All Comments on 'The New Neighbor Pt. 01'

Good start you've peaked my interest

Same here. Loved the story so far. More please!

Suggest you reread your typescript a few more times before posting or, better still, use an editor.

Poor construction, missing or additional words and changes of tense are present throughout and irritating.

I like the premise of the story and it should develop nicely whichever way you decide to take it.

You have piqued my interest, too!