All Comments on 'Between London and Brighton'

was this a 1 chapter story or are we waiting for more?

Now that you've got my attention, what's next - would like to see Angela get off, after all, it's 2-0 Amanda.

Is English your second or even third language? I ask because the standard of this story is not as high as I would expect from a British journalist. If English is a foreign language to you, then this is a decent effort. However, much of the dialogue feels stilted and excessively formal: for example, a Briton is unlikely to say, "I am Amanda" but more likely to say, "I'm Amanda" (an abbreviation far more common in spoken English). I'm afraid that the story-line too (I can't call it a plot) is implausible. It's difficult to accept the idea that two women meeting for the first time on a crowded coach would immediately question one another's sexual orientation and start in touching each other up. I've given you three stars for trying but if English is a foreign language to you I recommend that you find a good editor for your stories. And try to make your plots more believable too.

..that I have to agree with Anonymous's comments.A good try, and you show some promis, but there's considerable scope for improvment. (Also, I was left wondering - did the hotel refund the cost of the cancelled room?)

Well your story turned me on, it is living the story and connecting with the words of the story! H

Very erotic.