All Comments on 'Terrible Taste In Tees'

Worth 6 stars. Wish it was longer, I love real life love stories even if they are just fiction. Thanks

I read about five pages before I smelled a cuck story. Luckily, I skipped to the end and voila! the story morphed into a wimp's paradise! Glad I didn't waste any more time.

Amazing story, these idiots making comments about this seeming to be a fairy-tale seem to forget that this is a story as in fiction. I'm a major supporter of the BTB type stories but this one gets five stars from me. Love how the story shows Bree slowly learning about how wrong and irresponsible her choices pre-divorce and pre-child discovery were. To those that keep crying about how a Man wouldn't be able to take her back you aren't a Man. She learned from her past and improved upon the person she was. Fantastic story, thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

I just don't understand how this man can take her back. Did he forget what she did to him the 1st year they were married and the last year when she cheated and cheated, not once or twice but for 2 full years? Did he forget what he heard in the office? I'm not a true BTB follower, but he has to let her go completely for his own sanity and manhood. No matter how beautiful, how built or how sexy she was, how can he take her back and remain a Man. The child complicates things but he can still be in his life without her. This was a very good story-well written and entertaining, except I disagree with the ending.

I really enjoyed reading this story. The story flow is good and the emotional scenes came off really well.

Overall I had red mist at places, eye mist at others and a good dose of entertainment everywhere.

Now the criticism.

Overall it's a great fantasy, the problem is that it feels a tad too much like a fantasy.

1. Business-wise it was too easy for Chris and gang to succeed. Real-world - behind every great wealth hides a great crime ... Which is a truism, unfortunately.

2. Bree's cheating motivations are glossed over - her 'on-location'' behavior would be difficult to hide when she was younger, before Chris meet her, and young men being young men she should have a somewhat skanky reputation by the time they met.

Men hunt, instinctively. And a lot of hunters need to display their kills. Which translates to trophies. And bragging.

What makes it harder to accept is that Chris is succesful, which makes him an alpha male. Which women invariably respond to. This means it would be more natural for Bree, as his mate, NOT to stray unless Chris really sucks in bed or is emotionally unresponsive.

Therefore for Bree to cheat, it would have to be something driven. Personal demons would be a natural assumption.

3. Bree's transition from playgirl/skank to sober responsible mother also deserves further treatment.

My take on this story is that it is about growing up, and Bree is the central character, not Chris. Ironically it is Chris that feels flat and one-dimensional despite more airtime.

I really appreciate your time and effort in writing, the least I could do is return the favor and to take the time and make the effort to tell you honestly how your efforts came off.

You have great writing skills. You just need to have more patience in developing each main character.

Thank you for the pleasure of your writing.

- ChippyPan

not another chocko turd boston to b'ham tale gurly tale

Some d*ick h**ds in the comments seem to be confusing their miserable lives with the stories on here. Well done.

Why do they hide their 'snarkiness' behind the infamous "Anonymous"

Good Read, enjoyable plot and GOOD Diversion

Ever consider politics?

"Why you ask?"

Simple .. When it comes to your readers, you have a uncanny ability with subterfuge, spin control, & slight of hand! How else could you hope to trick the reader into believing that a LOW LIFE, DISGUSTING, CUM DUMP, WHORE (sub Bree's name here if you prefer) is capable of being a lady (oxymoron), a faithful wife & a fit mother?!?

Considering the nature & history of this TRAMP, it's not "if" but "when"!!! Being an unfaithful, cheating skank is second nature to this WHORE ... almost as natural as it is for Chris to accept the Horns that the WHORE has superglued to his head! Yet you use your considerable writing skills (lot of scribing in the closet while watching your wife/girlfriend I'm guessing) attempting to "spin" the deceit and ,convince the reader that Bree is really innocent of - "real" adultery, that it was just "sex"', she loves only Chris and YEARS of fucking other cocks should not only be forgiven by Chris ... but MUST be forgiven to preserve the RAAC (reconciliation at all cost) ,theme!

Clearly the need for someone with your delusional thinking .. who either fails to see the truth or is unwilling to tell it ... who is determined to excuse the actions of the criminal while blaming the victim .. Is great!

So considering the underlying RAAC history of you stories, your need to neuter & fault your innocent male leads and MOST IMPORTANTLY shift blame away from the WHORE wife, you have a bright future awaiting you in our nations cesspool/capital!

L D O worst effort tale. didn't finish it

1 star.

But it was an interesting piece and I admit that I was yelling NO,NO when he took her after the divorce. When the artificial baby bump was mentioned I knew where the reconciliation was coming from. I could have left out large chunks of the ending.

The publisher lady from 'You can't do that'.

Do you want to know the character I recall the most of all your stories? Now, I haven't read them all, but you know I've read a bunch.

It was the lady on the phone. Seriously.

That publisher lady on the phone. She called, she railed at him, she insulted him, she had smokers cough (IIRC). She was hard bitten, cynical, hard working and rough around the edge...but you got this sense that she really wished life was different. That when she met a guy like (generic perfect protagonist), she'd make a few adjustments to her reality. She felt real. Black Amazon and Asian BFF? Not so much.

The soppy, weepy, wives? The rebound girls? The heros? Not a one.

Sorry...I tell a lie. I also recall Annie (for obvious reasons, seeing things with her eyes) and the wife of the dead lawyer in 'Pig'. Not sure why she stands out except that I reread that recently.

What a long, drawn out , crappy story. IMHO one of your worst efforts.

I agree with many of the comments! I loved reading your story. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Others have mentioned it, but I'll pile on anyway. And, by the way, this "critical" review should not in any way be taken as negative. I wouldn't take the time if I didn't think the writer had a particular gift for story-telling.

The protagonists in your stories all seem to be perfection personified. They are all sturdy, hard-working, thriving and doing what needs to be done either to advance in a career or nurture a business to success, and still, of course aggressively faithful to his wife, his community, and his friends. Very often the lead seems just on the cusp of wild success when he learns of infidelity, and that's when he marshals his considerable forces to gather evidence to ensure the faithless floozie gets nothing in the divorce. In this case, "nothing" was limited to exactly what was in the pre-nip. Nothing more. Now, not for nothing, I'm a divorce attorney and I have crafted hundreds of prenups. Usually the cases settle amiably along the terms of the pre-nip. That's what pre-nips are for. It's a device that comes up more and more in these loving wives stories and, to my mind at least, it's just a distraction. All go a step further. There was no drama involved in getting everything except the house. It didn't particularly make Chris look good, and didn't put a particular strain on Brie. Unless you're doing a BTB stories (which, frankly, I think is an underuse of this author's talents), why mention that stuff at all? It didn't add to the stories at all.

In this case, you put your protagonist into an "arty" profession, but with none of the sensibilities one might normally find in artists. Indeed he seems disdainful of other artists with whom he studied, and stuffed female artists of his time into one of several well-worn boxes. He''s dresses like a Yuppie lumberjack, looks like a marine, has the artistic vision and touch of Van Gogh, but with a little tea party thrown in for good measure ("Jungle Bunnies"?, Really? Also, Oriental is desperately out of fashion to describe someone of Asian dissent.)

But what defines all of your male leads, besides their Midas-like golden touches and superior intellects? They are usually the salt of the earth, a friend to all, and not just a friend, the most loyal and hardworking of friends and his friends all reciprocate. He also has an ultra conservative view of sex and marriage. That's not a value statement. Of all his qualities, that's the one I think you're most likely to find in real life. But it's one strike your out and, BTW, he would NEVER consider sex with someone else while he's married. In fact, he has a hard time with the idea even after they've been separated and before the final decree has been issued. This guy, as with most of your protagonists, is Barbie's Ken, but with genitals. He's a 12-year old fantasy of the perfect male. Well, maybe 16 because of the genital thing. He perfect in every way. Even Mary Poppins was only "practically perfect."

One point about the women and we'll get back to the protagonist. While the men represent a child's view of perfection, the woman are typically a horny guy's vision of the perfect woman.

Anyway, I think your reliance on these tropes detract from your story. Moreover, I think you're one of only a few writers who could do away with them entirely and come up with something unique, compelling and thoroughly and delightfully unpredictable.

I won't tell you how to develop a character, but look at some recent male character's in popular culture. Hugh Laurie's Gregory House leaps to mind. He's completely broken as a man. He has one friend and even he doesn't like him much. He drives away anyone who tries to get close, he's a misanthrope, a drug addict, ego maniacal and one of the most thoroughly interesting characters in television. Same is true to a somewhat lesser degree for Jax Shephard in Son's of Anarchy and Raylen Givens on Justified. They are all deeply flawed and sometimes, they give in to their dark sides. And we love them.

Not only are they frequently wrong, they can be wrong to devastating affect. They may be smart (sometimes frustratingly so), and witty, and you'd certainly want them on your side in a knife fight, but they have very dark sides, flawed relationships, and "issues."

I'd really love to see you throw away the book. I don't care if you resolve your stories with reconciliation or complete annihilation. Just make the character's more compelling. Create a deeply flawed lead character and then put him in the moral dilemma at the root of all LW stories. That would be something to see.

What a great read and really enjoyed the story. Some parts of the story did not really go any where, however the author did a great job in drafting, plotting, and bring out the characters.

IMO it is easy yo write about a BTB story and very hard to write a plausible, emotional torment, feeling, forgiveness etc.

So fir me this was a great story.

I became obvious that they would reconcile at some later time and I enjoyed the progression to that point. Nicely done, and I thank the author, qhml1, for this little gem.

And very well done. I like the way you brought the Characters to life all of them. the way they stood by each other. and watched each others back. like true friends do.

Entertaining. Absorbing. I had some issues with the plot, but that is the way the author wanted it and I'll accept it, as is. But . . .

The beginning third of the story was dynamite. The middle third was a rudderless ship, floundering. The final third was an improvement over the middle, but still a bit soft.

Everything Chris touched turned to gold, literally. It would have been more realistic if occasionally he failed at something, as well as those around him. Those are my comments, now the criticisms.

There will be thousands of reader/hours devoted to this story, so the author owes those readers a thoroughly cooked product. If he had just let a friend read it before publishing it, those countless typos, wrong words and incomplete sentences could have been eliminated. And learning how to use the possessive apostrophe would have helped. Finally, one of my pet peeves. Look up the rule for using "too" and remember it when appropriate.

This author has written some outstanding stories. This one is good, but not among the top tier.

The reconciliation stories have two types:

1. RAAC: One of the earlier spouses do not deserve the reconciliation and the dishonest or cheating will be again later (after 1-3-5 years).

2. Succesful Reconciliation: The opposite of the earlier definition.

We readers can discuss on a story it is the first or the second type.........

I enjoyed the story immensely... I was happy they got back together... Yes she cheated but I bet she won't ever do it again. The husband punished his wife for her infidelity-- he divorced her ass. He didn't just stay with her, so this is why the reconciliation worked for me... The wife understood age messed up... Nice story..

One of the marks of a very good writer is the details he adds to the story. This takes time as we learn about comic book publishing, politics, the art world or what have you.

It is easy to get lost in the weeds (I recall a story where a full 60 percent of it was about how a man was pouring concrete...and then, oh yeah, his wife cheated on him), but this story didn't seem to fall into that particular error.

So the writing per se is of a very good quality.

And here is another thing to think about: qmhl1 tends to write REALISTIC stories (though his males always seem to make fortunes post divorce. Think about that bubbala) People have legitimate reactions to stimulus, men can't suddenly beat up roomfuls of men because they are mad, there tends to be fall out for rash decisions.

So I grade a writer such as qhml1 to a MUCH higher standard than I do the author who writes "Gloria and her 12 inch dicks".

For example, a man passing out dirty tee shirts for free isn't going to have a reaction from extraordinarily mad parents?

And it would take a special kind of man (no woman would do it) to wear a tee shirt which has REAL people having sex on it. They are passingly rare.

These are quibbles. I am betting that qhml1 does LOADS of research before he writes one of these stories...and it shows!

Can't believe I'm completely on board with the reconciliation of these two, but I am. Seldom is a reconciliation written in a way that makes me feel good about it, and comfortable with it. But you have accomplished that task. This is one of my favorites, now. Yes, I would have liked the things covered that were brought up in the "Teed Off" comments, but I am happy enough with this as it is. WELL DONE!!!

A page turner. 5x5

qhml1,

Not your standard characters, nor your typical business careers. That's good.

Hard to identify or empathize with such unusual and consistently successful people. That's not so good.

Includes lots of unexpected but interesting details about tee shirt manufacturing, comic artists, modeling business, nudist resorts... That's a positive.

No real attention to the difficulties, disappointments, and struggles for these characters' career trajectory. That's not so positive.

Chris has a serious discussion with Bree about money before they are married (good for him!), but no serous discussion about fidelity and the consequences of divorce if either cheats (an unfortunate oversight.)

Husband accidentally overhears wife bragging about her secret affairs and how gratifying they are. That's lucky for him but not a very original plot device.

Husband arranges to get DVDs of his wife and her lovers, watches them, and yet years later he is eventually able to forget those pornographic images and reconcile. (He's a better man than most of us could be.)

Chris uses images of Bree's trysts on tee shirts and gives them away free. Original and fitting way to make her unfaithfulness public and painful.

Husband tries to divorce wife and is forced to attend marriage counseling sessions. A perfect opportunity to reveal the inner thoughts, feelings, and attitudes of the cheating wife and the deceived husband is missed.

Having years go by before Chris and Bree reunite is only appropriate given her self-serving mindset and reckless behavior during their marriage.

Having Chris' and Bree's unplanned daughter be the catalyst for their reconciliation is a legitimate plot twist to justify their new relationship.

More development of Bree's narcissistic personality and self-centered perspective before we learn of her infidelity would strengthen the story.

More of Bree's explanations and self-realizations (or lack thereof) during the counseling sessions would provide better insight about her motivations to be unfaithful to such a perfect loving husband. (What details of Bree's past history did the counselor want to reveal to Chris?)

More description of Bree's reflections about her dating and sexual relationships after her divorce would lay the foundation for her maturity and changed perspective.

Well written, engaging story (as always) but it could've been a contender for the top 10 in the Loving Wives Hall of Fame.

A well thought out reconciliation story,it worked because bree and Chris had to grow and change for it to work...Bree to grow up and realize what life is,Chris to heal and understand Bree was worthy of love again,that she had grown.Only sour part was the therapist couple,they ring like a comic book,no therapist would ever tell a spouse who has been cheated on to consider sex.recreation,it would demean their feelings and make them not trust the therapist.It would be different if they came in as a couple interested in an open marriage but unsure,this would never happen with cheating.

I'm not typically a reconciliation guy, but in the context of this story, it works. Actually, it more than works. I was hoping for that outcome as I neared the end of the story. After thinking about it, I realize you made reconciliation palatable by writing her/them as wild in their younger years, and maturing as they aged. The fact that their relationships (three moms, shared sibs, shared housing) were unconventional also made reconciliation work.

It's hard to argue against a story where the decisions made multiplied love. I wish it could be part of my reality.

Thanks for this gift.

An excellent reconciliation story.

Thank you,

M1*****

That I would never really endorse a reconciliation story but dammit, this was really good. Even I was pulling for them in the end; unusual considering I usually favor flaying their skin off and wearing it as a cheating-whore jacket. 5 stars.

This was a waste of time. 10 pages, rabbit trails here, worn paths there, what dissatisfaction at the end.

The author must have been trying for a feel good ending, but really, all I was left with was emptiness and hollow. I realized, that I'd sat up late reading something that wasn't worth my time.

1*

LOL The story end was a little near to Cmsix or other authors (from SOL storiesonline dot net) but sometime the fantasy may be overdosed. I almost threw away my original comment. The Greatest Hungarian Playwrite (Imre Madach) had a drama "Az Ember Tragédiája"= "The Tragedy of Man" , Adam goes through the history of the Western Culture from the begining to the imagined future of the Civilization (XIX Century) with his guide Lucifer after the expulsion from Paradise. Adam became depressed from the future of the Mankind and Adam wants to get suicide to stop the futurless fate of the Mankind, but Eva comes and tells Adam, she got pregnant. Adam becomes devastated..........LOL

You need two things to be a good author, good writing and good ideas. My favorite writer on this forum is the late Josephus along with yourself. My favorite idea author is you. Your "Accidental Nudist Cabin" is the piece that made me a regular visitor to this site.

Your stories flow so well and I never know what is going to be on the next page. I expect that you will get negative comments from young people who do not yet believe there is such a thing as forgiveness. Hate rots the soul.

I look forward to your future writings.

Cordially,

Cladymoor

Qhml1, I've got to say that Chris Tate and Bree are well written characters, and the scope of the story was enjoyable. I reckon that Boston to Birmingham is my favorite, Hardy Wilkes is unforgettable. Air Possum was great, as was 500 Annies. You can't Do That really hit a live nerve, I must say. SS06 surely has to be cool with the art scene....and yes, you did work a couple of Stangs into the story. Thanks for your hard work for our entertainment. As a person gets older, you come to realize that personal relationships are really important, and so forgiveness is the best option if there is any way to do so.

I enjoyed reading this story. It depicted life and emotions very well. I do have 1 complaint, about grammar tho.

Tina needs TO BE changed, NOT Tina needs changed.

Why is it that people no longer seem to have a clue about sentence structure and proper grammar?

You always complete your original love story. Enough said for now.

I've known and seen certain people exhibit many of these traits. Some, are immortalized in American Contemporary song. As to the "idiocy of t-shirts" I know a young woman who made a similar (though 75% smaller) fortune out of a 2 car garage.

Were there leaps of faith required for this tale to be credible? Yes.

Was this Jack Perkins and "Biography on A&E"?

No.

Enjoy your work, and would like to see it on mainstream publishing

good story

5 stars

Written in first person to tell us how rich and handsome and important he is - Oh! And so moral!

LOL!! That's hilarious! Just more food for all you males in the Jilted Male Cry Baby Club (JMCBC) to try to rebuild your deflated egos.

A great story, a tad bit long.

Oddly disturbing "whorror" story, and one of the longest RACC wimp stories that I've suffered (ended up skimming) through. To make matters worse, your tee shirts accomplished a new level of stupid unparallelled in the "anals" of Lit.

I have read some of your other stories, and I can't help but wonder;

"What's fuck is your malfunction?"

Why would you want to start the new year with such an abysmal whimper?

Ah well, I'm sure it will be well received by all the wimps, pussy's, women, and other non-men.

I'm painfully aware that any story where a wife cheats and there is reconciliation will be instantly flamed by some. That said, in real life, it happens. People make mistakes and they change.

I enjoyed this story, unashamedly so. I also gave it the full five stars and put it in my favorites to prove it. Well done.

great work as always! great plot, good character development and happy ending to boot! thank you!

self cuck so I didn't even finish it, well written as a lot of your stuff is, but no one is that dumb or desperate when they're worth that much

4/5 for writing

-3 for self cucking your protag

so sorry dude but 1/5

your other submission is 8 pages shorter and worlds better

Loved reading the story and I' m greatful for your effort.

I gave it 5 stars for the way I felt reading it.

"I believed her. I hadn't told her which branch I was going to be at, and I'm sure none of my friends would."

Except Sherry, who obviously can't keep a secret from his wife, no matter how private and sold his gullible ass down the river.

I pretty much enjoyed the story and appreciate your effort, but there were far too many "Bree, I..." and she cuts him off moments. In reality, he could just say what he wanted to say instead of suddenly letting her call all of the shots because she'd weaseled her way back into his bed one night. I would have been able to buy the reconcilliation if she'd learned her lesson about being dishonest with him, but after everything they'd been through and all her professions of undying love, she hid his daughter from him.

She cheats on him for years. "Oops. I fucked up." She gives birth to his child and doesn't tell him about it for over a year until he runs into them on the beach. "I know, I fucked up! I didn't want you to think I was trying to trap you. I was, clearly, but I didn't want you to THINK I was." She climbs into his bed nude again when he's asleep after he shot her down and seduces him. "Oops, should I have mentioned I wasn't on birth control?" Oh, her many "endearing" fuck-ups.

Also, having her cheat on him since before they were married, and returning to modeling knowing she uses it as an excuse to cheat when he wanted to start having children would only make it all the harder (and all the more foolish) for the character to ever trust her again. He did seem hung up on her, but it doesn't seem to gel with his character being so successful in business that he would be so easily played.

While I found the ending over the top, I would be remiss if I didn't now mention things I enjoyed about the story. Rorshach was a cool name for the dog. Les the lesbian, not such a great name, but they can't all be winners. I enjoyed M's character and would liked to have read a little more of J.J. I appreciated that this wasn't one of those (all too many) stories where his wife's family, his own family, and all of his friends tried to act like he was being stubborn not to take her back, as if what she did was no big deal. That is frustrating to read, especially when the protaganist fails to call them on it.

All in all, it was a breezy read, especially considering the length. I'm not voting because I'd put it at 3 stars but don't want to bring down the average just because it wasn't my cup of tea. Thanks for writing. I was happy to see you had two stories up at once. I just happened to prefer the other because I found the wife in this story, who it would seem I was supposed to care for by the end, so unlikeable. She did change as the story progressed, but she changed from arrogant and self absorbed to weepy, whiney, prone to frequent fainting, but still self-absorbed.

Cog

I saw a few things coming as I read this. I saw Bree being knocked up when she went south for her job, then I saw the reconciliation. I also saw Les getting preggers coming too. I don't usually think highly of reconciliations, but you told a marvelous story so I won't fault you for it. Wonderfully written as always.

Anyone else notice that the likelyhood of a story having a reconciliation is directly related to length, especially a "happy" one?

Not my particular desire in story theme but was well written and therefore easier to bear I guess. Anyone who didn't see thus coming hasn't read much here.

A really sweet and loving story with a happy ending.

Couldn't ask for anything better.

Thanks for the story.

It seems the road to instant success is to have your wife cheat on you. Here, not only did this weird man get fiscal success beyond most men's dreams, he also got lines of women who, coincidently, shared his strange lifestyle choices totally and were happy to have non serious, non monogamous relationships with him in whatever capacity he happened to want.

And there was little conflict or reality. This was very much a fantasy. The only analogy I can think of is 'It's a Small World" display in Disney, except that one of the mechanical dolls as an actuator malfunction so now it is bent over and looks like it's fellating the doll next to it.

The only conflict in this drama is that Chris is mad at his wife for straying. She still obviously loves him, so as soon as he lets that anger go, the stars realign in the world and everyone will love Chris again and he will love everyone else. Because huge bald black women don't have issues. Because Korean girls who turn lez, marry black women and have interracial babies have no emotional familial fall out.

I have to confess, by page 8, I was tapping my foot and checking my watch. Your little epilogue barely made sense to me. I had a machine gun blast of names without context, only a couple I recognized so they had almost no emotional bearing to me. So the ending not only fell flat, but it confused me, which is not a place you want your reader to be.

The odd nudity fetish also left me cold. It's like Duna's Adult Nursing stuff: if you are into it, grand. If you aren't, you are scratching your head (if you are HDK) or shuddering (if you are me and imagining a resort full of naked German tourists)

Never a waste of time, but where is the conflict?

It's not too long if it keeps making me turn the pages. Nice character development. I like seeing characters grow into the story instead of the single minded BTB mob.

What is the record for the number of 'first day' comments in LW? Most of the IDed comments are 'one comment per ID!' I was impressed by the number of High Score LW Authors who reacted.

Thank you for submitting! It was not universally loved, but Damn Near! As it deserved!

I have enjoyed all your stories. You definitely kept my interest. Though I am rarely a fan of reconciliation, this one worked. Keep up the great writing...looking forward to more.

it was a very good story.

Stangstar06 could learn something from this. If a story keeps building and moving ahead it can be as many pages as you want without becoming boring.

Loved it 5*.

Well written and enjoyed it front to back...except fort Bree keeping Tina away. I lost it. Any happiness for her is bad after that.

I also agree, once a cheater. She will do it again. It was not the sex that drew her, it was the excitement. Does she know anything but lies? It did not seem that way.

Val

I donot see how this couple could reconcile given all the men you had her fucking. Now u get them together for a one night love fest , I new then u got them pregnant. And your only answer was they hook up again . Too much at the end for me and all those kids.

Not complaining, but you need to watch tenses/spellings on your words.

Most times you refer to the dog as a she, one time you refer to her as a male around page 7

Good story, well written as always. Love the work you do. Time to dry my face, it is leaking again.

Thanks for this story, which I enjoyed very much. I will confess to being totally caught by surprise by Bree's baby; though after that, the ending is pretty much inevitable. I liked the cast of characters, with friends and business partners as well as every man's fantasy lovers.

HDK is right, I think, in pointing out that the characters are not easy to identify with--there's so much fantasy here, both of the sexual sort (not inappropriate to Lit, or course!) and of the "straight highway to success and riches" (as Sir Thopas noted) that the story doesn't engage one's emotions as much as some others (such as jezzaz's recent "Live from the Game"). The reader feels sorry for Chris, especially for the page or two immediately following his discovery of Bree's extensive cheating--but after that the business successes and the three-way sex with his lovers overshadows the powerful emotions that I find most compelling in LW stories.

With that said, this was elaborate and well thought-out and a lot of fun to read. Thanks for your stories!

Cordially, ohio

I enjoyed the story but sometimes it is a small detail that throws things off.

An indy comic book that selled 50,000 copies every month would be a very big deal that would get the attention of publishers bigger than Obscure Comics. 50K would put you in the top 25 comics most months. The average DC comic sells 30,000 copies every month. Dark Horse, who is really about #5 right now, averages just over 12,000 copies every month. An indy title that sold 5000 copies would be a big deal. Ten times that pulls us into fantasyland. If it is a physical comic, you would be more likely to sell it through Diamond not Amazon. If digital, you would more likely sell it through Comixology.

Like the title implies, useless information unless you do a re-write.

This was a great read....Thank you

Well balanced in my view, enough of everything to make it a most enjoyable read, and not too much of anything to necessitate scrolling quickly through repetitive sex scenes and the like.

Thank you for your time and effort, much appreciated by me, at least.

Dick

Who are all these commenters?????

do you think that guy

really needs a chinese and a black girl having sex next hotel room and a gay guy putting his tongue in his mouth ? what kind of friends are they ? some with no brain.

getting the next std from the people who stood closest to him after his wife ????

really stupid why should he change while still angry and hurt. !!!!!!

and then he goes has a unprotected 3some and in the last session of counceling he freaks out again ?? what does he have between his ears ??? cauliflower ???

And afterwards, we loved. he loved what ??? a need or ..... what

and last but not least a cheesy end.

you write good but your plot....man

Thanks for a great story with realistic characters with a romantic ending.

Enjoyed it thoroughly.

Truly a great story which incredible character development and dialogue however your editor was falling asleep on the job with the numerous spelling mistakes.

Hate to be a pain in the ass but what happened to the next chapter of Finding an Editor?

I rarely read multiple chapter stories so glad you did not break it up.

... I, of course, adher to the "once a cheater, always a cheater" theory which is the main reason that I found this story to be quite a fantasy. That's not to say that I hate every RAAC story but I hate to see it with a chick as sorry as Bree was in her first marriage to Chris. But hey, it's your story and cudos for it being so well written. As far as the chapter thing goes, in my opinion, you did the right thing by submitting the story in it's entirety. To me, there is no bigger buzz kill than a 10 chapter, 10 page story delivered over a 2 or 3 week period.

but dull and predictable. Chris never faced a challenge in the story. Everything a man could want just came to him. A good story needs the protagonist to have some weaknesses, face challenges, sometimes lose ground to the antagonist.

And not too long. You took the time to tie up the loose ends and that makes for a very satisfying story. Thank you!

I loved it but I think it would have been better if you had broken it in to several chapters.

But more than a few blisters.

Fantabulous! I'm usually a BTB on "Loving Wives" stories, but this one was really to my liking. It sort of sagged a bit at one point, but came back strong. Good read! Cheers!

The story was told perfectly. I enjoyed the different characters and their interaction. Well done.

good story but way too long

The best read I've had in a long time. Thank you.

...Another great read from a master. Thank you for all the effort you put in.

He took a recovering cheating fucking slut back - that makes him, after 10 pages, still a fucking cuckie. 1 for sheer boredom and the fact there is nothing lower.

I meant read not ready

Too long, too tedious. I couldn't find the energy to ready past page 6/

The end of the story sounded like a Mormon dream (mine too). Another fun read, another five.

Well written and entertaining story. Predictable, but that is ok - comfortable like waking in your favorite shoes. HDK is correct about it being difficult to identify with any of the characters, but still and enjoyable five star Sunday afternoon lazy read. Well done once again Q.

nice story like the rest of your stories,keep it up

This is a really fun and interesting read. I could cast myself in the role - I'm an artist, and I really love all kinds of women. This is the stuff of my daydreams. Thanks again for the entertainment.

Moderately predictable and a great read.

Thx.

It has been too long between postings. Thank you and I hope you have a great and productive year.

I'm not even remotely sentimental, but you nailed it. Your story hits the mark in so many ways. Your presentation was flawless and you held my attention for the full 10 pages. Great job. xoxo Bev

Your story was a true Masterpiece, it flowed so well from beginning to end.

Truly a pleasure to read, well thought out, and written as usual.

You write with quality and with great content.

Wow! I love your stories. Even though I'm just a hack and don't have any literary ability, I truly enjoy your stories. Please take the negative comments you get from others in stride and let them roll off your back. Your stories brighten many a dreary existence and give us all hope. Thank you

...you should have split it in 2 chapters, submitted with 1-2 days difference. Easier to digest.

5 Stars

I read all of your stuff and would not be put off by a long story but I hated every character in the story except for the baby girl. I gave up on the story about the time she could talk so maybe I wouldn't like her when she grew up. I didn't like your hero. I guess there are people who have magic with everything they touch in business but I found the T-shirt story unbelievable and exhausting in detail. I'm not a nudist but it seemed like he was living a swinger lifestyle without the sex right before he found out his wife was a whore. He pushed her into the nude modeling with one of her future lovers! Ge do you think sending your sexy wife to do nude modeling for weeks at a time will lead to sex? Why would publicity shots for a nudist colony take so long and why so many trips. It seems like it could have been done on one trip as part of a vacation. And the idea of nude weddings? Weddings bring together lots of different kinds of people; only a tiny minority of people are nudists.

I could have accepted reconciliation but the ex-wife continued to lie and manipulate him to get what she wanted. Hiding his daughter from him for so long is unforgivable. His sex life after divorce was too weird. He professes no sex without love and then has sex with his lesbian friends and business associate. Sorry for the rant but I was really disappointed because your other stories were so good. I will continue to read your stuff and will not vote a score to bring down your number. I can see that my position is in the minority based on your current score. Keep on writing!

I agree with the other comments. Also, Bree just doesn't hunt. You set it up too well to kill the marriage. Overheard disdainful uncaring conversation, viewing the DVDs of her making love to multiple people with painful commentary, lying as much as possible at all the lawyer meetings. There is no way I buy them getting back together. Make a reconciliation possible and I'll grudgingly approve or not rate but this is just plain unbelievable. 2*

I knew it was my lucky day when I saw that one of Literotica's top authors had two stories for me to read today.

Thank you, I read then both and gave you two 5's.

I am looking forward to your next submission

It was way too long, and meandered all over the place.

Decently written, though skimming (after the first four pages, I started losing interest) revealed several major typos.

Could have been something had it been tightened a lot, and had you jettisoned a lot of the recycled plot points. Too many characters, too.

Not bad, not great.

A truly touching story and quite real for one to be able relate to! A story that touches the very basic emotions of life relating to love found, love lost, and finally, love found again. It may not so much appeal to the BTB crowd, but surely, it shows the realities in life! Keep it coming! P.S. Thanks for giving it all in one piece and not by several chapters!! It did not stop the momentum of the readers!

his life, outside his wife, was a boulevard of green lights. Business takes off, lots of money, artistic success and appreciation, lots of great professional support, etc...

If there is a flaw in many of these fantasy stories on the site is that personal marital turmoil often follows or is fed by life's many potholes. Often this is overlooked or glossed over in the stories. If 1/2 the energy of describing the loss of wife or relationship hardship went into describing the same for the loss of a job, family members, illness or the like , I believe the stories would have a lot more power. You occasionally find a tale that does that, and its better for it.

Just my 2 cents.

This story was excellent, as always, from this author and I look forward to future submissions.

I don't think I've ever read a story on this site that felt more like a rerun of previous stories. The exception might be Stang's stuff, but he's just repeating himself. It's a shame, because you have talent.

The whole "professional success" angle that has become such a thing in many of these stories is more impactful when sparsely used and not treated like such a fantasy, by the way. When it's this heavy-handed and spectacular, it feels like forced resolution or something altogether ridiculous.

It is not often that an erotic story moves me to tears. Put quite simply: Bravo!

Great story as usual, extremely well crafted and a great read. Thank you.