All Comments on 'Five Beautiful Words'

A very good story!

couple of minor details that can make it better ---

-- Literotica has editors who'll help with some of the finer points of your writings -

-- verb tense shifted a couple of times ("suggested we get in bed, and it is then I see she has a tube of KY jelly with her.")

-- word usage can be distracting ("The shear excitement of this" - sheer, not shear)

Also recommend changing the tag line for the story -- "she takes my anal cherry" sounds like he's gonna take it in the butt, but thankfully that's not what happened.

Again, a very enjoyable story! Keep them coming!

Thanks for the feedback! My first story and I may make some changes.

This is a true story, virtually every word, so your comment on that aspect is meaningless! As far as your other comments go, I will gladly accept that criticism! Oh, and thanks for being a dick as that's what porn site really needs!

Mucous Gracies senorita cullio spectacularrr. That's about the only five words in Spanish I know that's why I've got blue balls.

I had those five magic words. Her name was Suzanne in Newark. In case she reads this : Suzanne, "keep your hands above the table"

I enjoyed this true account of anal sex very much. You are an excellent writer.

Thanks for sharing it.