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Click hereAfter that, the two women got along okay, if not fast friends. Capri kept working away – I wasn't her only case. I wasn't sure why she wouldn't leave but I wasn't sure how to make her leave. Sometime past ten, Kuiko fell asleep on the sofa and I let her sleep. I remained in the corner except for getting Capri and myself something to drink and a trip to the toilet.
Detective Angel Kristi came to my door a bit past midnight. I let her in as Capri stirred from a light sleep in the chair. She scanned the room, took in Capri and Kuiko (still asleep) then looked at me. I motioned her over because I didn't feel like shouting across the room.
"Capri O'Hara," I made the introductions, "this is Detective Angel Kristi, the police officer who called you."
"Angel, this is the public defender you got for me," I added. "She's really good." Angel swung around the sofa and walked over to me.
"Are you okay?" Angel asked.
"Hi, nice to meet you," Capri yawned.
"As long as you have a loose definition of okay then I'm okay," I sighed. I reached up, waited for Angel to put her hand in my own then pulled her down into my lap, her legs straddling my own.
"Israel, don't," Kristi whispered.
"I don't know how much longer I'm going to be able to do what a normal man should be able to do," I explained. "I'm trying to put away my fear long enough to have something worth remembering." I held one of her hands in mine. My other hand reached around to the back of her head and pulled her close until our lips gently touched.
Her free hand stroked the side of my face. Tears rolled down my cheeks. When I momentarily broke our kiss, I realized she was crying too. I didn't know if this was pathetic, tragic, or both. Those thoughts were pushed aside so I could enjoy the simplicity of the moment – a boy kissing a girl. It was an innocence that had been torn away from me long ago, so I held onto this shade as long as I could.
I agree with some of the commenters saying that they don't really think this story belongs on a site like literotica, but I'm definitely not complaining. This is one of the best written stories I've ever read and it portrays the human condition and the way people think in a way that I could only dream of. Seriously, I WISH I could write characters that were this human. Amazing work, and I'm glad I've found it.
God, this is a depressing story. Why is it allowed for an erotica-themed website? It has almost none in it.
Since the author is clearly trying to make a point about how the sexes see each other in real life, wouldn't a non-adult story site be more appropriate?
Half the words used would have been sufficient for this section. Probably should have been filed under Fetish or BDSM...
I really enjoy the 180 degree look at society. Really thought provoking. Be careful what you wish for.
This is a great story so far, very interesting and thought provoking. 5 stars.
Thanks Geo. Great post and yes this is an incredibly well written story. The ideas writers come up with blow my mind. Damn good work!!
Ed
It is a deeply disturbing story, but not in a negative manner. That it IS disturbing, is a testament to your ability to describe the human condition.
Utilizing gender reversal helps the description process, allowing the message to be heard without distraction.
We are a strange creature, we humans. In college, my girlfriend had a game called 'Blacks & Whites'. It was not a emotionally or socially 'safe' game; there was a LOT of uncomfortableness in the game. It was brutally honest, for certain, about the interactions and social problems of race.
There was an African American couple we were friends with, and on a handful of occasions, we would play the game. But, just to make it even MORE uncomfortable, we would trade roles. During the game, we would play as black characters in the game, and our friends would play as white characters.
We had a lot of laughs, but also shared a lot of powerful experiences. It's difficult to explain how absurd a situation can be when you hear a young, 20 something white woman portraying a black woman, and a 20 something black woman portraying a white woman in a racially charged interaction.
It was powerful, just as 'One in Ten' is.
Thanks for sharing your talent and creativity, and thanks for all the it takes to put together a submission at the quality level you do.
GeoD78
great prose, it's also depressing as hell, so I can't continue - my soul hurts too much.
I have read a great many stories, erotic and otherwise. This one is top notch...