Pawn Among Wolves Ch. 17

Absolutely loved this story! Might be my favorite werewolf story on Literotica! Keep on writing please!!

Carol G

I have never commented on a story in the many years I have been on this site. This is such an incredible story and I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed it! I absolutely love Mac and Gemma!! Thank you so so much for sharing this with us.

Finally I can get my life back. Phew! Riveting, well written, thank you so much.

Wow! WOw!! WOW!!! I 🙇‍♀️ Bow to you Oh Great Alfamme!!! Identical TWINS!!! I was Shocked, Excited, Jubilant, Suspicious, I went back Several Times And I was Right There With Gemma being upset! So Many Questions! When DID Ulf appear!?! Was it when he was stand offish!?! I’m going to reread it but I need a lil break so I’ll Be Back! The death rain scene O!M!G!! Who were the Human woman and Man and Female Male wolfs who stood up and said they couldn’t believe he’d Used it!?! My Heart Broke!!! Why kill Rupert!?! Dear, Sneaky, Lovable Rupert! And only OND DAY with a grandparent it sounds like he’d NEVER MET!!! Oh you’re a GREAT story teller! The way your mind works...just WOW!!! I’m gonna go read the extended scene now I Hope it’s Long!!! Sorry to see it end But 🤷‍♀️

Eat, sleep, read 'Pawn Among Wolves'. What a wonderful week it was!

I loved this story and the characters were so well written. Even the wolf dialect. and the way Mac felt about his picchu: Heart melting, action packed and sexy says the LitRot Post. Lol. No truly a great story. Thank you for giving it to us!

I loved every single, and expanded, moment of this story! I can't wait to see what you might get them up to in the future. I mean you did kind of leave us hanging on whether Gem and Mac get to have children, and then there is the five year expulsion from the packs that he held. There is the Adam business that needs to have its own story and then we just have to know more of what Mac does in Europe! I love your stories and the way you write, please keep writing!!!

Enjoyed every minute of it, can't wait to see what else you come up with over time

I first found this story a few days after you posted the first chapter. I decided to ignore the subsequent installments waiting until it was finished. Obviously, I missed that you had posted the final chapter last year, so what brought me back to this story was the extended scene. Boy am I glad I noticed that posting so that I could jump into this story from the beginning and read until the very end!

When I posted my first comment on your first chapter I complimented you on the inner dialogue. That remained excellent through out the story.

I've read other comments on this final chapter and some I agree with, some I do not. Ever the contrarian, I did not find Gemma annoying during the first half of the story. You wrote something when she was very first turned into a werewolf that she was extremely taken with how the colors were brighter, the scents richer and nuanced, the textures felt more keenly. When she was sitting in the hill watching the newly freed parents gathering their cubs you wrote something about her attention span being taken in different directions but she was very clumsy as her wolf self and morphing back to a human would have left her naked so she remained in place even though she wanted to explore. Because of this I attributed her indefatigable libido as yet another heightened sense. Now that she could smell her own arousal and the richer scents of Mac's arousal her body was constantly in a state of sexual arousal, sexual response, more arousal, more response. Therefor, I think you've laid the ground work for her attention deficit disorder and libido, but maybe a sentence here and there reminding readers experiencing the world through wolf senses would take a long time for her to learn to regulate her response pattern. Even though Mac tells her this a few times, perhaps people missed it.

I would have liked some sort of explanation about Macs age and the time periods when past events happened in relation to Mac. Didn't need to know ancient history time period but it was confusing, to me, if Mac was 50, 125... He had degrees so his college days must have been relatively recent but when was he married and how old was he when he and his twin decided to switch places.

Speaking of the twin thing, I will have to go back and retread the last two chapters but I was very confused about how she got from being on the stage being whipped to how she got down below in some corridor with Mac standing in front of her.

I think the action/fight scenes were well done and I could mostly follow them. However, at times the seizeless cutting and slashing of endless ranks of warriors got to be too much. Trying to picture a pile of amputated limbs and piles of dead bodies and gallons and gallons of blood splattered, it made me wonder how Gemma wasn't vomiting.

Finally, Mac...perfect. Liked him and thought him the perfect combination of flawed perfection. You really did an excellent job bringing in various small characters here and there to advance the story. We don't always have to have every character's arc explained. Although at the end I did wonder what happened to Samuel, and I did wonder what was going on with Adam while the major battles were happening. Maybe I missed it, but I assumed he was with Ada spying on the Tzo.

I completely disagree with the person who seemed to take offense about making the Chinese the bad Tzo invaders. China has become one of the worst polluted countries in the world and the outcry of their own people about the loss of land to make way for the Three Rivers Damn, while the US is just as guilty of the use of eminent domain, is loud and relatively recent. Granted, you could have made them Mexican because Mexico City is number one in polluted atmosphere, but that wouldn't have fit too well with the involvement of so many different cultures you were trying to attribute to the various packs.

In conclusion, you rock!

.....you establish early on that wolves are most often born in pairs. It fit right in with me and even resonated with me as once I dated an identical twin who, like Mac, did not tell me. I felt that same sense of shock upon seeing this look alike acting completely unlike "my" twin.