porter put in a wheelchair?.

Pathetic end with him and Sarah. Stupid wimp *1star

Enjoyed this but it did leave me conflicted, as I wasn't sure she deserved a second chance. She chose the ex first when they both liked her, she married the ex first and gave her Virginity to him. Just felt like the poor dude always came off second best with her. Also wish their would have been more payback towards the asshole ex.

Right ending - great story (again)

dont

know if she deserved the forgiveness but she willingly paid a price most wouldn't great story i loved the line about a horny 17 yr old losing

Great story, well written. Don’t listen to the negative critics. They’re just projecting their own qualities.

Held off reading this for a long time. Don't know why, perhaps due to the length.I'm glad I finally read it though, it is a very good tale that I'll read again &again. LP

Very nice story, very enjoyable. To re- visit something another commenter said, I do think Staci deserves a second chance. Everyone does. Well, maybe not that David character. I do believe that had he sucker-punched me like he did Troy he would have had a looong stay in the hospital. Eventually. I can be very vindictive. And my shrink says I have anger issues. But I really liked the story, five stars worth. Thanks, oshaw.

dont understand the initial refusal, she and troy has been dating forever, had been talking about getting married and she had "chosen/selected " a ring. Only thing was the public setting, so why the hesitation? She ended up a "decent courageous" person but was a daddys girl and never shld have married david, that whole bit was pretty silly.

Well written and very clever

Excellent. 5 stars

Liked it but can't love it

The initial running away with David doesn't work for me

Did like the ruin of her father through, that was well written

The story was alright but making her humiliate herself for a year was cruel. Three months would have convinced me.

Only issue is couple of longer sex scenes with Janet but when the main characters finally get together, nothing. Not, he asked me to marry him again sex or she finally said yes blow job. Revise it and give us a scene of this amazing lady that made the whole story.

He was too punishing on Stacy, yes he suffered in part to his own choices not to go after her as a man would have. I happen to be experienced in that. Good story,creative with few mistakes. Glad to have read it.