Mom & Sis Drunk and Horny from CFNM

What a waste of time -- all fantasy and no action.

... at how many people so adamantly loved this story. I wanna punch Jack's head into a bowl shape, but he wasn't the one writing his inner monologue. How you gonna write the same fantasy 14 different times, throw in one paragraph of narrative, and then when shit does happen, he repeats his thoughts 14 times throughout. If I never see the words "French kiss" again in my life, it'll be too soon. I know you're a big name and write a shit-ton, but premise and itty-bitty moments of narrative aside, this had to be one of the corniest, least sexy writings I've ever encountered.

FUCK ME THAT WAS HOT. BEING A RETIRED EDITOR MY PAST PROFESSION ALMOST CAUSED ME TO STOP READING AND THEN I STARTED SAYING TO MYSELF, "THIS COULD BE THE ONE!" EVERY ONCE IN AWHILE A PERSON GETS LUCKY AND GETS TO READ A "GREAT STORY" LIKE THIS ONE. THE EARLY REPETITIONS OF HIS MOTHER SISTER FANTASY ALMOST BROKE ME. I DON'T LIKE WEARING MY READING GLASSES SO I LOADED THE STORY INTO MY TEXTALOUD READER AND GOT INTO THE STORY. I TOOK A QUICK BREAK AND WENT TO YOUR BIOGRAPHY AND WHEN I SAW YOUR BIOGRAPHY I THOUGHT, "OH WELL, FUCK ME THE AUTHOR IS SO FUCKING HOT AND SEXY", I HAD TO PLACE YOU AND A LOOK ALIKE IN THEIR PLACE, AS THE MOTHER DAUGHTER. DAAAAAAAMN GURL. THIS IS GREAT STORY AND DON'T WORRY ABOUT THE ASS HOLES MAKING BASELESS MORONIC COMMENTS. ANYWAY, THAT'S MY JOB AS A RETIRED EDITOR. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK. I KNOW I HAVE MANY HOURS OF ENJOYABLE READING WITH ALL YOUR STORIES. YOU MUST HAVE TOO MUCH TIME ON YOUR HANDS, LIKE ME! GOOD LUCK BEAUTIFUL!!!

ABSOLUTELY HARD TO CNTROL MY URGES

i hope that you had as good a time writing this one as i did reading it...hot tot hot..

Wow, Susan, it's the first story I read of yours but it's so hot, I'm making you my favorite author! I'll be glad to read all of your stories. You had me coming all through the whole five pages of it. Can't wait to read more, but enough for one night! Wow, I wish I could meet you some day, so as to tell you all of this in person!

Truly,

Angelo

(HotNYLatino)

Very nice. Always enjoy the build up. Left me hot and bothered.

Susan always writes great stories, single or series there is a feeling you get for the characters and the events they are going through. I've read erotic stories and also porn for years on end. These show what a good writer can do to not only entertain, but excite you. One doesn't always need a fellow with a horse cock or a gal that can deep throat him and swallow the gallon of cum he shoots for minutes. That's porn and we know it. Susan's stories could be in any national magazine, outside of the sex scenes which could be altered, you could be reading this in Readers Digest. I just like the way she writes, the feeling you get while reading and depending on my mood or feelings, I might blow my load after 3 paragraphs or not at all. I've read most of what my favorite writer submits and if for some reason I don't like it, I get an explanation from her. Sometimes I agree or reread and then get the gist of the story, sometimes not. Susan should be commended for her efforts and encouraged to write more or send her ideas she can incorporate into a feature. Reading this at the start of winter, I can only hope it was a winner for her. Entertaining and Imaginative way over the top, and while I've not lusted over my mother and didn't have a sister. the neighborhood girls and their mothers would fit the bill many times over. Keep up the good writing. On to another 'missed story'

Well yes and no.

I had joined back in 2001, but almost never log in.

Cannot see the point really, as almost all of the members here on the lit are either anonymous or under made-up names, so I figured that anonymous was as good a name as any :)

But when I found that I had to log in to comment on your story, as you had for some reason barred “anonymous” comments, I tried to log in but for the life of me could not remember what the username etc. was!

I made the effort to again "join" just to comment on your story, because you are such a good writer and I am hoping for some great stuff from you.

I am amazed at your almost hysterical response however!

I was hoping to coax another story from you where the mother, sister, son etc. do not simply jump in to the bed!

It really does not matter if it is the mother who lusts after the son or vice versa.

The very thought of crossing the ultimate taboo barrier surely must create a battle within the mind, which is usually totally ignored by the wham- bam- thank- you- mam kind of writers.

The reason that I did “join” in again to comment was because I believe that you have the talent to be able to describe that battle within the mind of both the mother and/or the son.

But I really do not see why you are so upset about the brief comment?

I think that you are good enough writer to let people say what they want knowing in your mind, as do many of your fans no doubt, that you are one of the best on the Lit.

So please do relax and not get your knickers in a twist as they say in England :)

Wow, I cant recall the last time I read a story that had me so engrossed, I really "enjoyed" the first two pages, and by the time I got to page 5 I had "enjoyed" the story 6 times.

But unlike ant63 I don't always enjoy Susan's stories. As matter of fact I have stopped reading several before finishing the first page because of an unpleasant storyline. What I have found about Susan's stories is that they are always compelling. Even the stories I started and was sure I was not going to enjoy I was forced to go back and finish because she had done such a good job of creating interest in the storyline. I have never been disappointed in having finished the story. I did enjoy this story and look forward to its continuation.

Your number 2 fan

... but it was such a marvellous story I simply had to vote for it - five stars, by the way - and offer you my thanks.

I hope you are successful in the competition!

One of the best shows on television, bar none, was Deadwood. There were very few likeable characters in that show. Mad Men another popular TV show, I can't think of a likeable character on that show other than Roger and Joanie but even they have their faults.

My job as a writer is to evoke emotion and obvious I have with you. I've done my job whether you like or dislike my characters. To be honest, unless we're watching cartoons, no one wants to see or to watch 'likeable characters'. Take A Rod for example, we all root for the villain while booing them.

If we didn't have Devils, Demons, Vampires, monsters, and boogie men, we'd have nothing to fear and nothing to write about.

Stay tuned for my next stories, Aunt and Cousin's Summertime Visit and Summer, my Sister's Best Friend.

Theres just no other words to describe

how my family has lived and the very bad

choices they have made.

But growing up I was always respectful.

In my mind and outwardly towards them.

Now I'm just old enough not to sugar coat

things....

My point was the main/primary character in

any story should have at least some likeable

characteristic to entice further reading.

You can be annoyed at me for being mouthy.

But I still 5* your story. ;)

Kettle black.

To the poster below, thank you for reading, voting, and commenting on my story but I don't see your point when you are as much if not more disrespectful of women than my fictional character. You live in reality my friend. You are the real deal and seem to have an even lower opinion of women then in the way that I should the characters in my story.

"5x married gold digging mother," your words not mine.

"Eldest sister a standing on the corner whore?"

"Middle sister was a stripper who only dated drunks and pot heads."

"Younger sister was a ditzy ex-cheerleader interracial

loving slut, that would suck any cock she could get

he mouth on as long as it wasn't white....." Wow! How's that for over the top?

Do any of them have names other than gold digger, stripper, whore, and slut?

What I wrote is not a love story. What I wrote is an incest story. If you're looking for a love story, perhaps you should read the romance category. If you think this story offends your twisted sensibilities, wait until you my story, Aunt and Cousin's Summertime visit.

SusanJillParker