Personal Growth

But the sex -- what there is of it -- is too hurried. It's as if you can't wait to get through with it.

The forcefulness wasn't what this story needed. Presumably she's a virgin -- a real virgin with no sex experience at all since boys ignored her so completely before the hormone treatments. One would expect that she'd be at least a little reticent about things sexual until she got used to it.

If he just stared at the tits at first rather than grabbing them -- sooner or later she'd have wanted to know what he thought of them. That would have been the opportunity to describe them. We know they're big, but what else? Firm? Unblemished? Freckled? What did the nipples look like? Were they wide? Narrow? Hard? How far did they stick out?

She could have asked him for his opinion of them. Would he like to feel them? How did he feel them? Cup them? Squeeze them? Caress them? How did they feel to him? He could have asked if he could kiss them. Suck them?

He could have told her how gorgeous they were, did she want to see/feel hw hard she'd made him? Let her touch look at the bulge in his pants. Feel the bulge in his pants. Moan/groan when she touched it.

And so on -- slowly -- step by step. The more steps the better.

Had real potential. Didn't fulfill that potential.

Wery good! Cant wait for the next chapter. She is going to love the atention, the growth, the shopping for new sexier clothes. The new Bimbo is born!

Maybe add some tattoos and or piercings.

Excellent story, very hot. I can't wait for part 2.