by StangStar06
Some things I've noticed about your stories:
1. Every story you write, some folks like it and some don't.
2. The ones who like them speak of laughs, entertainment, and occasionally inspiration. They seem like ordinary folks.
3. The ones who don't like them seem about equally divided between the envious, the pretentious, the unimaginative, and the angry-at-the-universe. They seem like they've got something sticking up the wrong way.
4. Every six weeks some pompous ass declares that "Stangstar has finally lost it; his talent is exhausted, yada yada yada." (After all, there has to be something wrong if you can write so many more stories than they could.) Then the next week you knock it out of the park.
My proposal for your writing: keep on writing whatever the hell you want to write. Not every story is equally good, but they're all fun to read. Writing what you want to write has got to work better than taking direction from a bunch of disgruntled wannabes.
This is my favorite part of the comment:
"From a trapped wife who has been begging for change for the last 4 years and getting almost no response...Men are stupid cowards who are emotionally constipated and wouldn't know how to please a woman with a road map and a hands on tutorial."
I can't define irony without a dictionary, but I know it when I see it. Priceless.
A story a week is an incredible load. I couldn't figure out how you could come up with these stories week after week. I wasn't a fan of your writing with its quirky but wooden characters who speak in paragraphs, a narrator that spoke in pages, and 5+ pages that should have been edited to no more than 3, but the stories were original. But that hasn't been so for months now. Several fans have suggested taking a break, a long break, but to no avail. This isn't pretty.
When you come back in a few months or whatever it takes, use a different editor. We have no idea what she contributes to the final product. It's a difficult and thankless job when done right, so I definitely give her the benefit of the doubt. But you can't have a fresh start without a fresh look, and part of a fresh start would be to have to convince a new editor that your work is worth it. That would be a tough sell right now, my friend.
nice twist and story, the ending was a fairy tale . he gets hot wife from cheater. but he did get away with a lot..putting his soon to be ex in jail on trumped up charges to get rid of her is a little extreme..still i liked it . thank for the great stories and keep writing them.. as you can tell i am a fan..
I like the references to JPB... his stuff and yours are a big draw at Literotica!
Cheers
Merci, StangStar, for the chuckles this little diddy provoked! Loved the humor!
Fun story. Lots of laughs and a good read all the way around.
Thanks for another fine weekly tale. (Don't know how you do it-but glad you do)
The last biological results show the romantic love is in our brain and the romantic love is one way thing, look at a sultan from India, he had the Tad Mahal built for a wife and not to the all odaliscs in his harem......................If the romantic love was estinguished by a cheating wife (becouse the romantic love is an estinguisable thing), we average male people become promiscuose until the next romantic love (the right woman)...............................
I agree we are generali not monogamouse being, out of the marriage. However what is the role is the monogamouse connection from evolution views. The most important role of the monogamous connection is the best circumtansis and support for the children to bring up in the best phisiology, pshichicaly state. The promiscuose parents destroy the best background for their children. The Homo Sapiens Sapiens children need longer time for becomeing matured, as the most mammals. I think not dumb male guessed soon his mate's children were not his in that case, when the biological father was too far in the body feature from him. These children life would have been inferno in the paleolite 40000 years ago and the group cohesio was decreased at a hunter gather group, which was important for the ancient Sapiens children. I wrote several times 2 leaders of the IIId Germany Empire origined from such family, where the mothers were suspected infidelity. Adolf Hitler thought he was bastard and his father was cruel to him for this thing. Herman Goering's father was willing cuckold and the bull lived together with the family..........50 million died people.
There is not obligatory emotional law to compel husbands to love bastards..........
In the paleolite (40000 years ago) the small hunter-gather-(fishing) groups were between the group cohesion problem and the inbreed problem. Yes the infidelity may be some evolotion role against the inbreed, but I think that time the far hunter-gather groups solved this inbreed problem with bride change in the most case against wife change..........
@ Anon 1. If you get a no DNA test proof child(ren)???? Would you forgive???? Or STDs????????
2. The average romantic love lasts in the human brain for 4 years according the modern brain investigator instruments, so an average not cheater husband can excinguist a cheater wife after shorter time and his brain can be free for a newer connection, this is similar phisiological as the extremity male whose brain is craved romantic love for more 20 years. Both are physiological. Magmaman's story (and his personal (re)comment) shows well this, but Magmaman's story ("Unconditional Love") shows against the long lasting love the main character left the cheating wife.................
3 Without mutuality connections may be with romantic love in the wimp husband's brain, but many "hot" wife left the creampie eating cuckolds in some longer time (extrem few such stories were written) shown stories and many willing cuckolds wrote in their comments they lives in their second...third marriage......interesting.
4. Somebody who is member of the sexual majority male people and he forgives a cheating wife and she cheats again...again the romantic love will extinguist 100% sure in his brain, only the reninescence remains.....or as this story the responsible for his children.............as in this story was shown.....................
5 I have minority opinion at some reconcilation stories, but in that stories I think the reconcilation is believable, only humorous twist or fable story acessories...........
6. Why it is problem a betrayed husband finds a Second Chance woman and romantic love for her after his divorce???
4 for all others .
i would have liked pearl relationship developed better
People cheat. Humans were not meant to be monogamous, especially not women over the age of 30. It's hard to forgive a cheater, but most people do and many of those go on to live much happier lives. What you described in your story was just evil. Having said that, a story is a story, and not to be taken seriously.
I am sorry, because exactly is: JPB has some not wimp stories as well, but the majority of JPB's stories are oposite of SS06's stories.
BTW I have read a good running husband story from JPB recently, the title is "The Trip to Rancho Mirage" on Non Erotic hub with happy ending epiloge.
I thought this story was funny. It was short but I still enjoyed it.
Why do you keep on writing..if you have to rehash the same old and tired formulaic spiel every time.....Also in all your stories, inspite of the wife's adultery-the male protagonist is the one who ends up looking as an unpalatable,gutless,insipid and an unusually cruel character....
@ Dear Anon high percentage of SS06's stories are either fable or humorous sometimes both type stories. This story is humorous and fable one. The fable part showed 2 types answers to a cheating wife. One type, the father of the main character has a long time without trust marriage after his wife's infidelity. The second type is a without murder but Cruel and Modern Figaro Type (both) revenge story with many humor. In the true life the exact solution is between the 2 character's (son and father) decisions.........
Among JPB's stories are not whimp stories as well, however the majority of his stories are the oposite of SS06's stories............
Where you been SS06 ??
Thankfully - another great story from you.
Keep them coming !!
The cheating wife is unattractive and an idiot. The victim gets the hot woman, the courts magically give him everything while the Exwife gets fucked by the system and no matter how much damage he does, no matter how many laws he breaks, somehow the Justice Dept turns a blind eye to his shenanigans.
Riiiight. And in real life, the victim is fucked by the divorce court, his ex-wife and the justice dept. he doesn't meet any hot blondes because he is to busy working three jobs just to make ends meet because if he doesn't pay his alimony, he's going to debtor's prison for being a deadbeat ex-husband.
Stang. You're a fcking retard.
There was a Mouse back there that asked if we would be applauding if the story did not carry SS06 brand. I for one would be enthusiastic about having a new author on the block who could entertain me. So many good ones have packed it in, either having been reaped or irritated by inane commentaries.
The confrontation between the two different solutions, sucking it in, or fleeing is interesting. Personally I admit that the latter is cowardly but certainly offers a better chance of living well than ever staying in a mansion with a great job and a slut wife.
Thanks for giving your time to us SS.
Great story and the ending that was funny a nice twist at the end very good
It's kind of sad that you felt you had to turn Brian into a scuzzball and then break your own "realism nod" to have him hook up with Josh's diseased ex-wife Pearl. Like others have already pointed out, if Kathy got them from sex just once, Pearl sure as hell already has them. It's one of the nastier effects of cheating on a marriage, one that doesn't seem to get talked about much in any of these stories, unless it's the AIDs style nuclear option.
And yeah, he's is a piece of crap for lying to his new friend in order to get him to help commit a criminal conspiracy against Kathy. It might be "fair" from a certain perspective, but what he did, assuming another man's identity, is nowhere near legal.
Half of this problem could have been resolved by sticking to your reality rule. You're taking digs at another author, but not even following the reality rule you've spent the entire story having Brian go on and on about. "this might have happened in a silly JPB story, but this is real life!" Okay, okay, that's cool, except then you go and break your own rule for no apparent reason. I mean really, all you did was turn this into "one of those stories".
High stars for the rest of the story, but you murdered the ending.
Enjoyed reading this. Good BTB (burn the bitch) story. Of course, all prison conversations are recorded, so a comment by hubby taunting Kathy and threatening even more prison time would support her claim of being framed. Thanks for writing.
wasn't the reason that Brian didn't want to fuck his wife was because josh had std's? if that was true then Pearl would certainly have had them. so he wants to have sex with the woman who was more likely to have std's than his wife. not to mention, if he wanted kids why is taking the used wife and kid of someone else? if he was going to help her find a new man that's fine but to marry her himself? ridiculous. not to mention the way the Pearl was so pushy about it. didn't he just get rid of one woman trying to run his life and tell him how things were going to be?
Ex- Wife is in prison and not a threat any longer and he is Divorced. Now he has a New Woman and the prospects of a Family.
You moved 400 miles away, changed identities, started a new career. Then you are somehow back home and Brian again as the story ended. No explanation. You usually tie up this sort of obvious loose end. Holidays will do that I guess. Your JPB reference was too kind to him. He disappointingly wimps out in his recent stories, removing the husband's gonads and sending him back to the little slut wife with his hat in his hand.
Thanks! Pretty good read. Cheaters punished, beautiful new life, and humor to boot!
Until the the epilogue. Why did he have to marry Pearl. He had choices in life again and this kind of ending has been a cliche recently. Only a 4 because of that.
This is really a matter of personal preference, but I dislike when stories reference Literotica or other online stories and writers. To me it feels like breaking the 4th wall just to make an inside joke.
The story was tongue-in-cheek humor all the way, so hard to get to wrapped up in the (lack of) drama. I can think of many worse ways to spend a few minutes, and the chuckles I had were real.
The wife was classic SS06: shit-hole stupid, with the emotional maturity of a grapefruit. It's pretty much impossible not to feel bad for them, no matter the nature of their betrayals. It's like being mad as Gilligan, or Barney Fife, or Stimpy.
Two interesting things about this story: first the dicotomy between the hero's father's choice to stay with the mother (although he did seem like a pussy-whipped cuck until later in the story) and our hero's choice to hit the road; second, the idea of increasing payback on the wife as her resistance to hubby's efforts for a clean break increase. Last week's SS06 offering featured a much worse betrayal than the one here, but the wife 'played ball' (reluctantly, and with much pain) and so maybe paved the way for a second chance down the road. Here, her stubborness resulted in (earned or not) more and more hell.
The dialogue in bed between the cheaters set a new low in realistic dialogue, but at least it was well-edited. The story was easy to read and generally well-edited, though I did notice a couple of elementary mistakes.
If I was rating this as a dramatic LW story, I would give it a 1. But, the choice to treat the storyline as a comedic farce saved it.
I had my entire office laughing by reading some of the lines. This was classic Stang. For the rocket scientist down below who posted anonymously. You're probably the smartest guy in you trailer park but dude we all know how these stories end. Either they get back together or they don't. the skill is in making the story interesting enough to get to that point. Until Rehnquest comes back Stang your the best!
Somebody who does not like humor that will not like this story.
And I am not a member of forgive the cheating wife at any cost club.
The writing and the plot was so immature and unrealistic.
All you fans going rah-rah over this story, would you still cheer for it, if stangstar wasn't a brand name here on lit?
Well written, well edited, and better proof read. It was another unique spin that still has humor, Mustangs, and crazy women.
Thank you SS06 for a fun read.
Nor was it the worst of SS06. At least it wasn't one of the festering femdom cuckold pieces of shit that seem to plague this hub these days. I saw shit borrowed from other sources but over all I liked it. It wasn't very realistic but that's fiction. I still look forward to a good ol stang story every week.
Nice work, with or without the epilogue. Definitely, this tale is a unique approach to an old story concept. Write on!
i could not quit laughing - bet your wrote this after the honeymoon. a very good read and the wife was not a complete dunce; close but not complete. glad you are back in the groove. 5
Thank you again for writing for us. tom anon
For LordSlumDog: As you have declared Stang's writing ability DOA with no chance of resusitation, I never expect to see anymore of your pompous, asinine comments on future stories of his.
Ooops! Carl/Brian/Hubby compromised himself several ways. He outed his new town, he outed his buddy (Sweetie should be able to figure out that it was a collaborative set-up from his very unwise prison visit!) * Hubby also has a permanent vulnerability - his 'Stang (which Sweetie MAY have noticed was a problem shared with his buddy!) and perhaps even the 'Stang club! Time for a Switcheroo to a Stdebaker?
Hubby now ALSO is taking on Sweetie2 (who WAS a goody buddy of Sweetie1). Also an easy link to follow! Not sure she would not have converted to Carpet-Muncher after five years, or at least figured out that the Brian-Train had left the station for good! SS06 probably would NOT write a follow up on a GoldiHawk driver!
Enjoyable read, worth a Fiver, but not a Fav! No more hermaphro lawyers!
Oh yeah, makin humour from what so many readers take too seriously, note some of the comments - burn the bitch bad and gettin on with life - good stuff . . .
Glad to see your litening up a little bit. The dark side doesn't agree with your writing to well.
Hello SS06,
Keep up the good work! I gave this story 5*. I may not like all your stories, but your writing is great and keep it up. Just remember "opinions are like a**holes, everyone has one"! : )
This one was OK, but the story petered out towards the end. The conclusion & epilogue were painfully anti-climatic. Still, the conflict and characters were compelling and unique...good job.
Loved this one, it's getting 5 stars. AlleyKat86? I loved yours as well. Any haters...well they know what they can do. If you do decide to write again take a page out of JPB's book and write for yourself, not anyone else.
StangStar06, you keep on doing what you do.
Grant
Petitor@gmail.com
Loved every word, particularly "Kum by Yah and trying to do the wave". Thank the lord I was not drinking coffee at the time. Clearly one of your best stories in some time.
hawkeye0007, no matter what he writes it is still better then the crap from the sickos.
I know EXACTLY how they are going to end. Why is that? You're a good writer but you're stuttering now.
I don't feel sorry for you... I used to BE you. I got out and my life got
Better. My problem is that you seem to be taking your frustration with
Your life out on a fictional story instead of addressing your very
Real issues. My husband writes something different every week, He
Often changes styles from story to story. If you noticed last week he
Wrote a story where the couple got back together and blended in
Elements of Dickens. Half of you hated it because the guy took his wife
back in the end. So this week he wrote a comedic piece that turned
Into a revenge story. And it looks like again half of you will hate it. I guess
That's why my writing career is over. I did it once and that was it.
I think he and Kate should just work on his their book and leave the
Arm chair critics who complain no matter what behind. Last week and
A couple of the early comments floored me. Half of the people last week
Thought he'd written an 11 page story and wrote that it was too long
The people who did that only proved that they were stupid. It's the same
for the morons today who didn't read more than 5 paragraphs but still
Felt the need to share their opinions. My last statement goes out to the
Poor people, who for some reason are forced to read his stories week
After week. Who is holding the gun to your heads? Here's an option.
You never know what you're going to get from him week to week. All
He gives you is a story. Some you'll like others you'll hate. Like in life
There are no guarantees. If that's too much for you don't read them. But by
All means please feel free to get a life. I apologize to my hubby and
Kate for my rant
absolutely great,,,,,,,,,,about the anonymous haters calling it immature.........let me guess women right!!!!. only sluts would hate this story coz they want their cake.........and u know the rest. won't suit them if things started happening like this in real life.........and men acted like men.
Does this rant sound like the rationalizations of a cheating spouse , or what? What a cliche.
I couldn't get past the fifth paragraph because the writing was resonating with the essence of some butt hurt immature boy. You sound fixated on making everyone else seem inferior for a problem you're obviously the cause of.
Sorry...
I liked this story. Unlike most of the crap that is posted in this catagory, this story left the husband's balls in tact. The bitch wife got exactly what she deserved. To bad his slut mother never got what she deserved. I don't like some of mustang man's stories, but this one gets 5 stars
I thought this story was going to be ironic and or somewhat humourus. But it was just another boo hoo rant from a dickless man who has to blame a woman for his own inadaquacies.
I have never read a cheating wife story, written from the husband's perspective, that includes any sort of prior conversation in which the reader hears "I'm unhappy with this relationship. Our marriage isn't what it used to be. I need things to be different and here's what I want..." All these husband perspective stories are based on "out of the blue, for no apparent reason, totally clueless she was unhappy..." dip wad of a husband desperately blaming anyone and everyone but himself for his failed relationship.
From a trapped wife who has been begging for change for the last 4 years and getting almost no response...Men are stupid cowards who are emotionally constipated and wouldn't know how to please a woman with a road map and a hands on tutorial.
For all the haters out there, stop being cucks. This was a fantastic story. He ensured the bitch got what she deserved.
This is the most chuckle filled story not written by HDK on all of Literotica. Good Stuff!!
-dangerouslydead
SS06 what have u become: a mass production writer? Just churning out any shit? Lost respect for you bro!!!
If you don't have a quality story don't post. Wait a while, write something decent then post it. I prefer quality than quantity.
You are churning these out stories like Mariah Carey songs. Have some pride man, you are one of the best writers here but when u post shit like this, u lose all credibility.
What has happened- married life zapped your creative juices? Not worth rating you this week.
Stick a fork in the quality that once made Stang's stories fresh, funny, innovative and thought provoking . It's done. With the death rattle finally sounded by this tripe that seems to have inspired by Jerry Springer Banned From TV DVD set on infinite loop.
The passing of aforementioned,beloved, literature worthy tale- telling ability of Stangstar was a difficult one that lingered ad senilium when stories seemed to become inferior clones of previous weeks submissions. Alas the word processor that click, clacks weekly fast and inspired sagas lasted two years ( approximately ) long.
Contributions and flowers by the bereaved fans of writing talent can be sent to 1-800-MUS-PIMP-MUS-TANG.. Survivors include the actual Stangstar , his wife AlleyKat . There was a ex-wife to the immortal story weaving skill who is reputedly alive but hopefully covered in festering boils ( or so reads the last will & testament).
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but this was definitely better than the average.At the same time, I think it was a lot better at the first 'end' and the bit tacked on after that reduced it quite a lot.
she has the same length of time and with more devious personnel to plan her payback and he is going to be set in new ways and most vulnerable,,,,,TK U MLJ LV NV
but only for things one did or does.....not a set-up, entrapment frame job.....now who needs remorse down the road, TK U MLJ LV NV
Great story for a change from you. However how did you and your editor miss the fact that Kathy's lawyer jumped between being a he/she? Couldn't make up your mind there huh?
Stang, the last two one did not light a fire in my soul like many of previous stories. Want to ty for this great story.