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Click hereScraps of paper lie about
my brain as I scribble idle
mental thoughts about
how best to work on
improving diet or finances
or the lack of relations I
have with pretty much all
of my family--even the ones
who are actually in-town,
not more than a five minute
drive during the busiest time
of the day, but they're less
actual notes and more like
virtual Post-Its I'm just going
to let hang about until the
glue finally dries and they
drop away like forgotten
champagne bubbles at
five seconds past midnight.
to the temporal silliness of New Year's resolutions. Your writing is very compact and flows so well. I think you have a great feel for natural, conversational writing. I'd like to see a smattering of more imagery but that's me. All in all it's a really well-written poem, an effective poem imho, :-)
The first two lines are really interesting to me because of the double meaning of "lie". I like the contrast of a frantic scribble and idle thoughts too. The way you have broken up the stanzas gives this a run on, stream of consciousness quality that works well. Repetition of the word "about" reinforces that, and gives it almost a spoken word quality when read aloud (I am not expert, just my opinion). The last stanza ties it all back to the title, but in a really subtle way, evoking new year's eve and those pesky resolutions. Really like this.