All Comments on 'Words on Skin'

First off: I figured "imu" out on the first pass and I guessed there was no Chip fairly early on. I don't consider myself clever in doing this, but consider more of a kudos to the author for his elegant foreshadowing abilities. In my opinion, this is a rare gem of storytelling; very few authors possess the ability to combine the raw elements of human nature together with a viable plot line to create a heartwarming tale within the setting of taboo lust. Kudos to you. I anxiously await your future work.

First off absolutely intoxicating story. Loved the whole thing even though I myself have never had sexual fantasies about anyone in my family, but I do enjoy a well put together erotic story such as this.

As for imu, had that figured out by the fourth "paragraph" after it was first mentioned, I read "I'm U" in the guess and it hit me what the m really was :P

In any event truly awesome.

I've never had any kind of incestuous feelings involving my own family, but these pieces of erotica are by far my favorites. As well-written (and smoking hot) as so many if them are, they all pale miserably next to this tale. I knew almost immediately that there was no Chip, and i figured out imu about halfway through, but none of this detracted in even the smallest way from my immense emjoyment of the story. From introduction to climax ;) the action follows a realistic and fully satisfying course, and the characters are simply perfect. Beautifully done!!

The name of my comment says it all, the best erotic fiction I've read so far. By far my favorite author. This person knows how to write some damn good stories. Keep 'em cumming!

WE GO IN FEET FIRST!

Just the sheer *joy* of Lizzie at the end made this for me, as if all the rest hadn't already. This is magical ... quite a love story.

I was interrupted reading this and worried about imu all night. Fantastic dreams! This is something my wife and I do on occasion. I;ll try it on her tomorrow! Thanks to you and to C.J. too.

Brilliant story...wonderful characters. A fine piece of erotica!

This story is erotic beyond belief. Please write more stories. I recommend this to everyone.

My dear pacofear,

I have just concluded reading your offering entitled, Words on Skin. This piece of erotic prose has to be the single best piece of erotica that I've ever read. Words fail me to include a decent summary of my feelings. Just, "thank you", for sharing your talent.

It wasn't until I looked at the letter "m" as a shape instead of a letter that I figured out the hidden message. The way she shamelessly describes her first time with Chip, we can all identify with the futile and silent rage and jealousy, the agony and the ecstacy it brings an older brother. Do we all subconsciously lust after our younger sisters? Probably. Do alot of younger sisters have a 'brother complex'? I can tell you from talking with many seperate Imouto-chans, that yes they do.

There is no Chip. So angry, yet so relieved. Though admittedly I had it picked before it was professed in sand, the plain and simple line breaks the author used to display it, we all see the message through Scooter's eyes.

You nearly had me at tears, and it's rare that a story can do so without a tragic ending. You've woven a fine yarn which requires no sequel to justify it. I only wish I could do the same with my own work. Tonight, I salute you, wherever you may be. Fantastic job.

oh my god its so freaking touching, i love your work!

This is absolutely AMAZING! Everything wrapped up so perfectly. The build up, the chase, it all combined to create one of the most brilliantly insightful story in literotica. I am very happy to say that within about 2 years of reading stories here, this has been the only story that compelled me to post a feedback. This is absolutely a well-done masterpiece.

tale I have read of sister-brother seduction. I suspected early on that Chip was gonna lose, but lost out on the 'I heart/m' in I 'm' u. Great character and plot development. Greatly enjoyed it. Thanks!

I loved this story. From start to finish, is is one of the hottest stories I have ever read. Please keep up the very good work!

Did not get imu, great story though.

Very awesome story. XD

Just responding to your request - figured out the 'imu' thing first time I saw it. xD

The title says enough.

It felt like a commitment to her brother not just nasty, hot sex, even though that was more than amply present. Your stories have a real emotional component that I truly enjoy and wish I were better at conveying myself. A terrific story and maybe an even better read.

Great story, one of the best! j

I was furiously masturbating throughout the entire thing. If you've ever read something so exciting and hot that it leaves your heart feeling heavy, this is one of those stories.

I couldn't hope to enjoy this more. It's perfect in every way.

good slow build up, good total surrendering, copious amounts of anal, vague oedipal undertones and well written

much enjoyed

You, sir, write a mean tale so I'm happy to cede top honors

to you. And thanks for the kind words. If you liked "Words on Skin" try "Stolen Kisses." It's my other twisty sibling incest story. I've got another in the works too but it's slow going. I tend to chew on concepts for these stories more than the others.

I really enjoyed it, Paco. You're an excellent writer, and I agree that it's more fun to bow out on a high note. Stick to what you enjoy, and don't let anyone dictate otherwise to you. <p>

On a sidenote, I saw your comment on your Bio about the Incest category being really tough. Sorry about taking your top spot. :) <p>

Do you have more stories like this one?

Great story. Although I gotta be honest, I thought the "imu" thing was obvious right away.

For the Anony and others like him looking for "the rest of the story" - not to be cruel, but you ain't getting it from me. Ever. I have always had a distaste for stories that grind out the minutia at the end. "And then they told Mom and she was appalled but then she finally learned to accept them and later they had babies and everyone lived happily ever after." Ick! That's not my style. I prefer to bow out at a high note like the one here. Either you felt the romance of it or you didn't.

good but needs another chapter to tell how the mom acts when told that the engagement is off and what happens between bro/sis and if mom ever finds out this is only half of the story when will we get the rest

Simply outstanding. A score of 5 simply does not do

justice to this story...

Thank-You!

... I would need the space of your entire body to describe my feelings about this story. You write so wonderfully, thank you for sharing this journey of taboo sexuality and emotion.

not only an extremely hot story, but an emotionally deep and satisfying one too. extremely well written.

Another very hot story. You're quickly becoming my favorite writer on here! Keep up the superb work.

I love how you are able to create believable characters and weave complexity into your stories. I thought IMU was 'I miss you'.

Sorry friend, your characters don't go away. you just have to write them out. You'll do fine as long as you don't develop Multiple Personality Disorder. I like "Words on Skin" reminds me of "Stolen Kisses" my favorite story that you have written.

My pulse is still racing too fast to think clearly.

You are truly an artist Mr Paco Fear. More please!

I actually figured out the imu pretty early, 2nd/3rd page maybe? Only the whole big deception thing was a bit risky for my taste, what if brother didn't go for the 'ass on honeymoon'-line, and who paid the big private cabin after all? Very well written

I actually figured out the imu pretty early, 2nd/3rd page maybe? Only the whole big deception thing was a bit risky for my taste, what if brother didn't go for the 'ass on honeymoon'-line, and who paid the big private cabin after all? Very well written

Thank you for giving us this story. I sincerely enjoyed reading it.

Wow! Honestly one of the best stories I've read on this site. I always prefer the ones that actually relate the emotion that's the basis for the relationship rather than just relying on sex for the sake of justifying a story. This was of the former category, and I appreciate that. And yes, I caught the "imu" the third time... though I got a kick out of the emu guess, that was funny!

This story develops slowly just as you say in the beginning.

I really enjoyed it and think you did a great job painting the characters for us. The bawoo struck me as a very cute thing coming from a cute young girl and a sexy thing from the hottie she grows into. I had a good time picturing the different ways she could have done that.

Thanks for a nice read.

If u ever decide to write a book let us know on here. I bookmarked this page and I'm sure ill come back here quite often to reread. Thanks so much for the story.

I've been reading erotic stories for years. I like it better to imagine things for myself. This is the best story I have ever read. First two pages I read it for the usual reasons but I read the last 4 because I wanted to know what happened so badly. Please keep writing.

Very well written. Kept me glued thru the entire story. I had hoped that it would end the way that it did but couldnt quite bring myself to cheat and skip ahead. I figured out the imu early on and also guess correctly there was no Chip but a long drawn out play for the brother. Perhaps a short sequel to let us know how the two fared since then - you know, a happily ever after ending? Again, excellant writing, well paced and sexy. Thanks!!!!

This story was awesome 5/5. Also i figured out the imu abuot half-way through and also figured there was no Chip

I couldn't quit reading. BTW, its not a "girl" thing. I figured the "I 'heart' you" from the first moment. Or maybe its my feminine side pushing out. From a 62 year old male - Thanks for the story.

out of so many stories here, yours was the first one i rated a 5.

First off, your story was great! Of course I may be saying that because brother/sister incest with anal play is my favorite theme of all. But the story buildup, the affection, and the subtle deception were all well crafted and expressed. And oh yes, I got the IMU pretty quickly. Like someone else said, it's probably a girl thing.

I recognized your name from another story and now will go read some more of your submissions. Thanks!

Maybe it is a girl thing. Thought you might like to know that I figured out the "i m u" thing straight away, the first time she did it.

Really was a brilliant story. Wonderfully careful. Loved it.

This is possibly the best story I have ever read on this site. Sexy as hell with great emotion and depth. Great stuff!

Yesss! knew the m was a heart!!

I only fluked it because i wrote out imu on my hand too :P

Only got it when i saw it twice tho hahaha a bit slow :(

...a great story...thank you for writing AND sharing it.

That was the best Literotica story I have ever read.

NOT MUCH ELSE TO SAY EXCEPT LOVED IT !!!!!!!!!!!!! HOPE YOU CONTINUE WITH THE STORY.

There are no words to describe how great the storey was. The plot, the characters, the scenario.........

Absolutely amazing...........

Keep it up hope to read more of your stories.........

What love and tenderness. I can not imagine what is would be like to have someone desire me that much - to go to all that trouble over all those years. Wow

all day and I finally decided to check it out. I'm very glad I did. I'm not a big believer in incest but I am a big one on love. This story was sweet and sappy in ways that can touch even the most cynical of hearts. I love the slow work up and I figured out way before she admitted there wasn't a Chip that he really didn't exist. It's a fantastic story and very well told. Great job!

... I LOVE YOUR STORY!!!!!! Ich should have figured out, what "IMU" stood for, but I failed... I was too engaged with enjoying your Story!!

If you want to write more about them... do so... but I can't imagine, how you could top this one!!

Really a tender and believable story. I guessed it early on, and I also almost passed on the six part deal, but I am glead I stayed with it. Good work.

When I first saw it was a 6 page, I almost passed it up. Then, I started reading it, and the characters came to life. Simply amazing just isn't enough of a compliment. I really do not need a follow-up, I would not want to see you try to top this beautiful story, and fall short. But what kept me reading, all the way through, was not the foreplay. Though that was nice as well. What kept me reading was "IMU".

Amazing, simply amazing

Nice story. I did figure out the heart.

You write an excellent love story. You put all of the elements out there, and I'm sure some caught on faster than others. Very well-crafted.

good but two problems (1) when the mom showed up you changed her name from lizzie to leslie very distracting we have to stop and figure out who you are talking about also alot of misspelled words never post a story without going through an editor (2) you left us hanging how does she tell her mom there is no chip and what do they do now does mom find out do they live together does she get pregnant you can't just leave us hanging like this please continue

It would be difficult to add to what the others said. Good, great, excellent are already taken.

I figured, initially, that she was writing a w that could be mistaken for an 'm' - iwu (I want u)

When she made it clear it was an m, I guessed there was no Chip and that she meant "I'm marrying u"...

great story please continue writing possibly a sequal to this one

Thanks for the kind words. For the anony with the alcohol question: you sir, are a close reader. Lizzie only says that she had "a good stiff drink" but never says what she drank. It's Richard who tastes gin on her breath. If you want to know what she drank in my head, it was a gin and tonic. Richard is the elder sibling and bartender. Lizzie is a less sophisticated coed and even a youngin can fix a G&T. Oh, and her favorite color is orange. See? These are real people wandering around in my head. I'm telling you, it's frickin' weird.

Guess us blokes are smart in other ways as I did not get the imu but like someone else got the chip clue. I thought this was right up with your peaches and hero stories so pretty fucking good in my book. Hope this has cleared out some of the characters who were clamouring for headspace. Cheers, again. -- UK CYNIC

Perhaps the best story I have read on this site. Great buildup, natural flow, perfectly edited. Realistic characters. DAMN you can write.

Lizzie has wanted Scooter for years....to marry him..regardless of what anyone felt about it..Scooter was her one true love..not just his cock.

This may well be the best I have read here in years. It had every element I look for, and then some. It was very well written. Very high caliber stuff. Nicely constructed, wonderfully crafted. I savored each word. Yes, I quickly deduced "imu", but it took nothing away from the story. I loved the characters and the way they meshed. This was complete, and I don't need a sequel. Your call on that. By the way, what was the last drink, the one with gin?

Completely amazing story. I loved all of the build-up, had perfect pacing with it. I did figure out before the twist that either Chip wasn't real, or she wasn't getting married to him. The Imu thing I didn't figure out at all, I was trying for all sorts of weird things it could stand for. excellent story my friend, all in all.

Yes I hope you will contiue with this story. What happens to them?

I loved this story. The IMU I got pretty much in the beginning but I kept reading to find out how it played out.

I really really enjoyed it.. would love to see how Scooter and Lizzie continue on.