by MichaelMasters
Please don't have the empress fall "in love" with her abusers. Thanks.
Revenge!!!!!! His head on a stick in her front window. Or castration!!!!!!! This is not reedeamable ever!
Of course written by a man. No king would ever beg to be called king or asked for it. A real king would never ask or barter it! Second, not sexually pleasing, if this is your fantasy writer you have serious hate for women and a very low self esteem.
This story can only end satisfyingly in one way - with her secret not being found out by anyone and by the lord being totally humiliated, forced to submit himself, and then beheaded (both of his heads). A person who wants to be called a king but does not treat other royalty with respect cannot win in any good story...
should have focused on the empress. fucking the servant is no great accomplishment
Public humiliation before her army and city. Make her sacrifice be all in vain.
If the theme is humiliation there's no reason to shy from it.
on Barrand, Zoaxus, and J'akart. They should be stripped and humiliated, then sent off as slaves to work in a coal mine (or similar) where they never see a woman nor the light of day ever again.
Absolutely further humiliation for Isabella! Keep her on a downward spiraling roller coaster where she learns she is not as smart as she thinks she is. Love the mind and emotional games being played on her, to think of her being kept until the town is busy then bound and leashed and have to make her way back to the palace covered with the residue of the nights activities, thinking she is finally safe only too learn her army was defeated.
One idea is have the girls be rescued by soldiers... but then the soldiers want to be recompensed ;)
I'd say more of both. Let her fall a bit further before one glorious oppertunity arrives to have her revenge with a capital R and is allowed to take it
She should be made an example and paraded bound and chained through the srreets . After she gets fucked into total submission of course.
J'akkart and his men should rough fuck that whole nation the fuck up!!!
she should show more defiance and be punished and humiliated for it
you promised sequel. had her face covered and given to the barbarian soldiers for a night
Great story. I hope in part 2 the proud empress even submits to her servant
Great story, I enjoyed it a lot. I hope you update it soon. In the next chapter I'd like to see it solely focused on Isabella rather than her servant, and more of J'akart humiliating her, maybe even publicly or in front of her city. Please write more!
For part 2 I'd focus on Isabella maintaining her defiance while her body continues to betray her, more humiliation and more F/F
I think the princess should have to eat her words when it turns out her army was defeated and will not be returning. Forced to serve the men once more, this time she is tormented with her own body betraying her. Ultimately, she should be punished with a cruel tease and denial session in front of her entire court, with the horse lords endlessly edging her until she is forced to confess the desires that have been awakened by her forced submission.
...just a thought, lol.