All Comments on 'Rad Bird'

Sorry but this was really bad....thumbs up for trying though

I enjoyed this. Quirky characters with a decent backgound and a reasonable raison d'etre.

was a great story. Characters were fleshed out as well as anything I've read on here that wasn't 10 chapters long and were fairly believable in their dialogue. Keep writing

Congrat on a very sweet and sensual story. You managed to create a story and characters that convey a lot of emotions, drama, insecurity, concern and real life-long love all in one package. The sexual parts were dosed in just the right amounts to spice it up and to deliver them into each others arms. If you ever decide to expand their story I'll be waiting!

5*

I also enjoyed this. Nice believable characters with a good development and background. Well written with good flow and build. Thanks

This story can and should be continued.

Love this story, you must continue.....get rad bird back....

Your story is amazing and I hope you will build on it and add more chapters

There's been a lot of stuff on this site recently that just didn't do it for me. The Rad Bird, though had what I like in spades! Intensity, and believability. A great love story. If this one doesn't go high in the Hall Of Fame, the Hall is not so famous. More, please!

I don't know where to start the praise for this story, from character development to the backstory, from the real-life problems to the almost palpable emotions, from simple feelings to pure-hearted love, everything was executed to perfection. Sure the stemy action was great but in my oppinion it took second place, for the blossoming love finally recognised and consumed vanquishes all.

Having such pure love with strong basis and romance implemented into such special and unusual characters takes talent and dedication, so for that I congratulate and thank you!!!

This is to good to be left as a single instalement, you simply HAVE to contuinue this! You created a perfect premise with her changing her mayor and him deciding to stay that you have a plethora of options on how to continue this jewel.

Of course I gave it 5* as a reward, thanking you and in hope of a continuation.

Extremely enjoyable fic if I do say so! Might we see a sequel at some point?

I had to scroll and scroll and scroll. Flat out nothing of it was interesting at all. Wasted my time even to scroll to write this.

I thought u did a wonderful job and it was different not just the same writing I like that there's another storyline that is going on to build on hope you write about them getting back Ray bird and how her new path to law will help him. Don't give the bad comments a second of your time if it so boring or bad they should move on not waste your and are time keep up the good work. Were all amuter writers

But the skater slang made no sense at all - as an adult male, and not a teenage slacker, it conveyed nothing except 'wtf is he talking about?'. Next time, leave out pointless detail that only a very narrow segment of your readers is going to 'get'.

Three stars, which is a 'like', but the opening bored me and it kind of wandered along from there, so I can't in all honesty rate it any higher. In future, leave out the niche slang and concentrate on telling the story; KISS is the Golden Rule here.

Would like to see a sequel as it was left open for going further. Like to see them get back his characters and take back Rad Bird and the new that was stolen from him.

Please continue this story

needs and deserves at least another Chapter

Definitely want to read more I liked it. The skater slang was a grew touch. Five stars

GREAT START! You've created a story line that holds the reader's interest all the way to the end of the chapter. It seems that Brandon and Ev have a lot of catching up to do. You left us with the hint that Ev has changed her major to intellectual property law, with the possibility to assist her brother.

Well worth the 5*

RecHiker

As many have mentioned, this deserves another chapter or three. No problem with dialogue, as I don't like comics or do skateboards. Did add character, tho

Marvin

I hope there will be more. Great plot and writing.

This story was not actually intended to have a second chapter. I felt that the open-ending alluded to a potential future was fine as a conclusion. I felt I had followed the rule of good writing; "Set your story during the most interesting phase of your main character's life." I was not at all sure a second chapter could add anything worth while to the story of Brandon and Evelyn.

However, the response to this story has been very positive and the comments very encouraging. Obviously the most common comments are the ones asking for more to the story so I have decided to continue.

Now that I have started writing a second chapter, I'm finding a lot of really good material and really good character development. I don't know when it'll be done but I expect to have a second chapter up relatively soon.

Nice story

wish he would have cum in her when he had his cock head in her pussy the first time, they needed to fuck.

The background story, though lengthy for a single-installment erotic story, made the final act believable. The characters are unusual people, and I got that they were complementary in so many ways.

I understand Brandon's lust, reluctance, and finally yielding to what was inevitable for both of them.

I had a virtual threesome with them at the end.

Though Ev and Brandon can't get married, they do have the same surname already. They can certainly pass as husband and wife anywhere that no one from their past knows them.

Did anyone else notice that this story is set in 1990, even though it was written last month?

What a good story about intriguing characters. While they were unusual I still felt they could be real people.

There's no need for a sequel. It's perfect as it is.

That was a great story and the "end" is a great start for another beginning... they deserve a continuation but either way that was just... sweet and loving and just ugh great. Thank you for this

One of my favorite stories. Sweet and nice. Lovely, appealing characters. I like the gender role switch. Two cracked characters with love and the courage of their convictions.

A truly lovely story, wonderfully written. You have given Brandy and Ev such depth that they're people I would like to meet, not to mention wanting to see if Rad Bird is fits my mental image. You have laid the foundations for what could easily become something of an epic story. I guess I can only hope that you want to tell more of this story. I will happily grovel if it will help to sway your decision.

Loser

I fell in love with both characters... and in only 4 pages!

Thank you so much.

Great Little story and the characters were definitely lovable.

Fucking awesome 5⭐️

Fantastic story. Ty

Thanks