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Don't forget to take the time to vote-weather you like it or not.

This is smart.

"The skin slides in" is the line of the week, its repetition suggesting love making, although I do wonder if you had consolidated the existing words into longer lines, would it have slowed down the love making?

I might have written "my mind to my mouth drawn out"

For some reason Lit won't accept my monicker in "Comments." I''m greenmountaineer.

This is nicely done and suggests skill. Nicely done!