All Comments on 'Shhh!'

More and some more with mom as well

Another home run, I love your stories. Especially when it's my favorite kink...the brother / sister stories go straight to my libido.

Nice premise.

Good backstory.

The in-the-dark-room sex pretty much had to happen fast, without too much buildup. But why did the next bout go so fast? A little not-being-immediately-naked would have made things hotter. A little reluctance on one or both their parts, reluctance that had to be overcome would have been nice.

Baring their bodies to each other could have been slow. Step-by-step rather than bare ass naked all at once.

Perhaps some discussion as to what he liked best the time before. Would he like som more of that again?

Perhaps some edging -- both him and her.

Nevertheless, a nice, well written story.

Five stars.

Wow, almost perfect. A tiny bit more proof-reading is all.

Lovely, loving, erotic story.

Amazingly erotic… one of the best I’ve read

One of the more erotic stories here! Excellent mix of hot sex, humor and love. Not too much love to make it a romance story, everything is pretty well in balance.

Well done, Sir, well done Indeed!

Uncle Al

Really nice story. Particularly liked Julie's little flashback to when her mother praised her for teaching Kyle how to ride a bicycle. That's inspired.

What a turn-on, I loved it! Your story definitely succeeded in getting me aroused! Wow...

Well plotted and very enjoyable.

You had a whole bunch of places where you should have used 'too' instead of 'to', but I'm not deducting points for that. I still gave you a 5. There were so many 'OMG' moments that I couldn't have scored you less than 5. Some I saw coming, like Mindy being unavailable (but I didn't guess because of her period until she came back out of the bathroom). Others caught me totally by surprise like the earring getting lost in the bed.

Fantastic job 👏 👍

Read it before and was able to give it another 5/5, still one of the very, very best stories on LIT!

Excellent dialogue and story.

Quite a few missing words and misspellings, though.

definitely needed some editing but the overall story was fun and sexy enough to get away with it! 5/5

I've read many of lc68's stories and like them. I prefere it when the protagonists are not just in lust, butbin love. One point though. Why seems almost everybody seems to be hung up on sex as seen in porn movies? They way it's acted out to a large part is due to make it visually appealing and to avoid boredom. But not even pornstars fuck like that in privat, at least non of those who gave interwiews about it. Might be different if they want to promote a movie, though. However, if you are not completely brain washed by porn or get your rocks off through kinks, it's more satisfying to put thingy A into slot B and come there. Nothing against kinky stuff or porn addiction, but why are there comparably such few stories catering to people who go off because of the emotional bond with their partner more than anything, which had to include more intimacy and spontaneity during sex instead of play acting. If I had half the talent of lc68 I'd try to provide something like that myself, although it'd have to be in German, since I'm just

a_reader_from_germany

WAUW !

Thanks for sharing ;-)

Brothers an 18 year bulky old hockey player who can grow a beard but his parents leave his 20 year old sister in charge of him when they go away. And she marches him into the house when he's inappropriate to her friend, where she scolds him like he's 9. Ok.

Another great story. Thanks for sharing.

Very good

Very hot

Very romantic

Loved it - but this needs some editing to polish it up. The "too/to" instances were becoming a bit too distracting.

Loved the plot and the characters but like all the other comments, you need a proofreader. You are a great writer, never doubt it. I gave you 5 stars which would be an A but not an A+. Don't rely on spell check, reread the story yourself at least 4 times before submitting it if you can't find a proofreader.

One of the best stories ever

One of the best, unquestionably, but as a pedant, I must confess the grammar was a tad distracting.

Yeah I loved it but, was a tad disappointed there was no email from Mindy asking Julie if she enjoyed her Saturday night fuck with her brother 'cos I'm sure she would have known, the arguments were not that convincing. I really did enjoy the story though but inaccurate grammar in places was a bit distracting as some of your other commentators also noticed. But fun.

I just can’t imagine pulling out to spray a woman’s dace or tits.

My first day having sex I pulled back for a final hammering into her & went too far, pulling out.

I desperately tried to get back in but hit her rosebud and had to come just pressing against her.

What a disappointment!!

I’d NEVER deliberately pull out for any reason after that!

Bill S.

What can I say.....fantastic thinking about the shuuuus,the earing and having the time of the month great story,nicely laid out,keep them cumming(so to speak).

(12/28/2021) This was a very nice read, hot, funny, dramatic, and quite believable. I believe there were a few word hiccups but nothing that took anything away from this enjoyable read. This would make a great intro to a great Roneo and Juliet type of series. Well done; five stars!

Came for the porn, stayed for the story

For Pete's sake, get on with it already!

I want more

Lovely story. Thought it was great. Love the detail in the intimacy. Keep writing .

Sweet and hot. Love it!!

An erotic, fun, loving read.

It’s a good story when there is a character you care about.

This one had two.

Too long and boring

i am a fan of bro-sis stories. i think this is one of the top 20 i have read. thank you.

fun journey enjoyed it.

Very sexy, well done!

5 of 5

This one has perfect pacing. Sexy right from the start while building all the way through. Well-developed characters, in a story about actual love/care, make this a wonderful, fulfilling read.

This was my second read (first one when it was newly released) and probably not the last.

Thank You, lovecraft68. Another gem!

Great story. Loving and sexy. Wonderful story.

Another cracking yarn from a master storyteller. Very hot and paced perfectly. Five from me.

For me it stretched out to long. once you got to the sex it was amazing.

I loved every part of the story. It was absolutely amazing! I even formed a bit of a crush on both Julie and Kyle. The way Kyle was always being so sweet was just so great.

The only thing that makes this not perfect were the typos. There were a few times where I had to reread a paragraph, but otherwise it was fantastic!

dream sister... sighhh.. one can only dream or read about it xD

5/5

Fun.

Structurally loading sex on the back end of the story creates boredom. The first 7 pages were pretty solid. Then you have all the "adventures" that are normally touched on over the course of a romantic arc all back to back to back to back to back. There is no juxtaposition so it feels like a plateau.

This is one of your better stories. You have a knack for writing feckless men, while still feckless, the anxiety around not being Don Juan is a relatable struggle.

Enjoyed tremendously. Good job. Could be basis for a novel.

Great story, I kinda wished she had confessed the truth to Mindy, I'd like to think that she would help them keep the secret.

There were a few mildly distracting typos and some to/too and your/you're mistakes, that took away from the story.

She's on her way to being pregnant with their first child. I wonder what Mindy, not to mention their parents, will have to say about that? Ah, well, maybe Julie and Kyle can move to Panama, and raise a family of crossbred brats. Maybe Mindy can join in the fun, and she and Julie can go full out bi. Maybe Julie can fuck her Dad, and Kyle can do his Mom. Why not? Who needs realism? Let's go all out West Virginia--- Yee Haaaa!

Very sneaky sexy

So fucking hot

As the last person said, "So fucking hot!"

Great job on this story. I look forward to reading more of your work!

By far the best story on the site.

This just may be my favorite story in ALL of Literotica. I had an older sister that I always admired and thought was absolutely gorgeous. I only wish something like this had happened to bring us together. Thanks for the story. I think I will be revisiting this one often and placing myself in Kyle's place

Looks like i'll be the odd man out here. That's okay, i can live with that but i found it Difficult in getting past the "whiny, shy, pathetic 18 year old Male" which lasted basically the First half of the story. And i did finish the story. I look for the build-up; the awareness; maybe some normal, expected emotional conflict. Then the "coming to terms" and finally the freedom to pursue the passion, closeness, love, tenderness and definitely Sex. I don't have to see it as a Smooth ride void of drama but it does have to be erotic. I have found a Few like this and i am still looking. Amongst all of this, i look for the details of history as well as visuals And audible descriptors; Very important! Maybe that's the voyeur in me. I don't usually mention this in Any story i read but this one had many typos and it did cause distractions. And Sentence structure as well. The story just seemed to be "rushed".

Just like LC68, my personal kink is brother and sister incest though i enjoy All sub-cats of incest (mother/son, dad/daughter, etc). When looking for what i consider a Steamy story, i basically look for stories that already have what I consider a high rating (4.7 and up). Naturally when i saw the current rating for this story, i gave it a try. LC68 has many stories that i have read and enjoyed and will again. All of this of course is jmo.

As a last note, if i don't really enjoy a story, i don't rate it. I have No desire to harm a current story rating. I appreciate the stories that this author and others have contributed as i don't have a creative cell in my body. -dave

When you combine romance within this genre - just WOW! Awesome! Magnifique!

A very fun romp!

Thank you, lc68!

Lovely sensuality and emotionality connected story, loved it.

One of the all-time greats here! Maybe the best ever. I never had a sister; always wished I had. Was this what I missed out on?

Loved the story. Some obvious errors that could have been avoided if you carefully read it. But even I miss things. Either way as someone that prefers mother and sons stories this one was awesome.

Such a loving, romantic story in the end. I can't understand how so many people(including doctors) find this kind of love gross ,ick, yuck etc To me, it doesn't get any better than this unless maybe mother with son. It is ever so lovely!

Great story, I would love some more of these two…

Just as good this time as the first time.

Do you remember in the movie "Pretty Woman" where Julia Robert's character goes back to the dress shop that wouldn't help her, dressed to the nines, with bags of clothes. She asked if they remembered her. They didn't, so she refreshed their memory. And then she asked if they worked on commission. They said yes. She said big mistake, big... as she flaunted all of her purchases, and walked out.

Kyle and sisters friends should have gone to the sorority house and did the same thing to the slut that outed Kyle. Then turned the table on her, and ruined her with her sorority. Big mistake, big...

Great job, thanks for sharing.

What I would do for a sister like that

It is not often that I quit a story before the end

But this one moved slower than a glacier

You turned one of my all time favorite stories and FUCKED IT UP. Kyle had the coolest sister ever and he couldn't have been thankful and enjoyed knowing what she did for him. No he had to push it and get angry, what a little shit. She should have let him cry like a baby. Just have Mindy suck or hand job him, it's all sex and not done by himself. Problem solved...I couldn't read past that point, you turned a 5 into a 1 because there's no 0!

I loved it 😘 💕

The brother was an egotistical asshole. Yelling, threatening blackmail, and bullying one of the best Sisters ever... Because of that character I only give a 3 star rating.

yeah, he was definitely a dick, and not in a good way, to his sister. he didn't really deserve her. written with a more likable character for the brother this would have been far more compelling than it was, but still a good read.

This took me quite a few sit downs to finish but here we are at the end. First of all, the passion, wordplay and banter were pretty top notch. I enjoyed it thoroughly and thought was given to every part of the story. I don't necessarily agree with male characters always having a lack of confidence because I feel like they need to employ some level of strategy in the game since it doesn't seem realistic to get sex from pity. It'd be nice as a 18 - 20 year old guy for that to be the case but unfortunately that's not how the world works lol. Great story, always kept me guessing and reading to find out what happened next and it certainly lived up to the subtle but now very telling title. 5/5 and subscribed!

I loved it. Perfect. Frankly, I prefer hot sex rooted in love. Well done!

I swear this guy cannot write a single bad story!!

Excellent again! Only one thing I didn't agree with...

Based on his character before hand, he shouldn't have been yelling at her, or mad, about the 'pity fuck'... he should have been quiet and broken yet again. Then let her anger and words show him it wasn't 'pity', it was 'love'.. but that's my opinion.

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I liked how it evolved at the end there into a more deep connection, with both brother and sister expressing their love and desire to be each other's one-and-only. The little head-and-tail coin flip joke at the end was a nice touch of humour. It would have been nice to see a little more into their future past this, to see if they went the distance, so to speak, but I suppose we'll just have to wonder. I like to imagine they did. Kyle finally has someone that truly loves and appreciates him, and Julie has someone that truly loves her and is comfortable enough with to be herself, including her wild side, something she never felt she could be with anyone else.

Great story, reminds me of my sister and me.

Good story, nice pacing, well done getting us to the ending we all knew was going to happen.

Some overdone tropes and a few too many spelling/grammar errors knock it down a star because for some it breaks the immersion factor. Easily fixed if reread by a concerned author.

Thanks for writing.

This is a bit odd for me when Kyle is my boss sons name

Enjoyed this story as always. Even more so since it was with brother and sister. Too bad there is not more family connections like this… or are there? I like your creativity but wish you would obtain a competent proofreader as there are far too many spelling errors, grammar mistake, and omissions that could be easily corrected .

Overall a good story and I wouldn’t be too critical, but two things:

1. Maybe this is just an old story but it needs better proof reading or editing too many mistakes.. why is the sister fantasizing about “bog fucking cock”? Obvious spelling and grammar could be fixed on some things.

2. This is the second bro sis story I’ve read from you after oh my god bro where the older sister is a semi slut and the younger brother is a trembling virgin… it’s kind of a buzz kill to be honest and maybe once is fine but reusing the the same trope and making it so the sister has to help him.. and their never really on a level playing field. I just think it may be a little less deflating especially early on in the story if the bro sis dynamic was more even and one wasn’t more sexually experienced than the other.. I think that’d be a more appealing premise to more people than just a slutty big sister who can get sex cus she’s a hot girl wants to help her little bro to feel better and become a man. The story was good enough don’t get me wrong but I think more people find it appealing when bro sis are more equal and there isn’t a huge slut differential between them.

This was pretty amazing. It's funny, sexy, and has a love story and that's always nice to read. Thank you for writing this and sharing.

That was good good steady start and then it exploded just like me several times

thanks

Our mom knew we were fucking and never said anything about it. Why not? Because when she was a kid she had a crush on her brother, our Uncle Edge, and when he went into the military mom cried for weeks. When he got out, they fucked like rabbits..., even in front of their mother, our Mawmaw... who thought it was a phase, but to this day when UE comes over and leaves in the a.m., mom walks around smiling, hugging and kissing us for a week!

Ah! The magic of mutually sexually attracted incest. There is nothing finer...

@Junglediffdaddy

You made two good points.

Let me add that I'm somewhat miffed by the fact that many of the esteemed authors, who invest time and effort to entertain us, are either to lazy, at least intellectually, or too unimaginative to afford the reader with adequate descriptionsupon of sexual activities.

They just go ahead and plague us with blow by blow descriptions of scenes to be found in run of the mill porn movies. It even gets weirder if the protagonists point out this fact in an effort to convince the reader that they just encounter the best than can be achieved in the field of human sexual interaction. This is done by describing some activity of the partner in combination with the phrase "like a pornstar". For instance "It felt heavenly to have my cock sucked by sis who went at it like a pornstar." That's a paradox statement in my opinion. The actions of pornstars are not primarily aimed at providing their costars with a maximum of satisfaction, comfort and ease, they are focused on making it look good for us, the voyeurs so to speak. I'm not even talking about the value of achieving physical closeness during sex. In adult films the actors on average have much less skin to skin contact than any couple instinctively would try to achieve, because poses are preferred that allow the onlooker to have an unobstructed view of the bodyparts that usually draw the most attention.

And what about describing tenderness and affection between people who are in love or are getting there?

So yes, a story like this is porn too, but it's not visual, so why use cliches from porn movies that for a large part exist (the cliches) because of their visual appeal? And why, more specifically, stoop to that level in stories that are basically romances or have a strong romantic touch? This is going so far as to replicate the cum shot of the adult film industry as one if not the pinnacle of sexual fulfilment. It's just a form of coitus interruptus, so nothing really exciting unless you mainly get off on marking your territory. Why would you want to do this if you sense the mutual commitment or even professed it verbally?

Both the omnipresence of said porn movie scene emulations and the satisfaction the readership seemingly draws from them probably result from more than one generation being conditioned by watching almost standardized adult films (as far as the mainstream goes). There's obviously not much room anymore for spontaneity, for going with the flow and for living the moment as inspired by physical and emotional sensations.

Wow, you got some real comments to this story. Yes, I understand a little of what Jungled pointed out, but it didn't make a difference in how I enjoyed the story. Wish I'd had a sister to love me. I liked the developing characters like Mindy and the other girls. I felt like I was there watching the whole time. Incest makes good sense to me. Who should be closer than siblings. Thanks for the tale.

So close to home with this talking about penn state and we’re you talking about Newport pa

Excellent'

This is one of the best sibling sex stories I have ever read and I read almost all I can find. My sister and I had near sex that was interrupted by our aunt barging in my bedroom one afternoon. I did think the sex at the end of the story was drawn out a little too much. Overall though, well done!

Epilogue? ""Marriage""? Kids??

That was really cute. And hot. Sequel of how they sneak around their parents would be fun. Or maybe they inherited their incest feelings from mom or dad.

Apparently I've already read this but I don't remember, the good thing about a bad memory? It's always the first time. Great story though.