by carsonshepherd
Carson, I just love this heartbreaking tale. What a wonderful first poetry post! Can't wait to hear more from you in the way of poetry.
The broken, wandering diction evokes grief beautifully and with faithful intensity. It is so easy to write bad poetry about powerful emotions, and so difficulty to express them well. This really captures the essence of feeling in language vital, strong, and yet unobtrusive. It achieves that enviable quality: the words step aside, and the emotion speaks.
Reads like it could have been written by James Ellroy. Very good poem. Please write some more. Gave it a 5.
sweet, stunning, incredible - I read it twice and blinked away tears each time.
~Honey
I wish I knew something about poetry so I could say why I liked it so much. It felt real, like I knew them.