All Comments on 'Uncertain Justice'

I skipped some paragraphs to read it in a single sitting, mostly rambling when wandering in the forest where no dialog was found for great lengths. I'm not sure what I missed. I think technology could have been used to cut things short once the camp was set up, but the technology was used in a previous chapter and never re-emerged. The story would have been a lot shorter though. The close encounters seem like they might make up for it, but it was hard to believe.

This was really about just this guy's flight and was pretty focused on it. I was hoping for more regarding the romantic interest, and aiding and abetting, but maybe that's ok. Fold out solar panels would have taken care of the power limitations given in the story. And 500lbs of gold...wtf. He stole it from somebody's land. The first isn't believable and the second is wrong. I thought the ending was fairly satisfying, even though major strings were tied with a sentence or two at the end of the story. The novel elements like...ancestors talking to him was unexpected. As I was nearing the end I was getting scared because there was so much left to happen and so few pages left, so if that was your goal it was accomplished.

Anyway, I appreciate the story, it was not perfect but it was pretty good. Thanks for allowing anonymous comments. I hope you write more and are willing to share it for free here. If I wrote it, I'd be pretty proud of it.

good job

jtaylor

Pretty much all of your stories are 1st class, but this is by far your best. I know that I am very late for this ball game....Thank you, Thank you, Thank you, wherever you are.

... for the effort and time you put into this story. The story was original, creative, and otherwise great! The writing and grammar likewise.

I believe you have the Nez Perce in the wrong area. They we further much further north. Never in sothern Colorado. They were north of the Yellowstone.

Nailed it, Longhorn. You did your homework and never did the "Rambo/SF?SeAL/Ranger/fill in the blank special operations rogue thing one time. EVERYONE in the military has a passing familiarity with weapons. Not everyone is pushed so hard by a corroded American justice system that only very rarely has anything to do with justice. I'm sure every soldier who read this heard the echoes of our ancestors as well as did I when I read it the first time and the second time and the third time. This is the best work from one the the greats of this site.

1SG, USA (ret)

An excellent and extremely entertaining story!

Well written, very entertaining. Great job!

Well done. The author pushes far beyond what is reasonable and expected in a story of this type. Exciting and satisfying

Gave up at page 10 when I found that after reading that far with the long winded boring overly detailed writing I wasn't sitting through another 45 pages.

One fantastic story, full of adventure and heart. Thank you

ya whell i just couldnt get past the part on page 14 where u humanized the dog only to vividly kill him a few seconds latter just ruins the rest of the story cause now i found myself wanting to kill him myself

One word...incredible!!!!

Awsome story what more can I say. :-)

Words fail. This is a true epic that has given hours of enjoyment and satisfaction.

A masterpiece, Longhorn. Please come back and continue to entertain us, sir. Even Louis L'Amour would be proud of this modern Western.

~Uncle Bozzin

This really really really should be a book. Very well done.

I enjoyed it as much this time as last. An entertaining well told tale. Thank you.

Wonderful story. The People were happy that all was again right in Heaven and on the earth. Loved that Miles and Linda were able to reunite in the end.

Thanks for sharing.

You sure have an exemplary talent and you showed it in this story. I just hope you keep writing as its been 5yrs since this story. Gifted and talented writers like you and JammyJimmy are rare! I'm glad you concluded this story and not left us hanging.

With your writing ability I suspect you have gone into publishing for profit - I wish you good fortunes, if so, what is your writers name? Thanks and salute....

I did think the snake was going to get him, had me on the edge for a while.

Second read, and just as fabulous at the first time. Characters were wonderful and the story line was easy to follow and extremely well developed..Thanks for a great read!

I would like to thank you for sharing the story Uncertain Justice , I enjoyed the story a lot. While it was a long read it was well worth the time spent , I found the plot and characters to be well thought out and very enjoyable also to be believable. Thanks again for sharing and please keep up the good work.

Thanks

RANDY T.

Amazing story. Was quite sad when I got to the end. I only have one question though. What happened to Brady?

Superb all the way through. As many others have said, this story deserves a wider audience. 5 stars isn't enough...

I spent a couple hours for a few days reading the story. Nice fantasy, good characters and great ending. Love when the good guy gets what he deserves.

I remembered reading the story and over the last month was having a craving to re-read it... Thing was, I couldn't for the life of me remember where I'd read it...

Then I was re-reading your stories and Bam! There it was...

Just as enjoyable as the first time...

Only negative for me was the poor doggy... But I did understand it in the context of the story... Just wish it'd been a mean dog instead of basically a big puppy...

I'm only half way through page 3 and this sorry excuse for a NCO is disgusting. He must be channeling Gunny Highway (and the characters wishing to be in touch with his feelings crap). Shit I cannot believe any Master Sergeant after 22years of Army bullshit wimping out like this. Not even the REMF pukes at E-8 would disgrace themselves to this extent. Since the mid 70s you had to have a 1SG slot open in order to finish being promoted to E-8. Very, very few would quake at this level of adversity.

... it's C class (World Level), for sure. Nobody fret.

After 10 days I' m only on "page", (each is really 5? pages of book.), 17; as of 23 Nov 16.

Was looking for... the obvious, got hooked.

Red comments after page 2, decided to wait, page 5 wait, page 12, read comment with spoiler, wait, 17 spoiler... decided to stop reading comments... which are rather good. I'll read, when fin, and ready to post... except.

Is this story too long? No.

Then again, I've read a trace less than a third... but it ain't a one pager, a 3, or 5, or... 17? - Ken

Fatty to us.

Longer than most here on Lit., but very good. I agree with someone else who said the ending with "Brady" was a little lame. The bastard really should have had to suffer for his transgressions. All in all, though, great story. 5 Stars, no doubt.

I have read and thoroughly enjoyed your stories on this site. Somehow, I failed to read this one, which has proved to be a real mistake. This is a true page-turner from beginning to end. It touched upon my own phobia with respect to the criminal justice system and my respect and admiration for our military (I served 20 years in the Army myself). I even enjoyed the Native American mysticism. Please continue to write; your work is quite special. 5 stars

Longest story I've ever seen on lit. Enjoyed it except for the sudden change in Brady losing it at the end; seems too easy an ending for him. Overall though, a great story!

Epic...Best Story on site...Publish it...!!!

This is one of, if not the best story I've read to date on this site.

You are an amazing story teller and I applaud your work.

5*

Fucking lame shit! Stick to your shit!

Wow. Write more and publish.

This, is the longest story I've seen on literotica (and the best) there was almost no mistakes in grammar, spelling or syntax. In addition the good guy did win, got the girl, and what better thing than the villain loses his mind and winds up as a (preserved) drooling idiot. I gave the story 5*s only because there is nothing better to give !!!

You my friend are a heck of a story teller. This was probably the most sensational story I have read here till date. Hope you write lots more. Outstanding work.

Superbly well constructed and attention retaining from the first paragraph. The characters were nicely developed and remained consistent within their story line.

It may not have been what most of us think of when we think "Literotica", but while it wasn't "erotica", it definitely was "literary". I concur with gatorhermit in that it should be re-edited, cleaned up, expanded slightly and published. This is a mature piece of fiction that deserves a wider audience.

I

was concerned about the length, but that disappeared quickly. It just took me right into the action for the entire ride.

one hell of a story. thank you for writing it.

i believe anonymous bashers should grow some balls and reveal themselves or shut the hell up!

This is the best story that the writer has produced. It deserves more than 5 *

I forget how many times I have read this story, but every time I read it I am amazed once more how great it is. Everything he writes from now on will be judged against this one.

Never expected to find a story like this on here.

It drew me in and I had to stay with it to the end.

Well worth 5*

I didn't read this when it came out due to the length. Forgot about it and then saw it again. Wow! Absolutely riveting. Too bad there wasn't one law enforcement agency with a brain - sadly that is our situation many years after this story was published. I loved the interaction with The People and Zeb. And of course Linda finally caught her man! I think this story could be cleaned up a bit and published.

Hated it. Too long.

theis is an excellent story...i have read it 3 times and will probably do so agaain..thank you so much for your efforts and abilities...paul crabtree

I second the commentators who recommend turning making this into a movie. One criticism: the ending read as though it had been rushed thriugh.

Great job nate was absolutely awesome

Very good! Reminded me, in part, of Mr. L'Amour's book, "Last of the Breed"

8 hours to read

and am sure it will stay in my mind for many days to come

Echoes of "The Fugitive" "Hunted" "Rambo" and a few other tales

However that does not in anyway detract from the immense enjoyment i got from reading this story.

This has Oscar written all over it! It would make a great movie!!

I read it all the way through and enjoyed the story too much to notice anything to criticize. What a tale! I appreciate the time and effort you put into this one. Thanks again... what a path you led me down. Scotty

My wife was feeling neglected by the time I completed the story.

I read this enjoyable and exciting story until I came to the exremely vivid death of the hunting dog. Usually detail is something I really appreciate in an author, but that amount of cruelty just stopped me cold.

There should be a disclaimer at the beginning of this story. Please add this to save future readers from the same fate.

This is my second read of this fantastic tale of endurance and retaliation against corrupt officialdom. The author is too good for Literotica so we are privileged to have him post his stories here. I hope everyone enjoyed this as much I did.

This story was well worth the time reading. Calling this a story is a real understatement - novella or book. I really enjoyed reading not sure why it took me so to long to get to it. I can only assume the length through me off the first time I saw this story? It was definitely not the quality of writing or the writer. I have enjoyed all of Longhorn__07 writings. Since there has not been any new stories I can assume, partly based on this story, that Longhorn__07 has joined several other Lit writers (three I know for sure) is now publishing (e-publishing) and making a little money with writing! Always nice if you are "good enough" to make money on a hobby/activity you enjoy. Longhorn__07 is definitely good enough a writer and storyteller. Thank you for sharing, I really appreciate your writing. Let us know if you are ePublishing I would be interested! I do hope you are still writing. Your story/stories are diamonds and gold among so much dirt and crap on this site!!!

It always make it an extra pleasure to find those stories.

So you had me hooked. Good work. 5 stars.

This rather interesting story goes into almost too much detail the end result it is a long story and I am certain if it was a printed book it might be as much as 200 pages in length. It is not a short story. It is a non-erotic novel, a very good one and entreating to read.

Did not realise at the beginning how long the work was. By the time I realised that this was no short story I was hooked. A cracking good read and if there were any criticism it finished to quickly at the end. Well worth more than five stars.

get away with that ... but .. what a tale,what a story ! Hell ya ! I loved it as silly as it was

I think this story was well thought out! A lot of research and time went into this one. The best read I've had in a long time! I look forward to reading more of your stories!!!!!

This is a long story but worth the wait. As a couple of readers pointed out, he could have shortened it without damage but chose not to. This is a story people and not all fiction, Ruby Ridge anyone? or the Dallas murder? We tend to forget these old stories, and there are others. The ATF & CIA, ask our special forces, are basically gangs with a license.

This is a wonderful story the only defect I see is that he could have made chapters longer.

Longhorn, with his verbosity and love of dramatizing a simple daily activity of his protagonist - like walking, opening doors or stopping for a smoke - has magnified the flaws in his story writing. 

One is of a technical nature (A hand gun, unless its trigger jammed on first shot, does not accidentally go off a few rounds; intense heat does not necessarily cause unspent ammunition to shoot out - explode most likely - but not shoot like a bullet). The other being lack of concern for reading comfort. Very often this reader had to pause and recall where he was left off at the last scene or episode, thus causing breaks in the flow of an otherwise smooth narrative. This happened too often  to disrupt the flow of connecting scenes. I stopped reading at page 8 when I realized that those remaining 47 pages could consist of more of such padded verbosity and story-go-round.

When miles broke into the prosecutors home I was screaming at him to send the files to his lawyer via fax machine. I later realized it was all a set up for a ruby ridge fantasy where the lone man takes on the whole gubmint and wins .

Great!!

totally excellent story , I agree with all the other comments , I would definitely buy the book

Louis Lamore and Tom Clancey write a long tale together. Great, best of both. Get an agent and publish this.

The heading says it all.

So I'll just say, thank you for your good work.

Thank You.

Excellent doesn't begin to describe this story. You should get a publisher and an agent to negotiate the movie rights. Please don't use Nicolas Cage, Tom Cruise or anyone else like them as Miles. Get Mark Wahlberg or someone similar.

When are you going to submit this to a publisher? This should be adapted as a novel and on bookstore shelves. Right now.

A very descriptive and entertaining story

This was my 2nd reading.

Still as good as the 1st time

Paperback book worthy without a doubt, seriously well written and magnetism beyond belief.

BRAVO!!

Totally Blown Away.

Well worth the read. Thank you. Can't believe I've missed this until today.

-V

Nuances of Rambo throughout this incredibly enjoyable and entertaining lengthy NOVEL. Thank you for your magnificent five star effort!

Definitely movie material. I had a sense of Rambo while reading this.

A beautiful novel - well done in general, maybe could profit from some small editing (Sunday or Sunny for the horse) but a very enjoyable story.

I've read this three times now, my only comment Is when does the movie come out!!

The amount of effort that went into writing this story. I, like many others, enjoyed it and I will look for your next one.

Thank You!

Alan

..as to how awesome this was.

Yeah, the premise was a touch flimsy, but it's so well written, who cares?

Well done sir.

Man people grade easy on this site. He has a folder with evidence of his innocence in an office with copy and fax machines and plenty of time. He makes no copies, faxes no one, just sits and doses off, then hands the stuff to the crook when he arrives for no apparent reason, maybe just so the crooked DA can throw it into the all too convenient fireplace and keep the story going for another fifty pages. One Star.

First, how even an incompetent attorney wouldn't INSIST on seeing the autopsy report, and how even a corrupt judge wouldn't dismiss the case without it is beyond me.

Second, there is NO WAY the Medical Examiner doesn't also have a copy of the autopsy report.

A long story, I did just skim some pages. But great reading. A little more detail in the ''news reports'' and something on how Brady became ''late'' and it would have perfect. 5x5 on this one

Fascinating plot by a great story teller. I enjoyed this story more than any other reads over the past year.

Have read a lot of dross on this site but found this story interesting and captivating No doubt i will seek out more of this authors work

I have read the story and the comments. Your introduction of flaws in the thinking of miles and others made this story believable. Nobody thinks clearly all the time. Your description of the conduct of law enforcement was excellent. Their flaws are really believable. I really like the lessons taught by the story. Miles agreement with a handshake rather than a contract for the gold was very good.

If I recall correctly, the only person to die was the bounty hunter. He deserved to die. The only other shocking part of the story was the killing of the dog. Miles didn't like it but it was something that had to be done. I understand.

Yes, there was a lot of detail, but it drew this reader into a visual comprehension of how things looked. It was easy to identify with the various characters.

In all, a very well organized and well written story. A really good story is when it is difficult to differentiate fact from fiction in the mind of the reader. I am glad you stopped when you did. I don't care what happened to Brady. It is clear that he will receive some form of justice. It was a good ending to a fantastic story. I would purchase such a story without a doubt. Thanks for your hard work to accomplish this difficult task.

of worthy story tellers on the literotica site.

a 5 STAR tale for sure,,inflation equates to 100 stars, because 97 % of other so called authors are worthless cucks.

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topic says it all

I was supposed to be working today. I was until I decided to read a bit during lunch. I finished the damn story in one sitting. Work didn't get much attention. It's a pretty good action story. Thanks.

Obviously, being on this site, I had no idea what to expect in it but this story was exceptional... in a way, it's kind of disappointing that Mr Brady didn't get a punishment that he was aware of but at the least he got a punishment that took away everything he was striving for.

A story of a man fighting the great machine of bureaucracy and law as it wronged him simply because it could is amazing...

I haven't read an action story in a long time, but this one stirred my interest in the genre again. Obviously it was a great read and I appreciate it appearing on this site. The only odd thing in it for me was an early comment that people saw a inner rage in his eyes and that made him someone to avoid. His actions in his fugitive life didn't seem the reflect that- he was a decent man. I wonder why he could have a good relationship later on but it was impossible in his earlier time in Texas. Just little curiosities that don't detract from my enjoyment of the story. I wish there were more like this to read.

Would love a bit longer and I believe you could get it printed. Fantastic!

I can visualize this type action. I was raised in the outdoors and I am well aware of how to avoid capture. It is not all that hard to do, I have yet met a city boy who could track a wounded elephant through a snow drift. I m not say they don't exist, just that I have not met them.

The story takes some flights of fantasy, which I find it is part of its entrapment the reader. The author had to play free and loose with property rights and ownership, but what hey it is his story and going into all the red tape involved provided nothing but stumbling blocks for this tale

Final views, well done, sir well done indeed

I loved the story but he should have gone back to Linda at the end.

VERY BEAUTIFUL STORY INDEED AND NARRATED VERY NICELY TO KEEP THE INTRIGUE AND INTEREST IN THE STORY ALL THOUGH .

but, like others, wish there was more of it. Deserves more tha a 5* and sincere congratulations to Longhorn.

and tough to put down. I read this over the course do several days and finally finished it on my I Pad. I was actually sorry to see it end. This would make a great movie or tv series script. Longhorn 07 wrote an epic...

Wow what a read I also sat up three work nights in a row reading this. It is a little (rambo-ish) actually a lot, but it gives a lesson learned over and over in life. well written I'm tired and need to find a safe place to sleep. Good night....for a couple of hours as long as I don't get any injuries.....zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz