by EccentricOrbits
It's beautiful. So hot, and so personal. You are incredibly talented and sexy. I'm so proud to call you my friend and to be featured in such a delicious story!
Present tense doesn't work (especially when you forget and slip back to past tense).
"She kneels on the bead"
Now that I'd like to see!
The burner of passion gets turned up ever so slowly.
For the first few words.
Then its hot raw passion
A very good read