All Comments on 'Molly's Fantasy Ch. 01'

Great read, looking forward to the next chapter.

Some of the conversation is strained. No one would explain in that detail about their car - they would just move it. Also it ended too soon. Nothing happened. People do not talk that way.

But, that said it is a good buildup but needs work on the conversation side.

so you are about 95 now?

Terrible, and on so many levels. You name the category, and you bombed in it.