All Comments on 'Sexual Healing'

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erectus123erectus123over 8 years ago
nicely done

I'd suggest dropping the "cause" and all those "and"'s

"Cause she showed me acceptance = She showed......

Of all that I was

And expressed pride at then who I might be =Expressed pride at who I might...

A debt I do owe

To the woman of green

To the woman

And her heart =Her heart

And her love.." =Her love

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