All Comments on 'Crystal Ch. 05'

Truly a inventive plot twist for the ending of this chapter. I'm glad that you let us know Max is still alive and we'll be coming back. With the detail you put into his power acting as if it has a will of it's own and is helping to guide him. That was very impressive not many writers do that. Also Jasper is becoming very annoying in the story okay we all know he's obsessed with Crystal and that she doesn't want him. Personally I hope that Max will knock Jasper's head off. I will look forward to the next chapter hope you post it soon.

great u finished the story also was wondering how this isnt in the scifi section

Ha you did it just like x-men 2 where we thought jean died but then she came back as phoenix in Last stand

Horrible plot holes and gaping story telling. Without the sex scenes thrown in this story is barely passable.

To Anonymous 3219, thanks for the criticism. I’m working on revising the Crystal series in a new version titled In This Country, so if you want , check it out. I hope it’s more to your liking.