All Comments on 'New Girl Ch. 02'

Boring, pre-puberty line of thought. I won't say stop writing but you need a lot of practice before you try to go public again.

Simple but hot. I enjoyed it, next instalment !

Good for a start, but it sounds kinda like an 8th grader learned profanity and wrote an advanced story, all to say an expanded vocabulary wouldn't hurt. Also if your story is going to fall under the category of nonconsent, put a little more nonconsent in there, you always have to write to your audience. Ok start though, you can do very well.

Keep going. .. it has promise.

First of all "Rhodney" shut up mkay? If you can't write a better one then dont judge the author freaking turd

Anyway author your story is getting spicier and spicier :3

Your stories good guy. Work a little more on your description work and you should do just fine. It is good short jack off material. I like it 5 stars mate.

You are doing a great job. I liked when he stuck his hard cock all the way up in her pussy as his buddys watched. And they got to watch him nut deep in her tight pussy. Keep it up!