All Comments on 'I'm the Man of the House Ch. 04'

Great story

You must be some sort of anotomy / literary wizard!

Not being one to criticize usually, I will tell you the stories could be even better with the help of an editor.

I just didn't like how you used the same words over and over. It became, repetitive

anon.. you are complaining about the author being repetitive, you forget that it is the way that the world talks. short, compact, and concise. no one says in the middle of having sex, "wait, stop, do you have a medically approved prophylactic?" No! they say, wait, you got a rubber??? so stop complaining about the i's and the t's, and take the story for what it is, ENTERTAINTMENT!!!

is going be more chapters ? if so i would to read where they have their foursome and the women do get pregnant 5 stars for all the chapters

Good overall story but needs an Editor.

will there be more to this story?

will you be adding more to this story or end it?

I like the fact you write for yourself and don't really care what some think about your writing. You are open for suggestions. The only one I have is a little more editing might serve you well. Keep writing

Great; can you do a vintage story, please, of course mom son; abusive father, son saves mom; 1930s, and they openly admit their relationship, and get married and become a family.