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Click herewinter
snow on the branch
the cat sleeps
I really like the way this (short) poem provokes images. Those few short words brings back memories of winters past.
DJ
I'm hardly qualified to comment on a haiku. It's been ages since I wrote one, and I still need to learn more about them.
I like the poem. I wouldn't use "the" twice in a haiku. "the cat sleeps" doesn't have quite enough impact.
I really like haiku poetry, and I think this is what you're aiming for here. It didn't pull me in like I expected it to. I would love to see you expand a little. Maybe do the 5, 7, 5 counts. I believe it would work out better, and you could add more details by doing so.
Thanks for sharing, and keep writing! :)