by SweetOblivion
You're one of the poets I always make sure I read in New Poems.
You're more meticulous about rhyme and meter than I am, S.O. I would have written "...he wishes/" starting the next line using a trochee, thus maintaining the rhyme and meter for the ear, if not the eye. Somehow "he'd wish" didn't sound right to me.
Nonetheless, a great read as usual.
The iambic pentameter goes off the rails on this line:
"And mold yourself in the fashion he'd wish; "
You might put it back on the rails with:
"And mold yourself in just the way he'd wish;"
...or something along those lines.