All Comments on 'Loving Aunt and Mom'

If this is the start of your adventure please write the next section.

Yes, your story may be similar to others. But it is your story, and you need to tell it.

Your descriptions were good, so keep going. You'll get better with the more you do.

This was a solid effort, and I'm looking for more chapters.

You started with an interesting premise but I lost interest in the paragraphs that rolled in on themselves with disorganized structure or maybe just no structure. There are lots of editors on this website who can help you get organized for your future submissions. You just need to ask them.

Ignore 'How to improve' - Chapter 1.

Make sure you can spell 'writing'. (It only has one 't')

Write in sentences.

Start them with capital letters.

Ignore the negativity from the critics whose sole contribution to writing consists of birthday and Christmas cards!!!! At least you have the guts to try, I think the key is a good spell and grammar check along with a top editor!!!

Keep going, I'm sure you're over the most difficult part

I like 'car-sex' stories - especially incest car-sex stories where the others are unaware.

This was a good entry into the genre.

I have a little problem about leaving Gio and his Aunt to sleep in the car AT NIGHT and IN THE WINTER. Even with a blanket that would be too cold to be left over night. Also, I question sleep all night and until 8:47 am. The sun would have awakened them.

I gave you 5 stars for the sex and should have given you MINUS FIVE for LEAVING THEM IN THE CAR ALL NIGHT in WINTER

- is that the authors seem to ignore the fact that sex may not only involve a sound factor (that could possibly lead to detection), but also a strong element of smell - besides the vibrations in the back seat that even in a moving car may be detected by somebody also sitting in that seat.

Adding for this story more specificly:

1. Having the aunt sitting on top of him - even though she was petit - we're still supposed to believe the driving father can't see anything?

2. How do you - with her in that position, and sleeping - simply take off her panties and then put them back on without any problems - still undetected?

3. The wintercold (already addressed by others).

Yes, a story here could simply be a fantasy, but still, readers try to figure the plot. If it becomes too unrealistic, it gets difficult to identify with the story and its characters.

Please as more quick this made me so horny

Its good for your first story but you could add a lot more detail. Also if you could keep writing the story with more chapters that would be interesting. But as you proceed the main character should start fucking his mom in addition to his aunt. Good luck, would love to see more

Hope got his mom and aunt knocked up

Need more bro what happen this is super hot