Ray Ch. 02: Damsel

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There were too many more arguments he could pick with her about her job, her choices, her fearlessness, but he had already risked enough for one night. "I don't want my favorite dessert to get damaged."

The quiet laugh sounded again, reassuring him his knocks on her door would still be answered.

"I'm sorry I yelled at you," he started, hoping to take advantage of the moment. "I worry about you, and I worry about you in that job—"

"I don't know if anything has ever turned me on more than watching you drag that asshole to the ground, Officer Ray." There it was, the wall he always crashed into. But he would keep running for it, hitting it over and over until one day he would be strong enough to break it down. "Do you want to come in and finish your dessert, Officer Ray?"

If this was as close to her soul as she would allow him, he would take what he could get. It was closer than he deserved, especially after his earlier behavior, and he couldn't let it destroy him that this was the only part of herself she would ever allow him to know. "Yes, Mistress."

He followed her into the house, locking the door behind him then getting to his knees to crawl behind her to the bedroom. She peeled off her sweatshirt and pants, leaving them in a pile on the floor in front of him, then sank stomach first into the mattress on her bed. His tongue began at her ankles, then circled over the bruises already darkening on her legs. The sight brought a resurgence of anger within him. A man was built to protect, the instinct to do so well written into his being, and that instinct boiled through him as he imagined how her bruises came to be.

He caressed her marred skin with his lips as if he could erase the marks from her body. When he felt eyes on him he glanced up, keeping his tongue pressed into her as her eyes watched him. For the first time he realized how small she was. She had always seemed larger than life, standing over him and smiling down at him with a confidence an army couldn't shatter. But when he had seen her running, chasing a man twice her size down a dark, empty street, his heart had stopped. He had thought she may punish him for following her, but she could lock him up for a year if she chose and he still wouldn't wish he could go back and change his decision.

She rolled over when he reached her thighs and spread her legs. He buried his head between them, sucking her clit into his mouth. His cage dug into his skin, the discomfort chasing the other thoughts from his head and bringing his focus back to where it belonged. Her hands massaged into her breasts, her fingers circling over the hardened peaks in the middle. He watched from between her thighs, his tongue tracing soft patterns into her skin.

He took his time to enjoy her, hoping his tongue was soothing away the memory of the night. Every so often her body would shiver, alerting him he'd hit a sensitive area. He'd soften his tongue, circling the spot until her muscles relaxed again. He had learned the basics of the female orgasm in his twenties, but had mastered the true secrets in his slave training. It builds. It builds. Let it build. Let it build. How many slaves had told him that when he was still in training? And how long had it taken him to believe them?

Her hands stopped moving over her breasts, her eyelids creasing as they squeezed tighter. "Keep going," the whisper gasped from her mouth. It was a waste of words. There was nothing that would stop him from completing his service.

Her legs tightened, her breath uneven as it moaned from her lips. Her need dripped down his chin, soaking the small trail of dark hair covering it. Her moan exploded from her mouth as her body arched off the bed. His tongue never faltered, the spasms of her body flowing through it. When she shoved his head away he sat up and pushed two fingers inside her, curling them up to draw out her climax. Her body arched again, her need pouring down his hand as her body clamped down repeatedly against his.

"Enough!" she moaned, grasping at his arm. "Enough."

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She rolled into the middle of her empty bed, the soreness permeating through her body forcing her awake. The sunlight was just a soft glow starting to illuminate her bedroom, but memories of Ben's smile from the back of the police cruiser wouldn't allow her to remain at peace. She made her way to the bathroom and turned on the light, squinting as it assaulted her eyes. She blindly dug through her medicine chest, trying to find Advil or Tylenol. When she found the bottle she was looking for she began limping her way towards the kitchen. She filled a glass with water from the dispenser on her refrigerator, poured two pills into her hand then popped them into her mouth.

When she turned around the white bakery bag was calling to her from the counter. She pulled out a cookie and stuffed it into her mouth. She had sent Ray home after she recovered enough function in her legs to walk him to the front door. She never allowed him to stay longer than was necessary to fulfill her needs. No matter how good he was at what he did, there were some lines she preferred not to cross.

She took the bag of cookies with her to her bedroom and climbed back under the covers. After she shoved another cookie in her mouth she reached over and grabbed her phone off the nightstand, turning it back on. The screen lit up to inform her of eight missed calls, two from a number she didn't know and the rest from the relief staff she had called in.

"This message is for Natalie Morris. This is Officer Gomes. Ben Whitmore was just brought into custody but we can't keep him. Per his court order he's to be remanded to your treatment facility if arrested unless arrested on felony charges. I'll try calling the other number I have for you..."

She stared down at the screen, the next voicemail from her on duty staff. Even if she refused to listen to it, it wouldn't make the problem disappear.

"Natalie, this is Laura. Alias is back. We had to go get him..."

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AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

Great chapter. I love the drive Natalie has in her job & her strength...strength enough to reward Ray for his assistance. Different to Finn but still excellent.

Will527Will527about 1 year ago

You make me want to submit in so many ways...

SyptemberSmythSyptemberSmythover 5 years agoAuthor
Re: Anonymous lolwut

Actually, assault and battery can result in either a misdemeanor or felony charge. Usually the severity of the charge is based on the severity of the injuries to the victim and if a weapon was used, though other factors are also taken into consideration. Feel free to google this information if you want to do further research on the subject.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Lolwut

"Remanded to your facility unless arrested on felony charges"? Isn't assault a felony? I'm fairly sure it is.

stylusink666stylusink666almost 6 years ago
To the person below me - what low scores?

The author has H for Hot for every story that he published.

This is in itself an accomplishment.

Most BDSM stories don't get half as much stars and get an average of 0 comments.

SyptemberSmythSyptemberSmythalmost 6 years agoAuthor
Thank You

@UrSquireG, allthatisfuta, Emirus, and anonymous x2

Thank you all so much for the feedback on this story. I know this story is very different from Finn, but I am trying my hardest to take risks in my writing and I have to go where my heart takes me. By your comments, however, I must be going in the right direction. Chapter 3 is almost complete and will hopefully be posted either towards the end of next week or the beginning of the week after.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Wow

This is amazin

your story captivstes the heart from the first paragraph.

Please post soon

Will be checking daily

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
I dont get the low scores

This is sooooo good i read it past my bed time lol

Cant wait for the next

Post it soon please

EmirusEmirusalmost 6 years ago
You give me a problem every time

You do give me a problem every time one of your offerings appears. It’s the temptation to give you 5⭐️‘s and then read the story. 😊

I’m glad that the you chose to make the dynamic between Natalie and Ray completely different from Morgan and Finn. It makes this a more gritty story and I can see the improvement in your writing. I can see why, for example, you use Lexi and Lexa to differentiate between “normal life” and “chateau life” but you have to make sure you use the correct name for the occasion. I assume you intend to use Elise/Elsa to specifically illustrate a particular point if you do intend to keep her.

I think you are aware by now of my opinion of your ability so I would like to make a specific grammatical observation. The action is set in the US so American English is, of course, necessary. You can’t talk about the bonnet of a car it has to be the hood. “Gotten” is not the correct word it’s “got” but as Americans say “gotten” then that’s the word that must be used for a story set in the US.

But “drug” is a pharmaceutical product. It’s a noun not a verb. Therefore “her tongue flicked against his earlobe and then drug its way over his outer ear” and “nails drug through his hair” is absolutely wrong. The word is “dragged”. I’ve read many stories in which American writers have used the word “drug” instead of “dragged” but never any about which I cared enough to make a comment. I hope I’ve put that in a way that doesn’t appear malicious.

As always I look forward to the next instalment.

allthatisfutaallthatisfutaalmost 6 years ago
Fucking awesome

Top notch, super sexy, and high quality. Just read Finn a few days ago, it was hard to put down. Started reading this one today.

Ray’s story has a more complex, more interesting set of characters. The weird dynamic between the protagonists is intriguing. I feel like we only scratched the surface here. Drop little background morsels slowly as you go, because right now they both form a huge riddle which I’m super curious about. The shift between the officer-slave was so well done. Believable without falling into cliché’. No damsels in distress were hurt during the making of this chapter.

Some of the supporting cast are amazing. The sex offender is scary as fuck (Like a little Hannibal the Cannibal - a stuff of nightmares, yummy). Madame Lex Is excellent too.

The back story is good, if a little unbelievable (Any institute like that would have security fully capable of handling problematic patients. People whos jut been assaulted, don’t think about sex – they might suffer sexual dysfunction for years after an assault. Maybe she’ll realize what really happened tomorrow?)

Some things I’d like to see. Not criticism, just friendly advice. Take it, don’t take it, your call. It’s your story.

Avoid generic characters. Like the cheap looking abusive dominatrix. Yeah, she’s there for a purpose, doesn’t mean she has to be so random. Cheap looking, no self-awareness, stupid? Really? Bigger antagonists will make your protagonists shine. Like Ben Alias reflects on Natalia. Maybe Elises is super hot, a local beauty queen worshiped by men. Maybe when we see her in real life she’s a teacher adored by her students. Something that makes her more interesting. It doesn’t need to be big of a something, but supporting cast need your loving imagination too.

I think you’re a romantic at heart, because your stories when all said and done are about two people who are crazy about each other and within the confines of their strange BDSM world find monogamy. Don’t change that, if that your thing – you should always write a story you always wanted to read not conform to what other expect of you (as you so beautifully said in your profile song). But challenge that. Within that frame you have set, don’t be afraid to rock the ship.

Why can’t Ray have real good fun with another Mistress? Hey, maybe you could redeem Elises by making her take the challenge and give Ray the best session he ever had. That would make her an interesting antagonist. Make It a weird love triangle? I want t see Natalia envy. I want to see Ray get envy. I want to see your heroes fall, and suffer, rise, fail, and rise again.

Whew. To sum it up, just wanted to say that I’m sure glad I found you. You’re the best story writer on this site. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.

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