All Comments on 'Penny's College Years - First Semester'

Hope there is more to come

Sorry but I could not get passed page 1. Please do not continue writing if this garbage is all you can come up with.

Great story, love the detailed build up. Can't wait to see the next part !

Thanks for sharing your work with us here. I'm looking forward to new adventures! I'm surprised that a reader so critical of your writing is confused about the use of passed and past. Thanks again.

I actually enjoyed it. But...I have some criticism here. Take it for what it is, just my opinion.

1) The reader can identify Penny by the second paragraph as a doormat. Hasn't had a good life, trying to work her way up. Her submission is therefore not dramatic or interesting. Further, we know more about Penny than Myrthe, who is only 2 dimensional, so I felt like I was just watching a train wreck. Much more fun, IMHO, for Penny to have a backbone but succumb anyway. See the author Couture for examples.

2) Wow, the spanking scene! Scorching! But..."Then she moved her hand to Penny's throat to hold her in place and keep her from screaming. She could still take shallow breaths but not breathe normally. Certainly not enough to scream." How tight is this grip? Sounds more like she's practicing auto asphyxiation. A simple one hand choke is not going to stop one from screaming. Further, who get flipped on their back and leaves their legs so open like that? Seemed unlikely without further inducement.

3) the present exchange is just depressing, but is leading in a good direction.

if this is what college life is about then no wonder no one wants to go this is just bad and you should leave it at just this one story

well I basically cringed through out this story, it's obviously not your typical lesbian erotica, I kept waiting for Myrthe to stop being such a twat, when that didn't happen I figured Penny would do the smart thing and run for the hills, but I'll wait for the next installment before I say it's a bad story, it's different and things that are different should always be given a chance.

Wow Penny is really pathetic. Poor delusional girl.

Looking forward to reading more! Thanks for sharing!

A 20' x 40' dorm room would be huge, not small, by any college's standards

There's not much else to say. The story was written with such a lack of drama or gripping tension that I scrolled through entire paragraphs and found I really didn't miss any developments. It was so perfunctory it may as well have been a grocery list.

I liked this story because I have no idea how it will progress. Not gonna lie, I hope it turns out to be sincere confusion at this point and that they fall in love. Can't help that I love happy endings, and so far, this journey has been different. Thanks for writing. I look forward to the next installment.

When are you going to write the next chapter?

good story and is getting really hot. would love to read more

Really liked it. Please do more. Your writing voice is really different and enjoyable.

Great start to this story i definitely would like to read more maybe the roommate doing more punishment and humiliation maybe making her stay nude at all times in room and make her dress as she wants and maybe have others involved in doing things to her and maybe outside games!

I think this is a very good story.I quite like the physical aspect of penny and the dutch woman's relationship. I know its 5 years old but if you could continue that'd be grand.