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She was shaking so much now, she was on the verge of an orgasm, one that I was to find out later was not like anything she had experienced before. I held onto her tightly afraid she might fall.
As she started to orgasm, screaming out, her legs came together tightly around my head. I opened my mouth and placed it wide over her pussy, drinking her in, getting the full flavour of her as she filled my mouth.
I loved it. I held her around her waist until her shaking subsided, then reaching out, I prized mum's hands from the handles and eased her down on to her knees, she opened her eyes for the first time and looked straight into mine, exclaiming breathlessly.
"What the fuck just happened?"
"I just finished what you started mum."
"Yeah I guess you did darling, but what happened? I've never cum like that before, If I hadn't been enjoying it so much I would have been afraid of what was happening to me, I was locked to those fuckin handles, frightened to let go."
"I know mum, I struggled to get your hands free. So, who's the slut now?"
Mum leaned forward put a hand behind my head, pulled me in close and kissed me, not a mum/daughter kiss, but a kiss with passion, a passion that kept us locked together for some while, our tongues running circles around each other. We were locked together oblivious to everything around us, until...
Oh fuck! Dads voice from the doorway, mum hadn't shut the door when she came in.
I heard his deep voice growling, "What the!... I can't believe what I just witnessed!"
*****
This has been a work of fiction, but when writing the shower scene, I did have to stop and reminisce about some of the wonderful times I spent in the shower with my mum.
See you in part 2, will the shit hit the fan?
How will dad take what he has just seen?
I had suggested that we could maybe do another shoot in a few days, would that now happen?
Will I now be able to push things further than I expected to, or will this now be the end?
Will he ever shoot with me again?
So many questions to be answered in part 2
- COMMENTS
Nikkiejanesabout 4 years agoNicely paced story, with a good climax - yes pun intended.
Shower scene nice and hot.
I've rated this 4* only because of the spelling and punctuation errors that abound, most of which have been spelt out by other commentors.
For an early attempt at writing, well done, keep up the good work.
ROCKY70almost 5 years agoI love a good who dunit, an when you read stand by for ch.2. That's even better now we have mom and dad in her works,ch.2 is a must read. thanks for the read
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoPunctuation does matter.
Let's eat, grandma.
Does not mean the same thing as:
Let's eat grandma.
With the comma which indicates a pause it is an offer to share a meal with your grandmother, without the comma the sentence means to eat your grandmother.
DomJ69almost 5 years agoI write this is in hope it will aid your future output. Mistakes take the reader 'out' of the story and must be avoided. I can put up with a few, but there are too many in this story and I couldn't finish reading it.
Just a few mistakes I spotted:
I would ware - wear
come to that so does my dad - come to that, so does my dad
Love you really Dad. - Love you really, Dad.
breakfast finished mum
Wow thank you mum – Wow, thank you, Mum.
I asked mum to help me select an outfit, help me get dressed and do my make-up, she usually tried to help me when dad was shooting me, I didn't need it, but for some reason I liked it.
- I asked mum to help me select an outfit and do my makeup. She often helped when dad was shooting me. I didn't need it, but for some reason, I liked it.
Sentence structure is important. If you're not sure whether to use a full stop or a comma, read the line out loud and see if you pause or stop at certain points.
I Hope this helps and feel free to comment on my work.
