All Comments on 'Sweet Dreams Daddy'

This needs a drastic proof read!! Spelling mistakes and text talk seem to fill this piece and made for uncomfortable reading. If you are going to write more stories, concentrate on that and then you can work on more of a plot and varied vocabulary! But you have lovely ideas, so keep it up

Good job, yes it needs work but the storyline was great!

Keep up the good work!

I liked it. Excellent first effort. I noticed a few mistakes here and there but they did not interfere with my reading of your story. Glad to hear you'll be writing more stories. Looking forward to reading where this story goes if you choose to continue it. Again good job, keep writing, and looking forward to reading what you deem fit to publish here. Thank you

Very good flow and direction of story, just read what said before the final product. I think dad knows about not ruining a good thing, he can say he was sleeping, who sleeps that hard and doesn't wake up ? Do keep writing and lets enjoy this together.

I noted this is your first story and in the first line read, 'your alone' instead of you're alone. I groaned and thought, 'this is only the beginning and there's an error' ... but then no more errors, and if there were, I missed them enjoying the story. I wonder which is reality and which part(s) fantasy. I'll look out for more of your writing.

This is a good read for your first attempt! I enjoyed the flow and the build up. Keep up the good work; I look forward to reading more of your stories

The errors were distracting for me - probably because reading is my job - and it isn't just the spelling. It's the lack of punctuation. In some cases, you have several clauses in one - "Your breathing gets heavier and more desperate your hands move up to my head starting to grip my hair tighter then loosen your tummy gets firm then softens". Loosen your tummy? Anyway, it's things like that. This is a good story, but it could be better. Good work in one respect. Keep it up. Just get someone from here to proof it.

i felt like it was directed to me and it felt so good. 1 foot dick before i knew it.

Okay, like others before me, I noticed grammatical errors. But in time I am positive you will make vast improvements in this area. I personally would not be too concerned. But what really caught my attention was the story itself. Now, ordinarily I am not turned on by father-daughter stories. But this was a daughter in control of the situation story, as told by the daughter. Almost immediately your grammatical errors were forgiven. She could have been enjoying her dad for a lengthy period of time without him even knowing it. Maybe a brother too. Yummmm...

Damn this got me so hard, I don't care if you have a few misspelled words who cares this a cock hardening story and wish I had a daughter who would do it. Loved it and gave it 5 stars. keep going

this is an okay story. It's a good start, however I had to rate only 2 stars because for me when I would see u instead of you or things like that I kind of went back and thought "did they really put u in a story" Now normally grammar does not bother me but my main issue is the story looks rushed, sort of seems that there wasn't much effort put into it.

more to the point this looks like something someone would send to you in a text message as sexting rather then a story.

BUT beyond all of that it was good in the sense of interesting. strait to the point and not looong drawn out.

Not what I expected but cool very good

You sound about 12 and your paragraphs are 1-3 very long sentences.