All Comments on 'Breath Training'

Don't quit your day job.

just so you know, please do not write pt 2, pt 1 was bad enought

I just wasted five minutes of my life reading this horrible story.

the ass whooping the bitch had coming was not given,why? the fact that a woman would walk down the street almost naked to a known lesbian haters house, why? when she had a bad feeling about the openly displayed bdsm gear she didn't leave,why?

How far up your ass was your head when you wrote this? More absolute trash from a dick with no substance or even a lick of sense.

You've got some writing talent but this story is horrid, pathetic, just plain hateful & disgraceful. The anonymous commenter who called your story "rancid" described this perfectly.

The entire plot line is incoherent. I second all of RedLion's points. But IMHO even worse than all of that is we're meant to believe in a HEA ending between Ellie & Harley when it's blatantly obvious Ellie set her up.

Unbelievable! Literally

I wasted my time thinking the plot was going to get better, guess what, I was wrong.

Unlike the other anonymous, I thought the story was very good, I really enjoyed reading it. As a bisexual/somewhat lesbian myself, I cannot wait to try smothering with my girlfriend. Seems very kinky and cool.

I liked this charming story — flaws and all. It reads freshly and naughtily, like a partly formed fantasy that the author is too horny to perfect but loves enjoying! More please - don’t be out off by the moaners (how good is their writing I wonder? And why are they so rude?)

Cute story. Please write more!