I kept trying to stop but couldn't. I have run the race
many times and loved seeing you pump yourself up. You
probably won't get to keep it, sorry.
these very thing so many times, but its taken me 41 years to actually believe I deserved anything other than just playing it safe..excellent work :)
...I want to, for just once;
let go let it out.
Be me, right up front.
No holds barred.
Here I am, in your face.
Take it or leave it...
That verse bears repeating, again and again
an enjoyable read. You used so many borrowed phrases, ready or not, monday night q back etc, that it is clear that it was not unintentional, so it felt right
-- just a quick suggestion, consider putting the first line (any maybe some of the other common phrases) in italics, and breaking up the list of no's
A rebirth, a journey of self discovery, the coming out..
the list of " No's"...perhaps:
self-protective actions, self-editing.
No self-deprecating humor.
ambiguous remarks or second-guesses.
No Monday quarterbacking.
just an idea,
if you boil this down to it's key points
It would be a knock out poem
put it down and come back to it every few weeks and rewrite 1 verse
but probably the most powerfull. This is a statement of life and living that demands to be read.
"Sure, its scary.
Thats life, baby."
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