by LittleBrain
This is a gripping story. But, please give a bigger bite at it in each chapter. Less that a page doesn't give time to enjoy your writing.
I take your point about bigger chapters but I'm trying to keep something flowing as I understand folks don't want to have too long a gap between chapters. Unfortunately time does not always permit longer spells of writing and I am not always sure when the next opportunity will arise.
At last they begin to know the secrets of Greg!
This story is getting very interesting and a bit complicated ...
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.
Please continue. I don't normally comment but this has me captivated!!
I'm enjoying this story a lot, and I look forward to more. Thank you for writing and sharing it!