All Comments on 'A Load for the Road'

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For your first story, it is a good one and I can't wait to read more. Hopefully she and Vicki have some fun on their trip and Vicki joins the family when they get back too. Don't listen to the negative feedback. Some people don't understand "littles" or little space

Your "heroine" sounds like she's barely in middle school much less 19. Also, your use of cum and come is wrong: cum (noun), syn - sperm, jizz, the "sticky stuff". Come (verb), as in "Eeeek, I'm coming!" Or, "Make me come, please." Sorry if I sound like a pedantic English teacher, but there you have it.

Other than that, I thought your story was quite hot.

Is this supposed to be a comedy? Lol whoever wrote this must have no idea how a teenage girls brain works, or maybe they just simply enjoy their women retarded.

This was short and sweet... good for the first submission.

Write more :)

Try to make your characters more mature in the future. Some pretty decent writing, but the story fails to make the characters ring true.

Don't listen to all the bad comments, this is a very hot story and I would love to read more. Keep up the great work!

She is over 18 and acts and talks like a 5 year old. Acting like this with zero brain cells you think she could drive let alone go on a road trip. Lmao

it 3 but the baby talk was a real turn off.

Hiya my fellow lit friends! My name's BouncyBabyGirl, and I'm a 29 yr old female in a long term poly relationship with my dom couple. This is my first time writing erotica, and oh boy oh boy, I am having soooo much fun!

And from the looks of things...so are YOU 😘

The cunning language in these lascivious tales have been inspired by true events procured from my full-time life as a BabyGirl (aka "little"). Although all these stories are purely fictional, there are some tantalizing tidbits of truth that my lovers and I have shared whilst tangled in silky sheets ;) They are a mix of reality, personal fantasies, and some of your fantasies too, hehe! I love skating the fine line of what's acceptable and not...I do this in real life as well :)

Although my tone may come off sounding "ditzy" or "naive," this is all just part and partial to my whole lifestyle—this is who I am, this is how I speak, this is how I think, and this is how I live. I can’t think of a better way for you to get a glimpse into the true story of my Big Life as a Little: a series of unmentionable events!

Can't wait to share my many exciting experiences with you! Thank you all for your support and brutally honest feedback so far--I have so much to learn and can't wait to see what arises ;)

Cheers,

😘 BouncyBabyGirl

Ps...since I'm terribly new here, I do not know how to leave replies to your comments! 😱 So embarrassing, I know!!! But I really wanna connect with each of you and build a bouncy relationship together, so if ya wanna teach BabyGirl some new tricks, please let me know! Yippieeee thanks sooo much!

Loved it Baby Girl, don't change a thing about your writing style ! Stay true to your Little Baby Self... Sounds like others want you to change and go off in different directions, but don't. Love you Bouncy Baby Girl !! Write some more !!

That was so good! I wish I had a mommy and daddy to love my little pussy like yours does. Please write more soon and don't change anything about your writing style. I'm going to be cumming for days.

Fuck that was so hot I cummed three times.

The baby talk was not in the realm of possibility for someone 18 years old.

Very Horny

Would love my dad to fuckme with his big duck hard and deep in my hot pussy over and over

soooo HOT!

Is the daughter brain damaged? Because no 18 year old talks like that.

It's little space.

Honestly makes my pussy so wet.

Good wet story.

This story was really good, kinda fast paced but still very exciting and hot.

Loved the story and how the daughter got involved. Really hot, got my dick hard!

The daughter speaks like retarded 5 year old. And dad's initial dialogue sounds like he's correcting a puppy dog ("Naughty, Baby Girl - Bad girl") Other than that, the story really sucks . . . .

Loved it