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He hadn't seen any leave from the bullpen that way, so he could only assume they came from somewhere else.
He casted Balefire at the four of them, twice, before they completely closed, and then a third time as the four angels closed on the two succubae. He ordered one of the four warriors to move to the back, and then hit them with Balefire again. One of his succubae died, but the warrior returned the favor immediately bringing them down to three.
He hit with another balefire which brought him below two hundred mana, so he needed to be careful, and an imp hit the four with that chain lightning spell.
Two more of the angels died in the rear, and so far, the front was still holding.
He lost the last succubae right before the last angel died, and sent his warrior back up front.
Shit, he'd lost all of the succubae, which meant the angels started to hit harder and drive into the room. He summoned two more succubae as fast as he could, but now the angels were among them, and there were at least six left.
He was in a corner, so he backed up and started to cast Balefire over and over again, until there were only two angels left, and then he switched to Fiend Fire.
The last angel left was the Captain, and he was making mincemeat of his warriors which were over ten levels lower, they all were level thirteen. Still, they'd managed to kill twenty-four angels a couple of levels higher, and if they killed the Captain twelve levels higher he had to imagine he'd level a lot.
If he didn't die.
He kept casting Fiend Fire until he was out of mana completely. The captain looked hurt, but he was still going strong, and two of his warriors were dead already. His imps continued to cast spells however, and the captain was surrounded by four melee attackers.
He blew out a breath and made it five, and struck out with the staff.
He missed, but tried again.
He screamed as the captain's sword bit into his side, but lunged forward and nailed the bastard right in the throat. That one swipe he'd taken had cost almost eighty hit points, but he still had over three hundred. He swung again and his staff was parried, but his two warriors and succubae all hit at the same time. The captain's wings turned to dust, and he fell to the floor dead. Six popups hit his screen at the end of the fight.
You have leveled! You are now level 14!
You have leveled! You are now level 15!
You have leveled! You are now level 16!
You have leveled! You are now level 17!
You have leveled! You are now level 18!
You have leveled! You are now level 19!
He sighed, and looted the corpses. The captain's blade wasn't anything special, it was just like all the blades the angels in here used, and he walked away with twenty-five of them, as well as two fifty in silver coin.
Still, the swords were better than the old ones, and worth eight gold instead of two. That should net him some good coin if the same percentage holds. Right around a hundred fifty gold for all of them.
He assigned twenty points each to intelligence, constitution, and wisdom. He sighed, he was only twenty-nine percent from level twenty, when he could gain the advanced summon spell. He already had four slots for that, and could now summon ten of the lesser demons. He was curious what the difference would be, because the lesser demons would be at the same level.
They must have extra powers, or stronger effects, maybe leadership qualities for the lesser of their kind? He wasn't sure, but he'd find out when he leveled. He searched the station quickly, but there was nothing good in this area, just paperwork. He chuckled and headed for the exit.
He made it back to the town without running into a patrol, sold his swords, the old armor and staff, and rented a room. He could level and get more spells tomorrow. He missed Mia, and while this was sort of fun alone, he needed to find some people to group with. Maybe now that he was level nineteen he could find a few people.
Although, he might level first, so he wouldn't hold them up going back to learn the twentieth level spells, whatever they are.
He got a room and laid in the bed. He did one more stat check before he logged out.
Endless war Stats:
Name: Ted - Race: Cambion
Lvl: 19 (TNL:71%) - Class: Demon Knight
+att/+dmg: 4/8 - Str: 22 (42)
Mana: 740 (18) - Int: 64 (74)
Health: 600 (298) - Con: 40 (60)
Summon: limit: 10/4 - Wis: 100
stamina: 200 (100) - Dex: 10 (20)
Popularity: +6 - Cha: 16
Gold: 218 - Silver: 1093
Not bad, his offensive spells would now do sixty-six to eighty-two damage, which was actually more than his staff could do. He sighed, halfway tempted to go back out and kill an angel patrol. He bet that would level him, just a couple of mobs.
Then he remembered that Mia was cuddled up to his body back home, and hit the logout button...
- COMMENTS
dontyouwishyouknew6 months agoGreat story! I have so many chapters to read to catch up, which is an awesome problem.
Grokerover 1 year agoI'm a little confused as to what the haters are protesting - the fact that he's spending "too much" time playing video games, or the fact that he's on life support?
OK, I get what they're trying to protest, but it seems to me that in the end it would be a big nothing-burger, since it essentially comes down to a connection of those two circumstances, and effectively legislating either of them is not doable...
OK! Back to suspending disbelief - loving the story so far!!
Almosalmost 3 years agoLove the story! Might need an editor to avoid the bad conjugation of "cast" and the confusion of "your" vs "you're", but otherwise great work!
Tootsallabout 5 years agoDo at least 50% of the authors and editors here get “you’re” and “your” ass-backwards? “You’re” is a contraction for “you are” and “your” is a possessive. Otherwise an intriguing story and I’m enjoying it.
Anonymousalmost 7 years agonot just proofers.
A true editor is a silent, (to the public, anyway), partner in your writing enterprise. They find things you are too close to, to see. Your mind can play tricks on you when reading your own work It will substitute what you wanted to write, instead of reading what you actually wrote.
One technique for countering that, which I was taught in my first college writing class, over 40 years ago, was to make sure at one of your proofing sessions/re-writes is done aloud.
Reading aloud forces,your brain to work harder; read as if you are reading before a class, or crowd. Project, inflect and vary your volume and tone.
You will catch a surprising amount of issues you previously missed, and anytime you stumble or stammer in your reading, take a closer look, and you'll find you can improve the passage.
When used with dialogue, this technique will help you more realistic, normal sounding character interactions.
You'll more easily find repetitive use of words or phrases.
After integrating this technique into my own writing, no matter the genre, I found great improvements, and still continue to use it many years later. Just about every proofing, re-write, even editing for others, I read aloud. I've found it to be much more effective.
As far as the several comments about changing perspective, I honestly didn't notice it. Are you intentionally changing when Ted moves between VR, VR gaming or RL? (Though, from Ted's view, they are all the same. It's just him, in a different virtual body.)
If you are switching with Ted's changes, it's working, because it wasn't jarring or obvious. If you are changing through out the story, you are doing it well enough, I'm not noticing it.
The ONLY reason not to, if you can't pull it off, don't; but if you can it makes your writing fuller and richer. In real life, we experience, and we observe; that's really all changing perspective is, IMO. Many great writers do, and have done, it, and done it well. Consistency is key.
If there is one, no two things.. first, watch you're & your mismatches. Do searches on each form, and make sure the use is correct. It's time consuming, but writing is work, not play, even if you love it. Do the work.
More importantly, there are many people who have never ventured into the world of RPG. I have very little idea what the stats mean. You apologized for the format. There was a format problem? Get it? I don't know what most of it was, let alone there was a format problem.
Always think of your audience, think understand it is broader than you know, maybe even broader than you can imagine. Don't make readers feel lost, or you WILL lose them.
If you introduce something such as online gaming in a story, create a character who your protagonist must explain it too. It can make your story richer, if done right, and bring your readers more deeply into the world you have created.
And, that IS the REAL goal of writing, after all, isn't it?
Thanks for all the work you do to produce a quality submission for me to read free, and thanks for sharing your rich imagination.
Regards,
GeoD
Anonymousover 7 years agoJust wanted to point out that you went from 436 gold to 38 gold about page 3 or 4 but I don't remember anything actually being bought. Plus you updated the coin stats before selling the swords and loot so you either need to correct the stat section or move it until after ted sold the loot. Otherwise, a great story so far.
Aurimazover 7 years ago*The book is approached from Ted's point of view.*
Oh... Seriously? Then why are you writing about him as "he"? Why not making him *me* instead? This is a THIRD persons' perspective, not the first. And SOMETIMES you write about Ted from the first person's perspective, which scrambles my brain pretty hard.
So, if you write from the gods' perspective, there's no real obstacles to write about EVERYTHING, that is around Ted. Am I wrong?
But that is beyond the point. My point was, you're making a lot of inconsistencies in the plot itself. You mention a low crime rate, then crime happens... under the watch of advanced A.I. ... which makes the A.I. look dumb. She could at least sound the alarm BEFORE explosion, ya know. Those mistakes are the sign, that you skipped your homework and didn't read your own text AFTER you finished it.
So, I repeat once more - GET A GOOD EDITOR.
And it can't be your papa or mama, 'cause they will say you're awesome.
