All Comments on 'A Guy and His...? Ch. 57: Birth'

I'm holding my side from laughing so much because of the ending lol.

You have a great concept and good imagination. You've created a nice mythology to support your story, but you are in desperate need of an editor. The lack of punctuation, and misuse of idioms and homophones render the story unreadable at some points. If you decide to get an editor, pull the story, combine 3 or 4 chapters and resubmit it as a 15 or 20 chapter set. Just my two cents.

It's the same with all your story's I'm hooked sod the grammar it's entertaining and funny same as the lost emperor I'm hooked on that too plus the latest one that hooked me yesterday I'm hoping for much much more from you so please carry on writing cos I love it thank you. p.s. Sorry about my grammar lol

This one page at a time suks real bad.

Baby maker!!!