All Comments on 'Deathbed Confession'

Top-level writing from one of the best around. Nothing else to say.

Well Ollie,this is another fine mes you've gotten us into.

Well done as a rather baroque twist on the deathbed confession.

That old secret, certainly led to a life full of consequence, and of course was ironically not a secret at all to anyone involved, even the kids. Instead the wife was the only one kept in the dark.

Thanks for the story.

Looks like the "loose ends" she "tied up" turned into the noose she used to hang herself, and any "peace" she thought she'd get from such a selfish and cruelly timed "confession".

Poetic justice indeed.

twist in the wind, bitch

Excellent work.

Not depressing enough. Four stars due to a different twist on the death bed confession.

Another great story from you. However, it felt a bit too condensed. The emotions were rather reported than shown, which is perfecty understandable as Harold and Lizzy had a long time to come to grips with the situation. I would have liked the narration being more "as it happened" but this would surely have led to a much longer story - fine by me but a lot of additional work for you.

Thank you for your splendid work.

Easily one of my favorite stories, well done... Love the boomerang guilt falling back on the wife who tried to rid her conscience with her confession... 5*****

the bitch certainly outsmarted herself. she got punished, harry and lizzy had the family they deserved. truly an original view of the deathbed confession. she goes to her grave in agony, never finding the peace she sought.

What an amazing take on the death bed confession. 5* for such a great story

Long winded.

Hopefully the dying bitch gets to live a long time basking in her pain and the realization that she was the cause of everything. I could say more but why? The point is made.

Five Stars

this was a great story to read. i too don't like the death bed confessions stories as it tears the hearts out of the ones left behind. but in this story it was a complete turn around. she is the one that has to suffer for what happened. she caused it to happen and now she has to suffer for it. great writing

Good work. The switch from the flashback to the story as fleshed out by the other two was well-handled. Lots of irony. There could be a further twist when someone else gets to realise that what happened to Sam had been no accident. I especially liked the joke about Jim and his husband. I will favourite this.

A great read. Best story for a long time.

As the miller told his tale

Her Face, at First just Ghostly,

Turned a Whiter Shade of Pale

As She Realized

If Behind is in Front

Then Dirt in truth is Clean

Procol Harum

as usual. Nice twist. I saw it coming but that didn't lessen the enjoyment of the story. Thank you for your hard work.

Woodmanone

I'd say it very could happened. Great read.

the wife confessed to affairs and birthing other men's kids when it was too late for the cheated husband to do anything about it. Once it was mentioned in the story that her sister had children, I knew exactly where this was going simply because the Beast said he hated those stories, too. The revenge was obvious, but still felt good.

One helluva' goodin'

ROFL my A** off

Thanks for brightening my day into incandescence

You are, hands down, the best author I have come across here. Ever since I read "Hedge funds" , I have eagerly awaited your stories and needless to say, you have never dissapointed. I saw the ending for this story when reading through the wife's narration and loved it immensely when the scenario I had built up in my head came true. The poetic justice the cheater faces in your stories, is unmatched by any other author here. Eagerly awaiting your next story.

P.S : Please post more frequently :-)

No sex, no loving wife and you morons think this is a great story.Never should be in L.W. in the first place..

You telegraphed the twist, but I liked the mental transformation of Maggie. Hard to give 5 stars with no sex.

A very interesting plot, but

a shame it required Hal and

Lizzy to be just as evel as

Maggie and Sam.

Makes a story less entertaining,

when it contains nothing but turds.

And when you think about it, what

Hal and Lizzy did to Sam, was

worse than murder!

I'm glad the writer found writing

this story therapeutic.

At the same time sorry he needed

such a dramatic therapy.

Hope he can now tone down his

therapy and entertain his fans

with the quality (and moral) writing,

he's known for.

Thank you DFWBeast for your story.

I loved it, He tried to tell the dumb bitch to leave it alone. Wouldnt it be nice if women listened once in a while

This was an entertaining story, but some mistakes jumped out at me and detracted from my enjoyment. Climbing the corporate "latter?" (You made that mistake at least twice.) Try "ladder." Also, "Pittsburg?" It's "Pittsburgh." (Notice the "h" on the end.) You repeated that one a few times, too.

That being said, keep up the good work. Always enjoy your stories.

First writer, I will not give you a vote as I quit reading after Sam was brought in as first lover. I had already read that her sister and children were in next room so I knew how it was going. Second commenters, suck up, suck up. And finally SWINGERJOE commenting as anonymous must really burn but your key words spell out who you are.

5* from me.

Hysterical but true. Made me laugh loud enough I'm glad I was alone.

In my ending, she says thank you for their forgiveness, forgives them and tells them she wishes them every happiness and wants to be held by both of them and be a three person marriage for the few days she has left.

Nice, but a couple of questions. Why did Sam push the risky abortion if he was sterile? He could have just laughed and told her it wasn't his. Did he think he would lose access if he did that and could keep her if he didn't?

Also, it's a long way from Philadelphia to Pittsburgh.

Nevertheless, very nice story idea.

Annony.'s marriage. He found out his wife cheated on him his entire married life. She fucked over a 100 men during their marriage..

As usual, I’m writing these as I go, so some things might be over-taken by future events.

I’m not going to be surprised to find out that Harry and Lizzie have been carrying on an affair, maybe the kids are even his!

Also, I find it interesting that SHE’S concerned about Harry and Lizzie being in close proximity given her affair with Sam!

“She also prayed blood would be stronger than the pain of her betrayal.” – LOL, is that the same blood that DIDN’T keep HER from cheating with Sam?

It’s also interesting that the thought of Lizzie and Harold getting together AFTER she’s dead troubles her, when she obviously wasn’t too troubled by her affair with Sam!

Lizzie broke it off with Jim after Lizzie’s cancer diagnosis; because she saw that Jim would soon be available!

“Maggie had blossomed into a very attractive woman and was still so, even for a fifty-one year old.” – This confuses me; she’s looking at Harold and Lizzie, but talking about herself? I thought maybe it should have said “Lizzie,” but isn’t Lizzie younger than 51?

Sam not only killed Harold’s unborn child, but his “need” to keep it secret destroyed Maggie’s ability to EVER give Harry a child.

@thefranz – Maybe I’m misunderstanding you, but if the narration had been more “as it happened” we would have lost the twist at the end.

@Anonymous 07/27/17 Re: Editing – Randi is one of the best editors in the business, but nobody is perfect. I happen to be a notorious nitpicker, and one of my tests of a great story is when I’m so drawn into a story that I miss errors like that. I would hazard a guess that’s what happened to Randi!

@Anonymous 07/27/17 Re: “Nice” – He pushed the abortion because if she had her husband’s child she would probably end the affair. Also, he obviously wasn’t the loving person Maggie thought he was; he likely brought her to the shady doctor hoping/planning on the botched abortion! That way, if they ever DID get together he wouldn’t have to reveal his part in their inability to have children.

When I first started reading this I thought "oh no". I'm glad I kept on reading . It took quite a turn and finished strong. 5*

I have a problem with this type of story.

On the one hand, they are very triggering for me, but on the other hand, I like reading them. Pretty much how people don't want to lift the plaster to look at the wound, but just have to do it.

Your story was very well written and the plot worked well.

Jim was a great plot device!

"Lizzie broke it off with Jim after Lizzie’s cancer diagnosis; because she saw that Jim would soon be available!" - Besides the fact that the relationship with Jim was phony, obviously it was HAROLD who would soon be available!

Thanks for setting the standard that minor contributors, like myself, aspire to. You are, if not the best, at least in the top three authors on this site.

but still, a better tale than most in the sub-category.

Certainly one of the better writers around, and one of the better stories. The smugness of the wife, planning her mea culpa, which would also leave the lives of those she harmed in tatters, was turned back on her. A fitting hanging on the gallows she built for someone else. Great production quality in everything about this. Look forward to your next story. There is no doubt that the Beast is one of the top five writers posting today..

On one life to live or some other soap opera.

I liked it for several reasons and all of them revolve around my absolute disgust for a cheater. Well written and though I thought I knew where it was going that was only because I knew that this author wouldn't write a wimp/cuck ending. Well done, I say again.

Now, for the annony who wanted to know why Sam let Maggie continue on with the abortion even though he knew that he was sterile, know this. Sam had the affair with a married woman whose husband he had no respect for and I suspect a deep loathing for. The abortion was just another manifestation of that deep, deep disrespect. You know, kind of like the wife had for her husband too.

That all being said, the writing was first class, the editing was professional in quality. I am beginning to suspect hat Randi's real talent lies in editing, even though I have always looked at her as one of the top three best recent posters on this site. Thanks to all involved in this story for their good work.

pappy

The way Harry & Lizzy put it to her Liz giving Harold the Children she couldn't. Sam being made a Wheel Chair Cuck. as he was so proud of Doing to Harold. (cuck) that is. To know his Brother - in- law. The one whose woman he Let abort her own child by the same ass was Most Excellent.

I really enjoyed your devious little story.

Boyd Percy

her conditions morphs from barely able to speak and dying words to a couple of weeks to think about it? Still 5* Thanks

Yea, DFW! Well done!

The tidbit about Sam knowing the child wasn't his and yet taking her to get the abortion was priceless.

There have been so few good LW stories on here since the "big" submission by all the past stars a few weeks ago...Thank you for this one! I enjoyed the twist. Can't wait for your next tale...a "5" from me. Thanks for the story.

"Buckeye Fan"

5*

Good one.

I feakin lived it for last 43 years

Okay Beast, that was a good one. Yes, I know where you are as I used to skydive where DFW is today.

From one good ole boy to another, thanks for sharing your tale with us.

Sincerely,

Santacruzman (guess you can tell where I live now)

Great story what a twist to the death bed confession. Very well thought out and written. Good entertaining story

Yes it is a 5*

Please keep writing and I will keep reading!

I suspected where it was going because Maggie was being a little too smug in her recollections of her affair and the details, like her sister's depression, were too obvious to ignore.

The details became a little too tedious and convoluted and I found myself a couple of times wanting to have it wrapped up but I stuck with it and it mostly makes sense.

The wrap up, "Even more distressing was the realization that in a week or two, it wouldn't even matter.", was delicious. Maggie's "confession" was also a gloat. What a shock for a self centered person to find out that she didn't have a clue and soon she would be completely irrelevant.

As soon as I read the cheating lover had an accident, it was easy to know that her husband knew about her cheating. But a very good story.

I can't help it. Stories like that just make me feel good. Paybeck is such a treat!

5*s

I love a happy ending! 😎

Pittsburg (no H) is a small town in Kansas, not really big enough for corporate headquarters of big businesses though.

A VERY GREAT STORY! it truthfully gives new meaning to B T B!

There are many ways of creating that fire - but; it all comes out ashes in the end! Keep up the good work!

A unique twist on the long past affair plot, with excellent execution, and compelling drama and suspense. For some reason her lover facilitating her abortion, totally needlessly and selfishly, and thus expanding his own sterility into her barren womb, was the epicenter of focusing on what a complete asshole and monster she thought she was in love with. Thus revealing her own monstrous evil and betrayal of all that was decent, loving, and worthy. She became the same soulless corpse Sam had been, and did so under the self delusion of love and romance. In her attempt to have her cake and eat it too, she polluted her relationships, and deprived herself of ever having a loving family. How tragic, and justly deserved.

A great concept, well played. Bravo!

I started not to read this story because I was thinking it was like the rest. You took this story and carefully set it up beautifully. I gave it a 5.

This was horrible! Not one single character to like. We have the devil himself who kills and unborn baby and to what end? What was the reason behind him not telling her he was sterile? It made absolutely no sense! He supposedly loves the woman and betrays her in by getting her to kill her unborn baby for no reason? Then we have a husband who is even worse than his slut wife. Not only does he also have an affair but he tries to kill his lover's husband for killing his baby! Then we have a husband who still loves his wife after killing his unborn son? This thing had more holes than a slice of swiss cheese and not a single character that you can even partially like. Horrible!

Some of the subplots of the LW genre that drives me a fucking wall is the often used..rather silly...and poorly done wife deathbed confession. Hypothetically if

this kind of story is done correctly ... it could be quite entertaining. But up until now no one has ever done this story correctly.

When I say " done correctly" I am referring to a full in depth analysis of what the wife or husband on the deathbed is actually doing and why

FINALLY this author has brilliantly demonstrated that a deathbed confession revealing a secret of 20 or 30 years ago is simply a self centered demonstrably destructive act. In these confessions LW stories -- usually the wife - knows she is going to die and claims to want to confess to relieve her conscience.

But in fact the ONLY reason a spouse would reveal on a deathbed a long-term long ago marital affair is to INTENTIONALLY cause pain and harm and destruction to the surviving members of the family and spouses after the cheating dying spouse is dead.

And what is worse in this sort of LW subplot is that none of the other authors... until now... has ever explored this avenue. Invariably after the spouse has made his / her deathbed confession ....nobody in the story ever asks or even suggests WHY the dying cheating spouse has decided to suddenly confess.

Bye the way The other type of LW subplot features where the wife in order to get revenge over **perceived** injustice -- something that she THINKS her husband has done or something where the wife has been told without any PROOF ... is to tie up the husband to the bed or chair ...and then have sex with other men in front of him. This of course is absolutely ludicrous and those kind of stories simply never work because the authors that write them are in slope headed morons and unable to grasp basic reality .

Tying up your spouse and forcing them to watch ...against their will ... and doing physical harm to husband is a CRIME.

It is not bad behavior. It is a god damn fucking crime!!! And in almost every one of these pathetically stupid tie up the husband stories that aspect of the story is never explored.

I agree with you 100% on the criminal aspect of tying up husband for revenge stories,

it would appear from your comment you have a reasonably good enough grasp of the English language to express yourself well, so all I can suggest is that you write one,

the ball is in your court......

In my opinion, a story is always weakened when the betrayer or betrayed commits a crime. I liked this story, but if Harry arranges to have something done about Sam, even if he doesn't know what, and a criminal act ensues, then Harry's a criminal. So many writers turn their betrayed victims into criminals - assaulting, defrauding, framing, even killing one or both affair partners. It's hard to sympathize with a criminal. What the cheaters did was bad, but then the betrayed commits a crime and ends up being a worse human being.

As it is, I feel bad for Lizzie, especially. Maggie is her own punishment, and I pity her. Sam's an asshole, and I don't feel too much one way or the other. Harry's a criminal who initiated actions that crippled a person, and I hope he does some jail time. He's the worst of the four.

Hopefully with a little consideration, Maggie realizes that most things have worked out for the best, but maybe somehow gets close enough to a phone to report her husband, and he and the seedy characters who crippled Sam are all caught and punished.

Compelling story . . . I suspected what was coming (and that Harry was Becky and John's father), but you pulled it off well. My disappointment is only in my personal view that I really wanted to be on Harry's side, but his role in Sam's accident took away that possibility. I really enjoy clever (and legal) revenge a lot more.

Interesting comment. Who says what happened to the interloper was a crime? In most societies, what the two cheaters did was a crime. Until quite recently, historically speaking, it was a crime in this country. Your idea of crime is very quaint. Most people seem to believe that crimes are morally unjustified acts against others.

I could make quite a good argument that what happened was not a crime, at all, but justice. That could be debated, but most people seem to feel that proportional response is not criminal, but just. That you do not, is curious. I, for one, find a delicious irony in the outcome. I also believe you misinterpreted Harry's comment. He was applauding this story, I believe.

Best one I've read in a while.

Absolutely brilliant!

Why shouldn't he have killed Sam? Sam was a vile abortion causer.

Should we take these into our own hands.NO. But what about when these fails to act such as too produce an outcome that is proportionate, equitable, and timely?

What Sam did, and also the dying wifedid , is as repugnant as shooting someone for noreason, or animal abuse....and they were going to get a pass on it

Death doesn't really affect you. When you're dead, you're dead, it's the people left behind that have to deal with your death.

I liked it. I had guessed early on that Lizzy and Harold had probably figured it out and likely the kids, or at least one, was his. The first half was predictable selfish career woman but the journey after was what made this story unique and enjoyable. BTB? Yeah, at least a little but it more what's good for the goose is good for the gander...except the goose doesn't like being on the other side. Thanks!

Basically it was becoming clear before Harold and Izzy began their confession, but it was still interesting and to a certain degree believable.

One of your best. She was selfish to the end and it came back to bite her.

A well done reversal. So creative if somewhat foreshadowed. Loved it. This is a good day of well written stories. Two so far. The quality of stories has withered and this one helps me have hope.

Somebody who has not yet read I offer to read OLHIDEKI's story "How Does it Feel to be a Cuckold?" . That story's meat is same (not similar) but with fool of humor and I gave 5***** as I did to this story.

I don't know why, but this scenario felt like it would turn out this way from the beginning. The only real surprises to me were: 1) Hal setting up the "accident" and 2) that the aborted fetus was most definitely Hal's.

Find job all around, one of the best of your works (and I've enjoyed all that I've read so far). Thanks!

nearly passed this by as more "conventional" cheating wife tales are my preference, but held me till the end. good read 5*

My new favorite story! Great job, Beast. Please keep writing.

This twisted tale is as good or better than everything I read. I plan to go through all your stories with great expectations.

Thanks for sharing your talent, time and effort with me.

She is pissed because the tables were turned. She caused not to have children. Her cheating was way worse then her sister and husbands.

Certainly therapeutic, but a shame it was left there and not finished.

The story might also have felt more fleshed out if the children actually appeared directly, no matter how small a role.

of awsomeness.

Five Stars!

I will read this again requently

...focused on YOUR therapy instead of on OUR comments. Write your stories and your readers will follow or not, as they choose. If they are unhappy with your stories you may have to refund the money it cost them.

Very nice story, with a nice heavy application of karma. I guess it ended where it should, since with a few weeks to live she really can't come to much peace. Confession is not always good for the soul; if she doesn't recover before her end, it will leave pain for the survivors but she did ask for it.

if this is truly biographical, you have my condolences. I only lost my first two wives to two different forms of cancer.

Nice!

You are truly a good writer. A real twist on an old story. Thank you.

The DJ

Very delicate, but oh so thorough BTB. And on her death bed!! Can't think of anything sweeter than her dealing with what her selfish actions caused and knowing there's no way back. Love the punishment for the cheating skank. I mean she killed the man's child, she deserves all she got and more.

What a self centerd birch. 5+

Sam was a real monster in this story, though Maggie wasn't much better. We'll never know Sam's motivation for encouraging Maggie to have the abortion, maybe he just hated the fact that he could never have children of his own. Is it possible that Sam arranged for the doctor at the "less than reputable" clinic to render her sterile on purpose? I know how evil that sounds, but is it any more evil than killing another man's baby - which is exactly what Sam did. Maggie and Sam both richly deserved everything they received.

Great story. Lizzie and Harold get a spouse and family that truly loves them. Now Maggie has to deal with the pain of betrayal, knowing she can only blame herself. Watching them selflessly care for her, even after all she's done to them, will feed her guilt for the short time she has remaining. Always a pleasure, Beast. Thanks!

Well done, clever and well written. Five out of five.

It was an unusual BTB story and I really like those. And it was just the right length - not to long and not too short.

You say it wasn't realistic. But I thought it was very plausible.

Look at Shania Twain. Her husband married her best friend and she married her best friend's husband (after everybody divorced of course).

Steve

The last two stories I read of yours were excellent beyond all means. I wish you'd write like this again. You are excellent.

The title says it all - five stars.

Five times five stars.

well done......bill

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I hope that, with this story, you have retired the genre. Great job!

You have 5 stars from me. Loved how Maggies betrayal backfired on her.

Absolutely 5*. No body burns a bitch like you do. Saw it coming, but loved every word.

THIS WAS AN EXCELLENT PAYBACK PIECE. IT'S NOT NEARLY ENOUGH BUT SHE'LL A WEEK OR TWO OF AWARENESS THAT IT WAS SHE WHO BAKED THE SHIT PIE THAT WILL BE HER LAST SUPPER.

5 GLOWING STARS

Man, I avoided reading this story for a long time thinking it was going to be a downer. I could not have been more wrong. This was creative and well presented. You kept it up beat despite the deception by the wife. I'm tired of reading stories whereas the wife does the dirty deed and still comes out smelling like a rose and winning. In this story the husband is the hero (in my eyes) who gets his revenge in the end and still comes out on top while trying not to make a big deal out of it. BRAVO.BRAVO. I loved it 5*!!!

5 stars for the writing, but why in the hell would you think anyone could approve. MAKE the switch bitch Stay with a cheating whore and breed your love??? GET REAL! 3 stars stays... I KNOW you can do better than this sorry excuse for a story