- Non-Erotic Poetry
- haiku: the train
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ten years same train every day
for a moment
the first time
- COMMENTS
LeBrozalmost 16 years agoThis poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 40,000 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>
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annaswirlsover 19 years agothis is a haiku and an awesome one at that
keep on writing!
Miss Oatlash, syllables do not really count, even the most traditional haiku poet will tell you this-- it is more than syllables, especially in English.
jthserra has a haiku series, you might check it out! I learned a lot from him too
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=125609
Miss Oatlashover 19 years agoI'm a traditionalist, but I was taught that haiku and senyru require a certain syllabic rhythm of 5-7-5. That being said, I like the poem, I just wouldn't term it a 'haiku'.
