All Comments on 'Watching the Game'

Loved it!

Always look forward to your stories, never a disappointment!

Creative and well written. 5* from me

Lujon, he’s not a dirty prosecutor. The steroid user has actually broken the law. Seems like the sister in law has a problem with bad boys. Since she keeps dating scum, there’s no need to frame them. The MC can just go after what they have really done.

ZK

haha lol

Well done! Usually I'll see a twist like this coming, but you had me so wrapped around the MC's sleeping giant routine I never considered mistaken identity. You're a wily one, Mr. Other, keep it up!

Well done!

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Fun und Entertaining!

11/10!!!!!

I had a friend in collage that used me for that stuff. She would tell them she wanted to break up and if thy didn't react well, I would go to her school for a few dates. loved the story btw

This was somewhat better than your normal stuff.

Fun. Fun misdirection.

For a while I thought MC was a willing cuckold. Very glad to keep reading and find out the truth.

Though short...well written. I see a whole series of Loving Wives stories about an identical cheating twin.

Short well written and a little dark humor thrown into it. As a line from a movie ‘are you not entertained’ and I would say yes! So five stars are earned!

Look forward to your next writing!

Good, but just another too-much-superhero main character like so many others, with all the resources and friends in the world. Not as much of a story when it's so unrealistic...

Good story and realistic because there are people like the MC have personally met a few, some of these commentators need to leave the basement more. And if the MC didnt have the resources to fight these simps then the trash twin sister wouldnt have used the MC to get rid of fhem.

If the characters were developed, the story would have felt more complete. I think the story was good, and that it was intended as a short story. Like many short stories, it left me feeling like I wanted more background. Much more info about twin sis, for example. Thanks, though.

Its NRL State of Origin night here in Australia, Game 1 - so needed to add the comment here.

QUEENSLANDER!

:D

OK. A little different, but pretty good.

Canetoad

A manual laborer drives a Mercedes?

I thoroughly enjoy mistaken identity involving twins stories. I dated a twin once. She and her sister pulled a switch on me during a date. When I caught on to what was happening, I got very passionate with the sister and she got very hot and was showing every indication she was ready and willing to go as far as I was willing to take her. When I called her by her name, she realized the jig was up.

Nice story. Like it a lot. AAAA++++

Show-off bully riding around in the Mercedes his rich wife’s family provided getting ideas above his station. Well played, sir.

AWESOME thank YOU

How did the wife have the guys number😟

Seriously?? The twin sister uses her twin and BIL to break it off, and wouldn't give them his number? And THAT ist is mystery of this light-headed piece?

Always liked your stories I wish you could write more thank you

This was an enjoyable and refreshing break from the authors usual rinse/repeat plotlines where a once normal, loving wife gets hit with a Martian Slut Ray and all of a sudden hates her husband.

Short, sweet, with a bit of a twist at the end...nice job.

Loved the story. 5 stars. Equally love some of the comments. Some readers just don't read. One asked how a man doing manual labor could afford the mercedes. That was explained as the 'roid asshole was taking his fiancee's money. Another asked how the pregnant wife had the man's phone number. The MC said he did extensive research and knew all about the ass. Of course he would have the phone number. Now 'roid brains might not pay attention to the phone number sending the text but no problem.

The story left enough of a puzzle for the reader to wonder why the MC was not concerned until the finale. Very good writing to accomplish that. I personally thought he was he'd already had a plan to annihilate the ass, but had no idea what it was.

And of course since the 'roid did not comply with the text instructions, he will get burned to the ground like promised, but that did not need to be explained.

Wow! What a ma-an! He really stood up to…

THE GUY FÛCKING HIS WIFE!

“ wood fried pizza”

I heard of Wood FIRED Pizza. This must be an Aussie thing.

Sorry, made me chuckle. ;)

Loved it!! Keep on writing!

just wondered how his wife had steroid users' phone #

Very clever, thank you. Great work as usual.

hehehehe, very sneaky, I thought they had an open relationship until the end.

to the comment a couple of weeks ago, I don't think his wife had roidboys phone, I think she was texting her sister.

Great story, five stars!

Most excellent offering Mr. Other.

Please do more mysterious stories, the unknown adds to the enjoyment of the journey.

5☆

I got to give it a thumbs up⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Five Stars and still a smile on my face. Good to see a LW story that leads you down a certain path then pivots you

Go the wahs!

Wow an actual loving wife we honestly need more stories like this 1 sure maybe with a little drama without the cheating but need more stories about a loving wife there are far too many stories about a cheating wife in this category I still maintain that those stories should not be in the loving wife category for its not about a loving wife though I will admit your series double or nothing is a really good series still remains 1 of my favorites on this site

Feel like I've read this one a couple of years before. Nice little palette cleanser :-)

You have a wonderful mind and can make a story from nothing 5

Very good. Looked like it was going to be a sick duck story. Then it turned into a great love story

Excellent little ditty.

Another very enjoyable story. I love the Australian places that you talk about.

I had just gotten back from the Gold Coast when this story came out and must have missed it. I took my granddaughter to the animal park in Currumbin and had a blast. My daughter and Aussie son in-law live in Nerang up in the hills above the coast. Beautiful area. I have also been to the lighthouse at Byron's Bay.

Really look forward to more of your work. Thanks, Douglas

Meh!

Bill S.

This was a real nice story

really enjoyed it

Actually I prefer to read a story about a actual loving wife when reading the loving wife category i don't know anyone who wouldn't i don't get how people can write a story about a cheating slut and post it in the lw catagory it will probably never make sense i have asked why before and its always 1 or 2 responses those are either 1 no response or 2 they don't know why either option is the same answer meaning they just don't know why i blame Literotica mostly though for allowing stories about a cheating slut supposed wife to be posted on the lw catagory if they would learn what a loving wife is they wouldn't allow it

A nice, light-hearted, little tale from you in between the tear-jerkers!

Nice for a change of pace. Not much to it but it got the point across.

Second read, still 5 stars from Xluckylee

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I was about to swear at you Other, other than your FS story (and I get why you wrote it that way), I thought you were going to write an accepting cuck. The moment she stood with her pregnant belly I knew it was something like Twins or the like.

Very well done!

Nice story, excellent

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Knew it was about twins from the offing. I did have a few doubts in the middle, but it came out as expected.

5 stars - I liked this story

story is fine. maybe a continuity error: when mc says he'll represent Brianna pro bono... represent her in what? They're engaged, not married right? No divorce necessary

A nice lower intensity, feel good read with a happy ending.

Still, human nature being what it is, it might be wise to periodically check up Janie's sleeve to see if the "get out of jail free" card she has gotten from Katie is still in place, and showing no signs of occasional handling.

4-stars

"I help get the bad guys put in jail" - Don't criminal lawyers usually defend the alleged bad guys? Or is this an Aussie term?

Nice little twist. I thought this was going to be another one where the MC is a pussy and keeps his cheating wife. Glad it wasn't

I get it was MC wife's twin sister roid boy was fucking but why did MCs wife have his mobile number?? Did I miss it??

Fun, thank you.

You have many of the seriously fun reads. You also have a wonderful talent for those little surprise mind fucks you throw in which is another reason it’s a fun read. Thanks again for posting it.

Lexx

That was so funny loved it keep all your stories coming I’ve read all of them think there bloody fantastic

Jist loves it! Well sone.

I love your stories.

Brat sister needs to solve her own problems like a adult.