All Comments on 'When Words Wander'

That was a slog. Just too unrealistic to have any merit. I think the author was trying to do a lot of moralizing to the readers and it detracted from the drama. The dialog dissolved into a boring repetitiveness.

I think you did a fantastic job on this follow up story segment. It is a compliment to the original series.

Thanks for your writing.

Heh. Just to balance, I liked the moralizing and NOT the drama.

I gave this 4 stars instead of 5, because the piece of shit ex didn't get her just desserts. Yes, I can see all the arguments why Jonathan didn't burn her to the ground. BUT... the author could have karmically punished her his own way, without dirtying Jonathan's hands, mind or morals. That's why he's the work's creator, he has choices.

It's good to read a story where the father actually fights for his children,and does what he can to minimize the influence that the cheating partner has in their lives.

If I had wanted a lesson in morality, I could have picked up any number of books, or gone to many other websites.

Plus, the ridiculousness of the suicide element. He has kids, he wouldn’t turn to blowing his brains out, and if he did, he’s not the same character. And the complete about-face of the Rich character seems ridiculous in comparison to the original. Everyone around Susan suddenly is or becomes paragons of propriety. Except Susan.

It was just too obviously moralistic and out of place to be enjoyable. It’s as weird as reading a gang-bang story in the book of Samuel.

This clown below is a total self-entitled narcissistic homo, who doesn't know a God darn thing about any male virtues : courage, valor, self-respect, or honor . His comments on other stories show he is a idiot and a coward and only leaves his moms basement for dinner, his proudest possessions are his participation trophies from junior high.

Miss you, Joe.

I assume you're talking about me? You believe I am a "total self-entitled narcissistic homo..."

Self-entitled? I claim no titles. I comment, as do you. I registered on the site several years ago, so I am certainly more courageous than YOU, who hide behind the anonymous label. You can look at my other comments, and hate those. You're just another anony.

Narcissistic? Where do you get that? Do you know what a narcissist is? I don't think so. I don't think I'm all that important. I'm just a guy from the West Coast. I may be smarter than you, but that's probably it. Donald Trump is a narcissist. He puts his name on everything. He has spent his life trying to be important. He is becoming merely impotent.

Homo? Sorry, big fan of the pussy here. Love 'em. Can't get enough of them. THAT has gotten me into sooo much trouble in my life. I love to see them in any state, resting and in action. If I did lean in that other direction, I could always read Gay Male, which I don't. Not that I'm judging, mind you.

You say I'm an idiot and a coward, and live in my mom's basement? I know for certain that I'm smarter than you, so that makes you...what? Can you guess?

Coward? I put my handle up on my comments. You?

Basement? I own my own home in Southern California. We don't have basements. My mom is no longer living. She also never owned a basement, so...

These great male virtues you speak of, that I presumably know nothing of, courage, valor, self-respect and honor.

We have already dealt with your "courage", so on to "valor". That's something mainly found on the battlefield, not found arguing on a smutty website. So fuck you.

"Self-respect". That's important. One needs that every day. You can't face the World adequately without it. I can't prove I have it, but here I am, defending myself, and not hiding behind "anonymous".

"Honor" You're looking for honor on a jerk-off website? As in masturbation and stroke-fantasies? Wow, are you setting your sights low.

If you're serious about "courage, valor, self-respect and honor", they why don't you go volunteer in a place and situation where those virtues matter, instead of complaining on a whack-off website.

Ruttweller, I love your put down of the cowardly 'Anon.' aren't they all, I hate them. How can they be allowed to sometimes destroy an author's life, hiding like they do, behind a mask, why does Literotica allow them. I didn't mark the story, it just wasn't for me. I believe the author is deceased, so can't come back with a defence of anything negative that I say.

Here's the sentence that sums up this incredible story: \\\You didn't give him emotional support, and instead of getting a part-time job so he wasn't working himself to death to give you the comfortable life you wanted, you took a lover so you could give to another what you weren't willing to give to Jonathan./// It separates women's rights from the highly toxic chemical that is modern American feminism.

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Not sure if OP is an attorney or a Jedi, but everything feels authentic, gritty, and familiar. As a family law attorney of many years, this story resonates with me, and it should resonate with the reader, too. In fact, this story should be required reading before a marriage license is issued in the Great State of Texas. Booo-yah! Five Stars!

Have any of you fools read the author's bio? He was killed in an automobile accident in 2007, and a friend updated his bio in 2017. Please read it--the entire thing.

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So, don't be an idiot and name-call or piss all over a man whose life was cut tragically short at 25. He left behind a wife who was an Afghanistan veteran of the Marine Corps.

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Consider that tragedy, as you whine, cry, and moan about a FREE story. Know too, that any number of these writers have departed this sad vale, and what you think, say, or write about them only diminishes YOU. Now, get a life while you still enjoy that incredible gift.

2nd reading for me. Like the last 2 pages best, although the Lawyers and Rick showing Susan what a misguided woman she was, was also good. LOL for her 3td marriage.

@Ruttweiler

All those words and you're still a cream pie eating, simp bitch, cuckyboy. But thanks for all the bullshit you spewed about what you want us to believe you are....

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Five Stars. Edge of Sundown? Grow up, kid. Oh, and piss off.

Dee

Why does this DUMBASS writer tell us he's writing a continuation and advises us the READ the works leading up to this piece (three of 'em), and then the idiot spends the first third of the story telling us what we already read?! SMH! Another barely-there amateur who needs an editor.

Overall well done story and appreciated.

All the best to the author's widow and children. Hopefully they have been able to keep him a cherished part of their lives while growing forward and living an engaged life. <3

A good and informative tale. Give stars from me. Sorry about joesephus. I hope his family is carrying on well. It is hard

JPB

A great sequel to an otherwise painful and sadistic original story. Wow Susan was such a cancer. Was a revelation to see Rich wake up. Good story. 5 stars. RIP Josephus.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Much better!

Nice ending to those other pieces. This is nice work you have put up, I was glad to read it and learn just a bit about you, I think, in the process, especially with the end note you included.

Sorry to have lost you, 17 years ago. If your writing is any indication, your family and friends lost a treasure.

It was a collaborative success with a positive ending for Jonathan and family. The crucible of doubt and stress that Susan put him through was balanced by the attempted wake up call by Lauren and Rich. This ending was satisfying. Great job

“It talked about how much better and easier it was on the children if one parent died instead of losing one to a divorce.”

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Which is why the only correct response to the events in this story is for the slut to die. He’s an auto mechanic. Several ways to remove her as a problem, and some of them don’t even risk harming others!

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ZK

Tragically, we will never know what level of excellence Josephus would have achieved as an author. Perhaps there is a parallel universe in which he lived and developed his skills to rheir full measure. I surely hope so.